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Impossible Numbers

Joined December 2011
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The pegasus who would one day become Commander Hurricane started out as a grunt. A patrol officer for the captured town of Pteryx, Hurricane recalls one incident during her time there that changed her view of the Pegasus Empire -- and of her close friend, Pansy.

First Published
3rd Feb 2012
Last Modified
19th Mar 2012

Comments ( 16 )

#1 · Chapter 1 · 137w, 10h ago · · ·

I really liked this.  I'm still trying to bounce around some of the details, but I'd love to see more of this.

#2 · Chapter 1 · 129w, 4d ago · · ·

>>185235

I'm late in responding, but thanks all the same! I had planned to write a version for each of the pony tribes, but I can't guarantee anything yet.

This story has been re-edited and resubmitted, in accord with this ponychan review. I've also submitted the revised version for a second review. The general outline shouldn't change much, but I might add or rewrite segments in the future. My eventual goal is to get it ED.com-worthy.

The details in here may also be fleshed out in another story I'm planning, but I can't confirm anything yet.:unsuresweetie:

#3 · Chapter 1 · 129w, 9h ago · · ·

I really liked this. Very well written, and quite touching.

#4 · Chapter 1 · 129w, 9h ago · · ·

I really enjoyed that the story was from Commander Hurricane's perspective. That was very well written. you receive +1 brohoof :pinkiehappy:

#5 · Chapter 1 · 129w, 5h ago · · ·

This was very good :D I particularly liked the representation of the pre-hearth world design

#6 · Chapter 1 · 129w, 3h ago · · ·

The dragon fight was a bit confusing otherwise this story was awsome :D!

#7 · Chapter 1 · 129w, 9m ago · 1 · ·

This is a really good short story and imagining of the pre-Equestria world that I think fits nicely with what we know of that period and the characters who inhabited it. Hurricane and Pansy are portrayed well and given a delicious level of development, and I especially liked how well you were able to portray the bias that comes with a first person perspective,  making it hard to tell who the real "bad guys" are, if you could call them that.

#8 · Chapter 1 · 128w, 6d ago · · ·

Wow, this is just amazing. Your detail to the politics and nuances of pre-Equestria life is fantastic and the narration is spot-on, full of character and the reflection that comes with experience. It really feels like the real world reflected in this pony society; you do an excellent job here.

#9 · Chapter 1 · 128w, 5d ago · · ·

This was very awesome and well written!

#10 · Chapter 1 · 128w, 4d ago · · ·

Interesting...

I love this community. People can take characters from a show within the show and write something like this about them!

#11 · Chapter 1 · 128w, 3d ago · · ·

Truly brilliant. I love the style of writing; a sort of historic autobiography.

Not to mention you don't see much on characters like Hurricane so it's refreshing to see someone take on the eyes of a 'new' character.

Deserves way more views, and definitely a thumbs up and favourite from me :pinkiehappy:

#12 · Chapter 1 · 127w, 6d ago · · ·

Fascinating world building you have have here, and a great story. It definitely gets a spot on my wall of oneshots.

#13 · Chapter 1 · 127w, 21h ago · · ·

For a oneshot it was amazingly well written. Congratulations and thanks for sharing.

It always amazes me how you writers can take a character from the show and provide them with such a strong back story. And one which seems to not only not intrude, but even to fit so much in the cannon story. Kudos for that.

#14 · Chapter 1 · 123w, 3d ago · · ·

This was great!  I really like the character you gave Hurricane and Pansy.  It's also an interesting take on pre-Equestrian history, eh.  Have you thought about writing more about Hurricane's rise to lead the pegasi?

#15 · Chapter 1 · 121w, 4d ago · · ·

Late as I am, thank y'all for the positive responses. :ajsmug: It's great to see so much encouragin' feedback.

>>566318

No plans on that front yet, I'm afraid, but I have been considering fics on the other tribes as well. Don't quote me on that, though. I haven't fully decided how to tackle the idea, and might not get around to it for a while. :fluttershysad:

#16 · Chapter 1 · 112w, 1d ago · · ·

Really nice story, but it ran a bit too quick. I like it with more details. I still enjoyed it lots, though. :3

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