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After the death of Blutarch Mann and the destruction of the BLU team, the RED team finds themselves without anything to do, until an urgent plea from Princess Celestia drags them into the Pony-Griffon war. Can they work together alongside Twilight and her friends to win the war, or are they doomed to failure?
Agreed with Crown8!
Spend some time hovering in the atmosphere of the groups, write about their emotions, explain to the readers what they should thinking about, but this should all be left for the reader to figure out himself or herself.
In the next chapter, go back to the carriage and have the ponies talk about their feelings to one another; being drafted into the war is not easy to cope with...
then, after you feel satisfaction about the talk, go back to RED team, and throw all their thoughts at the reader, this gives a sense of confusion, and inner chaos, but I'm not the writer, so do it however you like, but positive feed back is what I'm aiming to give you!
Really good! However, I think they would know what meat is. Cats and dogs don't have the teeth for eating veggies or flowers, so I can imagine that they would use some form of meat in their kibble. And in one episode, Fluttershy gives a ferret some fish to eat.
Hold it, Spy, don't touch that sentry.
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>>276436 Methinks they have the BLU team, albeit without Blutarch Mann. TA-DA!
:D
I can dream, right?
Applejack and her sentry, sittin' in a field. S-H-O-O-T-I-N. 
I expected Spike to get paired with Pyro. I mean, come on! A FIRE breathing creator and a FIRE breathing man!
The chapter was a little short, and I didnt really get a feel on how the characters were feeling with all this, aside from the little "were pleased with their partners."
Besides that, it was cool. 
And guns in Equestria? This I got to see.
Rush rush rush... Going a little too quickly for my taste. Relax a bit, take a few deep breaths, enjoy the scenery.
Derpyro? 
I've always known Pinkie Pyro. I can see some mischief coming out of this. XD
One more thing: Slow down the chapters a bit. It may bump into your Fallout time (I know that feeling), but it'll make each chapter about 20% cooler.
No thank you. If you recall he's been long dead in his canon universe. Well so has pretty much everyone else in the portal universe but, you know what I mean.
Besides, If you want to harm someone do it where it hurts. He was a man of science so destroy his research... That would hurt more than bodily harm. Oh wait... Already done. *He clicks a button and the Aperture Science building implodes.* Gotta love remote detonators and mini-nukes.
>>317546 Awww, damn it, i was gonna hire pyro and demoman to help me destroy everything the old-fashion way. its not fun to just to watch his life's work blow up in a single explosion, but rather small, concentrated amounts of destruction and mayhem, to savor the pleasure of pissing him off, even after his death.
Who is this Cave Johnson who seems to be a very rude man? And I'm surprised Sniper didn't ask about Twilight's history since he told her his. Just one bit of critique:
You rushed a bit right after that short little training session. Just a quick goodbye and then suddenly a quick Human-in-Equestria history. I think that, in the future, you try to add a few more details of the area/people before going straight into a conversation. Like, what was Celestia doing in her throne room when Twilight entered? Just a few more details can make all the difference.
>>317570 short answer 'portal'
i have a prediction... Johnson somehow transformed into a unicorn and was slaughtered by some outside force. and that this transformation from human to pony takes place after a specific amount of time spent in equestria
... okay, now i think you're just showing off.
I listened to the Magnum force theme while reading this, it's what the real meet the sniper theme is based off of. To bad Valve hasn't released it to the public. 
Anyways glad to see the next chapter up, and good job portraying the Sniper, good thing he stopped Twilight from drinking Jaratie, that wouldn't have ended well. 
Oh one last thing, I hope Cave's death was cold and unforgiving. 
Reading it so far and I'm a little lost. The TF2 team should at least have a passing knowledge of what unicorns, griffins and the like are; they're prevalent in our history (even though mythological) and whatnot. They also don't strike me as being as crass as they're being portrayed; though soldiers of fortune they are, they're also professionals.
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