Harmless Habits

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Oral hygiene is a necessary and healthy part of any pony's life that must be diligently maintained. But what happens when a healthy habit becomes something far more sinister? What happens when brushing and flossing get taken too far?

Equestria's stupidest intervention, that's what.

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Impress Me

Impress Me #1 · Mar 31st, 2013 · 1 · ·

Although there could have been a little more detail to what they were doing, this fic was beyond enjoyable! I could imagine the group all huddled around a pissed off Colgate harassing her over her obsession. I could also imagine Derpy with her cute scrunchy face. 9/10

Fluid Apple

Fluid Apple #2 · Mar 31st, 2013 · 1 · ·

This was just so painful to read because of Colgate's irrational friends, and that made it a great story!

Trashy the Trashman

Trashy the Trashman #3 · Mar 31st, 2013 · · ·

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Thank you! I agree that it could have been expanded on a fair bit, but this was more of a side-project while I work on a few others so I didn't want to go too far with it. I had fun writing it, though, and if you had fun reading it then I guess that's all that matters!

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Not gonna lie, the first half of your comment scared the crud out of me. Thank you, though! Glad you liked it!

Sparkler Hooves

Sparkler Hooves #4 · Apr 1st, 2013 · · ·

Cute! I love it!

Karkadinn

Karkadinn #5 · Apr 1st, 2013 · · ·

What I really liked about this one was the character dynamics. You actually made them feel like a second set of main characters, contrasting each other quite well, even if it was only for the sake of a one shot gag.

Could've done with a bit of an expansion on Bon Bon, perhaps, she's the only one who didn't seem so well-defined.

KieranRariPie

KieranRariPie #6 · Jun 2nd, 2013 · 1 · ·

Haha I liked how she kept saying she didnt have a bad habit of brushing. I enjoyed lyra's vague realization that she had a worse obsession than she thinks of colgate's. What about having an alternate ending? Where as Lyra leaves, colgate goes to the bathroom and locks the door and starts talking to toothpaste, toothbrush, &mouthwash saying "dont worry they dont know what they were talking about. The bad ponies are gone now. We are a family. Not a problem " lol

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