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It happened. Twilight became an alicorn. Her mentor Celestia has never been prouder, her friends are amazed, her daughter Nyx is thrilled to death-- And both Twilight and the government are in a tizzy. By Equestrian law, she is effectively a princess. This is complicated by the fact that she's the adoptive mother of the former Nightmare Moon, and nopony is precisely thrilled at the notion of Nyx being within reach of the throne.  

It's further complicated by the fact that Twilight doesn't want to be a princess. She's a scientist! She's a researcher and a scholar of magic, not a ruler. If she takes her throne she'll have to give up the very things that put her on it in the first place--- her research, her beloved books, her home in Ponyville, her ties to her close friends, and if certain factions have their way, her daughter Nyx.

She's going to have to put up one hell of a fight to wrangle a compromise between the life that she wants... and the destiny that somepony else picked for her.

Nyx is from Past Sins by Pen Stroke-"This story is an unofficial sequel/side-story to Past Sins by Pen Stroke"

First Published
1st Apr 2013
Last Modified
3rd Sep 2014
#1 · 138w, 6d ago · 20 · · Prelude ·

please don't be a April 1st...

#2 · 138w, 6d ago · · · Prelude ·

Please let this be real.   I love Nyx stories and can't wait to see where this goes next.

#3 · 138w, 6d ago · 6 · 1 · Prelude ·


What this guy said, because this is both a wonderful concept, and the inventor of April Fools Day should have been dragged out into the street and shot.

To paraphrase a line from "Toys", which is already a paraphrase from Gandhi:

"I am a pony of Love and Tolerance, but there is only so much a pony can Love and Tolerate."

#5 · 138w, 6d ago · · · Prelude ·

>>2355468 well, even if it is, it might end up like 'the audience' and become legit. if it isn't that is...

#6 · 138w, 6d ago · 1 · · Prelude ·

It's a good way to fit Magical Mystery Cure into your Nyxverse.  Even if it's an AU or an April Fool's joke and you don't plan to continue it, please keep it as it is a good bit of writing in its own right.

#7 · 138w, 6d ago · · · Prelude ·

Please don't be an April Fool joke.:fluttershyouch:

#8 · 138w, 6d ago · · · Prelude ·

So Nyx's Family is on hold until the events of Season 3 are worked into the timeline? I'm okay with this, I guess.

#9 · 138w, 6d ago · 2 · · Prelude ·

I've never really been a fan of April 1st.  I can never tell what is real, or what isn't.

#10 · 138w, 6d ago · · · Prelude ·

*sighs* I really need to stay away from the internet on April 1st.  I really, REALLY do. It isn't going to happen though.

This was wonderful.  Please don't let this be a prank. :ajsleepy:

#11 · 138w, 6d ago · · · Prelude ·

Huh, I've been wondering how Twilight's transformation into an alicorn would affect things especially after the events in "Nightmare Night and Nyx" where Twilight and Nyx made it clear they wanted nothing to do with royal/noble titles. Both know that would bring nothing but trouble to their simple Ponyville lives. Looks like you've decided to answer that question. I'm eager to see how this develops and leads to the events in the "Cheerilee's Class" story.  

#12 · 138w, 6d ago · · · Prelude ·


I'm going to assume it is a serious chapter and story until otherwise stated.  It fits in well with what we know of RealityCheck's Nyxverse and it doesn't have the tone a joke chapter/story tends to have.  Plus I was looking forward to an explanation of the aftermath of Magical Mystery Cure in this series.

#13 · 138w, 6d ago · 13 · · Prelude ·

yes, its legit.

And I HATE April fool's day.

I may be fleshing out the first part of this one later... it seems a bit abrupt for the intended content.

#14 · 138w, 6d ago · 1 · · Prelude ·

Hmm. Well, this should be interesting. I look forward to seeing how Twilight's ascension changes with the addition of a daughter and the removal of episodic time constraints.

#15 · 138w, 6d ago · 3 · · Prelude ·

>>2355971 I love you!:pinkiehappy: *sees everyone staring at him* As a friend, alright?:twilightoops: As a friend, not the other way round.:twilightblush:

#16 · 138w, 6d ago · · · Prelude ·

Finally I was hoping someone would do this really I was. I knew someone would just didn't know when. I love you so much..... no homo... unless you a girl then I guess its fine..

#17 · 138w, 6d ago · · · Prelude ·

This pleases me greatly.

Also lmao at Nyx's newly acquired deeply suppressed traumatic experience.

#18 · 138w, 6d ago · 2 · 39 · Prelude ·

I am voting this down for no other reason then it having Twilicorn in it.

#19 · 138w, 6d ago · · · Prelude ·

Well I did ask the question a while back about how Nyx would live with an immortal mother hovering over her for the rest of her life. Now we get to see it.

