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Oh no! The Apple family is at risk of losing their farm! They need to make money and fast! They owe 1,500 bits to the landlord of the property! How can a farm pony come up with that kind of money? The cutie mark crusaders have a plan. In this comedic story the CMCs try their hands in alchemy (turning base metals into gold) to get the money the Apple family needs. need. Will they be able to do it in time?
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This should be interesting.
Good so far!
2327670>>2327614 I'm glad you guys are enjoying it, I almost had chapter 3 done then for some reason it all just POOF.
It might be up later today. I'm gonna go cry now XD
this cannot turn out well,
Why? because of Murphy's law that's why
2328303 Aw man, it sucks when that happens, save often, backup whenever possile.
Well... time to force myself to write.
Now that that chapter's out of the way I'll have more fun writing
getting it inside should be easy, they have a ramp to their treehouse if I recall correctly. but even if that doesn't work, they can just take it up one peice at a time, it'll take a little while but it'll get done.
could you perhaps, just maybe, make the chapters a teensy tiny bit longer?
that is, if its alright with you...
2331385 Glad to know you like it. I'm PLANNING on two more chapters but it's not set in stone. I will try to make them longer
and if I'm in the mood to write a tad more in a minute, I'll have the next chapter up before I go to bed 
2331412
sweet! i love the prospect of this. It's just such a cool idea.
However i would understand if you don't get any more done tonight. I'm not a writer myself but i plan on starting soon enough and i know how hard it can be to write. Or you could just be lazy. That's fine too. I can still relate.
Ah, Full Metal Alchemist style alchemy. I like it. Clearly at least one of them has some aptitude for alchemy or nothing would have happened. There might be a cutie mark in this after all.
Compete? Awww, this was getting good. I wanted to know what became of all the metal, it must have done something.
2332127 Well I never thought about what happened to the metal. If I ever decide to make a sequal (Not saying I will) that may be a good place to start :) Also I'm glad you liked it
I loved this story, that ending was so funny!
The story is short and sweet like most good things in life.
It seemed to end rather abruptly but that might have just been my fast reading speed.
anyhow i enjoyed this quite a bit.
2332537 Thank you I'm so glad you enjoyed my story
2333179 Sadly I do agree with you on the ending being a bit short. I was tired when writing it and I probably should have waited to finish it.
Cheating brony, you added an epilogue! Thanks!
Good ending, were you inspired by that brony wanting to know what happened to the rubble?
2334206 Possibly :) I also wanted to submit this to EQD in HOPES they'd put it up and it needed like 200 more words XD Glad you liked the ending
Hopefully I'll get on the sequel real soon.
2332127 Thanks to you I have the base idea for the sequel so expect that soon (hopefully with longer chapters XD )
Granny Smith yelled before trotting off angrily mumbling a few words that no filly should ever here.
Change here-hear
"What a strange letter" I though out loud.
Change though-thought
And so far this is sooo funny!
2335887 I'm glad you are liking it :) Also thank you for making me aware of those errors :)
made my way the the hill, bare of apple trees like we agreed.
Think ya mean down the hill? Or something like that?
(The The Hill?)
Just tryin to help.
2335933 lol thanks :)
Great story! And sooo funny!
2336263 I'm so glad you liked it!
Yay!
so that's what happened to the metal, it exploded into gold shavings! It might take a while but if you collected them all, you'd have a fair ammount of money there. 
I received this from EQD "Thank you for your submission. However, due to issues with comma use, saying a farm can lose itself, and capitalization, it cannot be forwarded to the pre-readers. This does not count as a strike." Can someone find these errors and point them out for me? Thank you so much!
2340971 Huh that's strange.
I will look into it for you.
2341352 thanks a lot! :)
2341360 No prob.
I'll let you know if I spot anything.
Alright! Who are the jerks that said they don't like this story?
I'll give them a piece of my mind!
Chapter One Errors
After the peels are all out applejack and I set out 4 bowls on the table.
Put a cap on Applejack.
The door swung open and hit my flank so hard I flew outside from the open window where I was standing and into the pigs' mud pit.
Change pigs'-pig's
except this wasn't his usual "eeyup"
Change eeyup-Eeyup
2341993 Thanks :)
Chapter Two Errors
I slowly trotted over to the tree house, deep in thought. Lose the farm? We can't lose the farm! This book HAS to work.
The thoughts should start and begin with '
I`t's turnin' cheap metal into expensive gold!
Change I`t's-It's
Chapter Three Errors
We all began pushing with all the might 3 fillies could possible muster.
Change 3-three
"So that's where the hay's been going..."
Again start with ' and end with ' and make it italic.
Chapter Four Errors
" Now we read!"
You put a space between " & Now
Remove the space.
I put the though of saving the farm into my head
Change though-thought
Will there be a sequel, because the ending is practically screaming "sequel".
2388507 I am planning on writing one :)