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Draconian Soul


Proof that I'm not dead. I was just in a slumber, waiting for reason to rise again. I might have found that reason.

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The weakest can become the strongest, and the unruly can become the leaders. Fate has a funny way of doing that to even the most unlikely of ponies. They may not know it yet, but a group of unsuspecting youth are going to be the saviors of Equestria when the Elements of Harmony aren't capable of it. Hell is rising in the land and things are bound to get worse. The situation is surely dangerous...

But nothing is more dangerous than a group of determined, out of their league kids.

Chapters (5)
Comments ( 22 )

Interesting choice in having pumpkin cake being the assertive one and getting in trouble. I like the premise though I do wonder on how you are going to portray Pinkie Pie. I would think she would be important in their lives but I wonder in what way? Sometimes she is seen as an older sister and others times as just a beloved baby sister. I have also seen a story where the twins don't appreciate her, or her talents, when they got older (at least until some of Pinkie's friends showed them how their attitude was wrong).

While I am wondering what kind of hijinx an adventure will give them I am even more interested in what you plan to do with the character interactions and how where you have taken the major characters in 10 years time.

If I were you, I'd at least mention that this is either connected to, or inspired by egophiliac's sliceofponylife.tumblr.com universe. Not only are you using the artwork from it, but pretty much all of the contents (at least in the first chapter) are pretty obviously directly connected to the events depicted in that tumblr. It's usually just considered good taste to mention when you're drawing a direct inspiration from another artist/author so that the original can get due credit (or at least pay some lip service to someone that you feel is worth modeling yourself after)

Comment posted by Draconian Soul deleted Mar 29th, 2013
Comment posted by Draconian Soul deleted Mar 29th, 2013

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True. That's actually something I forgot to do, and in hindsight even though it's not going to be a full blown copy of the idea, it should have been mentioned.

Thanks, I'll keep that in mind next time:twilightsheepish:

Enjoying this and can't wait to see where you take it next.

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Why thank you. Hope you stick around for the ride. It's gonna be a long one.

2352752 Well, I like The Cakes and I like stories about Pound and Pumpkin at this age, so I'm excited.

I see you've read Slice of Life....
Not bad for a story DT, so far so good.:moustache:

Have a like and a follow.

The hell with it, have a Watch too:pinkiehappy:

Almost put myself into a comma 5 times already.

I think the word you want is "coma". Unless somehow Storm Chaser nearly did get stuck in one of these five times--->,

“Not really easy to change your personality on the fly now is it? If so, you wouldn't be the little deviant ya are now.”

Defiant? Or is Pumpkin Cake a fillyfooler?

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Deviant-Differing from a norm or from the accepted standards of a society.

That should answer your question.

2377551 also slang for a homosexual, but I see what you were meaning now

Anyways, how goes the progress for chapter 4? You said it would probably be published saturday, right?

I gotta say, this story seems to be hitting a lot of the same beats as Slice of Life. Mind you, that's not a bad thing as I love that comic and I'm loving the personalities you set up for Pound and Pumpkin as well.

i got confused while reading this. Had to make sure i was still in the right story:rainbowlaugh:

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Like I said, just a short interlude to set up future events. I'm by no means shifting characters and the next chapter should focus back on the Cake's and their dilemma.

Don't tell me Pumpkin died :raritycry:

Anyways, his is a pretty good story :pinkiesmile:

You deserve :moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache: five mustaches out five mustaches for that XD

This is your first story? It's amazing! 5 out of 5 moustaches, my friend! :moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache:
Totally going to read the next chapter.

Also, I saw that it's incomplete. I hope you're going to finish it; this could really go a long way.

Why did Pumpkin have to die?
Why, why, why?!!?? :raritycry::raritycry::raritycry:

When will the next chapter come out? I NEED MOAR!

Goof job. You made Pumpkin completely unlikeable and a jerk so that when she died, we wouldn't feel too sad. That's actually a clever way to make killing of a character easier for us.

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