Kevin was a human, and then he ends up in Equestria. Oh, he’s still a human; sorry if that came off as unclear.
Anyway, he ends up in Equestria, a land inhabited by strange creatures… That is, the creatures aren’t particularly strange, but their ability to speak English is.
Ugh, never mind… Just read the story.
A one-shot parody of common clichés in the “Human in Equestria” genre.
This is just me having fun. No offense is meant to any author whose story contains any of the story elements that I parody here.
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Not too bad. It's a bit stilted, but I assume you were doing that on purpose.
Have a mustache
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Element of fingers oooo-kay
lol
I love you. Have my babies plz? k thx.
Oh damn, literally 20min ago I was reading over the hills and through the wood and thought of this exact idea, like down to the letter.
Dude that's creepy
Love it. Nailed down most of the beaten to death cliches. Let this fic be a lesson in what NOT to do if one is going for originality in the HiE genre.
my god the origanalty
Evidently I didn't use enough clichés in my own HiE stuff. I will atone.
“You can eat when I’m a princess."
That was brilliant. The whole thing not just the sentence that I quoted above. Of course, that was the sentence that made me laugh the hardest so of course I had to quote it. If I didn't then everyone else wouldn't fully appreciate it, and then the whole story would be ruined. Aren't I great for not ruining your story???
Where's the part with the changlings? Any good cliche story has changlings as a plot device!!
Welp.
It's been done, a parody of a parody of something that wasn't serious in the first place.
*stands up, walks out of house, runs into the street and gets hit with a cement mixer*
The only cliche he missed was Lyra's human obsession, but that can't be called a cliche can it? In some stories it's actually pretty well done other than OOH I SEE HOOMANS WITH FEENGERS I WANT, instead of actual, deep reasoning which I see in some.
That ending was so beautiful it brought tears of laughter to my eyes.
You read one you read them all, I suppose.
That was fantastic. Oh, so fantastic. And the "Manatee." I see what you did there.
I think that the sweetest part in all this is that my story contains none of these stereotypes.
This should totally get featured. Best fic ever.
HA! This is glorious, I love it. All bunch of funny stuff in one glorious package, well done. Out of all things, I loved this part:
I had a good chuckle at that part, well done indeed man
Hmm. This has:
-Main character as an angsty teenager with a troubled home
-Main character goes to Equestria by dying
-Lavender Unicorn Syndrome
-Seventh element of harmony B.S.
-Fluttershy caring for the main character first
-Going to Twilight for answers next
-Terrible Applejack spelling
-Random prophecies
-Odd tense change here and there
All in all, a damn good summary of what not to do in an HiE.
Twilight-level irony at its finest
oh and suddenly moustache
Yeah, this is pretty much what I've come to expect out of humanfics. Excellently done.
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*goes on murderous rampage on people who use asterix's in comments to indicate actions/sequences of events that are unrelated to the comment or the story*
I have only one bad thing to say about this story.
You forgot to include an out of place link to a song you think fits the moment.
I enjoyed it
I think you just wrote an HIE story, and decided to say "This is a parody."
HAVE MY LIKE!!! XD
That was hilariously epic~!
Haven't read many human-in-equestria stories, but I still enjoyed the hell out of this. Good job.
You made a typo. You wrote "manatee" but it should have been "dugong". Common mistake, they're both blobby sea creatures.
Another one of these? Meh. At least it's not "Luna does X", but still a 4k word meta feature-bait.
So much 4th wall breaking!!
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Side note: My name is Kyle. How dare you insult my name. Thank you.
This is very entertaining. Though I pity the relative newcomers to fimfiction who might not recognize it as parody.
2349322 It's stated cleary in the intro. I presume most people read those.
Which means I’ll have to bring my friends, too,” Twilght grumbled.
*Twilight
I remained straight faced up until this line...
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Then I busted a lung laughing! It made the whole fic! That was excellent!
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Random spelling errors are a vital part of the genre.
hahaha, my good sir you have all my WTF's of the week!
Better than most HiE's by far. At least this one was genuinely funny.
As parodies go, this isn't bad. It's got its fair share of chuckle-worthy pieces, but I can't shake the feeling that it seems like it's trying too hard.
Good job lampshading the worst parts of the genre, though. Someone should compare this to every bad HiE out there and see where the tropes line up.
Oh, gee... Good morning, everybody
2348275 <3
2348478 Oh, uh... Kevin was actually a changeling the whole time
2349237 You're welcome. ;)
2349345 Oh, that's correct. Twilght is my new OC (originalcharacterdonotsteal).
...Just kidding. Thanks for pointing that out. :)
And I'm glad people have enjoyed it. I hope you had as much fun reading it as I did writing it. :D
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That explains... quite a lot.
Morning?! It's half 4 in the afternoon where I am!
Gotta hate time zones.
Nice job, but I'm missing the clichés "Human gets magical powers", "Human gets turned into a pony" and "Human works in the spa".
Damn. I was thinking of writing something along these lines, roughly titled "Mean Army Guys With Big Guns Go Equestria And Also Pony Sex". I'm glad you beat me to the punch, though, because this was hilarious. (I was born with the soul of a lawyer–in that I do not possess one–and thus lack the hilarity necessary to make something like this work. Unfortunately, I'm also stupid, so I may still try anyway.)
2348734 The only thing he left out was "People who talk in the theatre", but that's cliche as well, 'cause ponies are genre-savvy.
Manticore.
Multicure.
Manicure.
Manatee.
:D
HOLY SHEET!
This fanfic was so badly written, cliche filled, and had so much destroyed plot, had bits randomly thrown in together, written as if the author forgot soething and added it in post-script, and reminds me of every single fanfic I have downvoted...
I LOVE IT
Okay, this is a serious comment. No really.
Wow, I wasn't sure HiE could be this bad. Deliberately or otherwise.
Guess that means we'll have to stick with them changing to OP OC self-insert Alicorns ... colored black and red ... who fall from the sky, monologue about their epically tragic lives, have either Celestia or Twilight fall for them -- Oh wait, that's already been parodied. Never mind.
2348755 -Lavender Unicorn Syndrome
What on earth is that?
2349342 That would be the logical thing to do so no.