#20 · 138w, 6d ago · · · Prelude ·


he mentioned this story yesterday, so I'm going to assume this is real.

#21 · 138w, 6d ago · 3 · · Prelude ·

>>2355971 THANK GOD, SATAN, COLONEL SANDERS, LUNA OR CELESTIA, I DO NOT CARE for something that is NOT April Fool's related. I've had it with that.. 'stuff' today

oh and by the way, thank you for more Nyx stories:pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy:

Yes, it really was a most unusual day in Ponyville. But then, it's the best place in Equestria to have one.
aint THAT a fact:pinkiecrazy:

#22 · 138w, 6d ago · 1 · · Prelude ·

RC, I look askance at your habit of accepting all the weird, off-the-wall things the TV show has thrown at us (Cadance, Crystal Empire, Twilicorn, etc.) instead of merely ignoring them as I do, and yet I also admire you for relentlessly beating those elements into a shape that conforms to your sensibilities, which seem not that different from my own.  I think you're taking the more difficult path, but you're doing it well, and the results are certainly entertaining.

#23 · 138w, 6d ago · · · Prelude ·

Oooh. [img]//dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_TwilightWut.png[/img]

#24 · 138w, 6d ago · · · Prelude ·

Where would "Cheerilee's Class" fall within your 'verse?

#25 · 138w, 6d ago · 1 · · Prelude ·


It is likely after this story as the first chapter states Twilight is a Princess, that is if these stories fit together.

#26 · 138w, 6d ago · · · Prelude ·

>>2358036 It all makes perfect sense in a pinkie sort of way... AKA I don't think about it.

Viking Hooves out:rainbowwild:!

#27 · 138w, 6d ago · 1 · 1 · Prelude ·

To be an Alicorn is to be alone, even when you are surrounded by friends.  It is the knowledge that they are ephemeral wisps that the inexorable winds of time will blow away until even their dust is no more and only the holes they have left in your heart remind you that they ever existed.  When such a time comes, there is very little to hold you to sanity, to hold you to the light.

Nyx knows what her darkness is better than almost anypony in Equestria.  With good reason, she fears the day when the last light of friendship and love have gone out and left her with nothing but the dull burden of duty and an endless sea of bowing ponies unwilling to meet the royal gaze.

It's a miracle really that Celestia has remained sane for so long.  Some argue that she hasn't and the only difference between her and Luna was that Luna's final psychotic breakdown was a bit more obvious in its nature.

Has Twilight's ascension saved Nyx... or just condemned Twilight to the same living purgatory?

#28 · 138w, 6d ago · 1 · 1 · Prelude ·


Maybe kept herself sane by repeating "Luna's almost back. Just a few more decades."

Or she met many psychologists over the centuries.

Or she relieves some of the stress by trolling others and pretending that everything is okay.

#29 · 138w, 6d ago · · · Prelude ·


okay, lessee. the timeline thus far is Past Sins--Nightmare Night and Nyx--Alicornundrum--Cheerilee's Class.

#30 · 138w, 6d ago · 2 · · Prelude ·


Read the last couple of chapters of "Nightmare Night and Nyx." Celestia briefly revealed to Twilight the very thing that keeps her sane... for an immortal being such as an Alicorn, loved ones are separated, but never lost, and death is just another country, seen in the distance.

#31 · 138w, 6d ago · · · Prelude ·


He probably was.

#32 · 138w, 6d ago · 1 · · Prelude ·

I really like all your Nyx related stories, they may not be on Pen Stroke stories quality, but for me they are just as entertaining.

I fell a bit sad that in all stories Nyx is small defenceless filly and her special talent to protect her loved ones is never used, but hopefully one day you will write story like that, as for now I will enjoy what I can read, keep it up.

#33 · 138w, 6d ago · · · Prelude ·

>>2358979 Um, I assume Nyx's Family comes between Past Sins and Nightmare Night and Nyx, right? Or are you officially discounting your own story since Pen Stroke began writing Winter Bells?

#34 · 138w, 6d ago · 2 · · Prelude ·

I didn't read this right away, because I wasn't sure whether it was another "Fucking-Stupid-Holiday Day" Prank.  Good to see it isn't.  April 1st sucks... Especially with all the admin shenanigans going on right now.

#35 · 138w, 6d ago · · · Prelude ·


You forgot "Nyx's Family" between "Past Sins" "Nightmare Night and Nyx", and the first two short stories from Pen Stroke which still fits into your continuity.

Also, I would like to reiterate the fact that you now have "Cherilee's Class", "Nyx's Family", "The Great Alicorn Hunt", and now "Alicornundrum" to work on, and hopefully complete, in a timely manner. Are you sure you're going to be able to do it?

#36 · 138w, 6d ago · · · Prelude ·

So will Nyx's family be leading up to this or what?

#37 · 138w, 6d ago · 1 · · Prelude ·

I feel impending squee. This is because your description promises a triple shot of win with a cherry of awesome on top. If you follow through with the promise, this will officially earn the status of "The New and Improved Magical Mystery Cure Mark III"

#38 · 138w, 6d ago · · · Prelude ·

Awesome concept! this is going to be one of the good ones... i can feel it... :scootangel:

only one question .. by this point in cannon Spike already returned Pee Wee to his parents. Is Spike going to keep the little feller? or send him home in this story? :moustache:

#39 · 138w, 5d ago · · · Prelude ·

all i can say is daww:scootangel:

#40 · 138w, 5d ago · 3 · · Prelude ·

In hindsight, you probably shouldn't have posted this on April 1st...

All the same, that last bit with Nyx positively squeeing over her mother just MADE the chapter.

#41 · 138w, 5d ago · 1 · · Prelude ·

I'm glad this is not an april fools joke.

#42 · 138w, 5d ago · 1 · · Prelude ·

Hmm. This is going to be interesting! :pinkiehappy:

#43 · 138w, 5d ago · 1 · · Prelude ·

wow Nyx really IS twilight's daughter I mean only a sparkle could react like that:eeyup:

#44 · 138w, 5d ago · · · Prelude ·


The cultists did use Twilight's blood for the ritual that birthed Nyx.  OTOH(oof) you can argue that make Luna the 'father'.  How does one file a paternity suit against a Princess? :facehoof:

Nyx's freak out prior to the apotheosis of Twilight Sparkle reminded me of another Alicorn Twilight story, Rites of Ascension.  It covered the same issue from two ends.  One was Rainbow Dash, and that most pegasi are of the Achilles school.  Live fast and die (relatively) young.  The other was Spike, who expected Twilight to be dead before he even hit dragon adolescence.

#45 · 138w, 5d ago · · · Prelude ·

May be a dumb question, but... Does Nyx call out to both Luna & Twilight as Mommy?

#46 · 138w, 5d ago · · · Prelude ·


In my Nyxverse, Peewee stayed with them, and is now as much Nyx's pet as Spikes.

In the "Parting Words" continuity, he went back to his parents.

Update: he was supposed to but then I accidentally wrote him into a later chapter. Oh well.

#47 · 138w, 5d ago · 6 · · Prelude ·


I personally think RC is a better writer. Pen Stroke's style is practical with the occasional flair but RC's stories are suffused with style. For instance, Pen feels the need to dictate things like the feelings of the characters to the audience while RC can direct the audience by manipulating the conventions of the medium.

Maybe this isn't the best example because it may require more context but I think it sums up the style differences:

"He ambled down the stairs, his ears down and his head low. He had a dark grey coat, and an indigo mane.

And webbed, batlike wings pressed close to his sides."

This one statement a space below the other descriptions tells us without resorting to naming actual emotions at least three things: The bat like wings are not common, the bat like wings are a source of shame, and the bat like wings single him out from others. More importantly, because we are not explicitly told how the wings are a source of trouble the audience is engaged rather than talked at making the experience more active.

If Pen Stroke wrote this it would probably go something like this:

"Willow had a dark grey coat and an indigo mane along with webbed bat like wings that marked him as a thestral; a subspecies discriminated against for their connection to nightmare moon and constantly derided as "cursed" and "marked by the moon". This unfortunately was a source of constant harassment from every bully and ignorant pony in every town he ever lived. Willow slowly and nervously descended the stairs to eat his morning breakfast in anticipation of a terrible first day"

I'm not as good as Pen Stroke but I think it's a passable impression of his style. It's good in its own way, there is nothing wrong with it, doesn't constant;y repeat certain words so it has a nice flow, and it's engaging enough. As you can see, however, it just doesn't have the same impact because in writing less is more so show don't tell.

#48 · 138w, 4d ago · 2 · · Prelude ·

Welp...that certainly set the stage well enough.  :pinkiegasp:

I could hardly imagine a child coming to grips with immortality like that.  Then, realizing not only would she loose her friends, but also her mother?  That section broke my heart completely.  As for her seeing Twi come back as an Alicorn...yeah, family genes, it's GOT to be in the genes...:twilightsheepish:

That said, how this progresses...I just have no idea.  This is gunna bare watching, and quite a bit I might add!  Well done!~:twilightsmile:

#49 · 138w, 4d ago · · · Prelude ·

interesting i shall fave please do continue this also are you still working on Nyx's Family?

#50 · 138w, 3d ago · · · Prelude ·

>>2366101 She woke up terrified and screamed for her mother.

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