D'aawwwwwww

It's so adawwuble!    Five stars for you!  There's a few grammatical/spelling issues that I noted, but so few that I can hardly even count it as an issue.  I've given four and a half stars to stories significantly worse, so this is definitely up there.

Hmm, a piece that's sweet and close, but not shippy between those two is exceedingly rare.  Greatly looking forward to -

D'aaaawwww attack!

*Wakes up in a puddle of oddly candy-scented drool*

Where was I?  Oh yeah, hope to see more.

Luna is at it again. And Twilight is pleased because of it.

"Only the huge chessboard with figures of all international leaders and important people that many people imagined to be here was missing. "

Hmm why would it be missing....

"True tyrants do not need this sort of crutches!"

Ohh of course explai...wait what

*goes on to read* aww damn i would just need to quote the whole thing to point out what i love in it...

Twilestia is best shipping

>>181595181595 Thank you for all the praise. Yes, my old enemy, Language-barrier is here again. Sadly I can't ask my usual beta-reader to do another fic for me, so I hope it doesn't irk my readers too much

Curse my Horsetrian... erm... AUSTRIAN roots!

>>181706181706 Should I dispatch Paramedics or just be very happy about the reaction? Probably both... thank you a lot

But I warn you... it might get a bit shippy... depending on how the characters behave. I usually don't plan ahead on these parts. My stories get done Pinkie Pie style!

>>181982181982 Do you really expect Celestia to need a chessboard or map? Hay, she probably prevented two wars, caused one riot on the other end of the world and brought education into a third world country before brushing her teeth.

And I agree! Those two may have much going against them, but there is something there. Right Twilight?

“WE THANK THEE, SISTER! THE SWEETNESS OF OUR VOICE WILL ELEVATE OUR CUTENESS AND WE SHALL FIT THE PROMISE EMBOSSED ON THIS WONDERFUL CONTAINER!"

I think I literally laughed for five minutes. Haha. This is amazing.

>>182033182033 What can I say? Canon-Luna is the best thing that has happened in the last few years of animation. I wish we had some Luna emoticons on the page, thought

I'm glad you enjoyed it

This was rather sweet. I enjoyed it, though I found the narration to be a shade clunky at times, but that's due to your roots, I suppose. Far better than anything I could do in Austrian, that's for sure. If you can, find a beta-reader for future chapters, but even if you can't, keep writing, and keep up the good work!

>>182196182196 Thank you for your... oh my gosh Did the guy who writes "Composure" just comment on my story? And he thinks it was sweet?

OHMYGOSHOHMYGOSHOHMYGOSHOHMYGOHOHMYGOSH

Thanks for the feedback. I will be searching for a beta reader for both "Celestial Bodies" and "Between Day and Night". But I will focus on "Draconic Troubles" in the near future. It's still my main story.

(BTW: Austrians speak German... well... something that can be confused for German)

As obligated, I award you bonus points for Twilestia.

Dawwwww worthy, and I MUST HAVE MORE!  Phase two, soon, please?

Looking forward to phase 2. This story is great

Ooooh... it was a plan the whole time.. I've been noticing these types of things in stories lately. Random evil plots from other characters and stuff.

phase one?!?!??! I need phase 2 right now!!! one of the cutest Celestia I've read so far!

Obviously Luna has been beating Celestia, which is why she has a bruised eye. Running into a statue? I should think not!

I'm thinking this is less an evil plan and more a, see my sister get hitched, plan. Or, get romantic, anyways. But Luna's still allowed to ACT shady and sneaky for the part if she likes. At any rate, i'm amused, and, hey, Twilight/Celestia. ALWAYS love it.

"As Celestia approached, she measured the height of her face, her speed and the ankle."

>>317141317141 Thank you

Ohh... sorry for responding so late. I was Busy

>>259224259224 Luna just likes to scheme. And she is naturally sinister. Don't assume that all plotters are evil Twilight loves planning too!

>>301720301720 Let's rephrase that... I have this picture of Luna in my head when I read it like this: "Yes, Tia, you will get together with your little student and be very happy... AND I WILL WATCH!"

>>317220317220I love this, I love twilestia so much though there is little of them.

I think I like the twist you've taken with this story, it's a great idea! Can't wait for phase two :D :D

awesome, please dont keep us waiting to long

Comfy bed may be comfy, but confy bed with free cuddles is far better.

Thinking it was more of a meh chapter, then came Darth Harmony... Epona and Gaea that is hilarious.

That was hilarious.  

Hehehe I love this kind of story. Well done.

im interested to find out how luna manipulated this event... ->

Davesknd (the author):

"I will continue this story in a bit of an unusual way:

Every odd chapter will be a phase.

Every even chapter will be the planning and preparation of that phase. " (in case someone forgot )

“And this is why you are still the learner and I am the teacher!”  - student?

“Life barely is! MUAHAHAHA!” - rarely?

A few things in this chapter which made me scratch my head, but enjoyable none the less.

Looking forward to the next chapter.

and another fine chapter has been made i do hope they kiss next odd chapter.

>>387206387206

yeah, I think this one way to tell the story is pure genius! if our dear author can pull it off (and he's in fact doing a great job) this can get really really really interesting :D

>>387410387410 Thank you for pointing out the "rarely". But "Learner" was chosen on purpose.

>>386476386476 I am glad that it was not entirely "meh"

>>387206387206 I certanly did not forget

>>388681388681

Kissing might be a bit of a rush, surely they should cuddle cutely first?

Agreed with Gwenio, Daves, please don't rush this story, nearly every story I read is way rushed into the romance to be honest. I like to be able to sit down and read a good story that gives me a good feel to it, then makes the romance better since it ain't rushed and your more connected to the characters.

>>389628389628 Lets ask Twilight to write a book about it! "Getting it on with your god-princess 101! It's not heresy, if she worships you!"

>>390660390660 I really don't want to have this go too fast either. Yes, we all want them to be happy, but those are two very complex ponies in, let's be honest, really bad spots for romantic involvement. That is part of the appeal, if we are honest, but it also prevents a quick solution.

Right, Rainbow?

Rainbow agrees!

I like this story. XD its got a happy feeling to it. Good job good sir.

Oh dear, who knew hoofkerchiefs were so.... naughty

Looking forward to the next one.

I'm confused.. didn't Twilight spend the night with her on phase one? But then Celestia woke up, without Twilight being there? Idk.. my brain is telling me something is wrong here, but I can't place my tongue on it. I'm not 100% sure if it is the phase thing though. Anyway, liked this chapter, looking forward to the next phase!

>>418386418386 And now we know why they invented chastity belts during that period

>>418412418412 The preparing for the phases didn't take place immediately before every single phase. Basically, Chapter 2 and 4 take place before 1 and 3 even start.

I was thinking about adding a clock, but then again... I don't  want to rip of 24.

dawws and chuckles!

really liking this

the hoofkerchief huh?

suddenly imagining twilight in plate armor, competing in a magical jousting equivalent for the princess' favor......

she looks remarkably cute

>>418702418702

Who is the opponent in this mental image?

Hmmmm very interesting, the beginning confused me a bit, so she told the weather team that she was planning on making a rainbow when she was Nightmare Moon?  Why did she have to say it?

Also, I WANT MORE!

>>419917419917 My geuss would be The Great and Powerful Blowhard: Trixie

>>419917419917

Bloomberg of course.

Or was it Fluttershy? i can never tell.....

>>419917419917

he must have been the black pony knight!

Dis gun be fun!

>>418702418702 Important side note: Is she charging herself or is she on the back of some other pony? Maybe she browbeat it out of Rarity as compensation for the Hearth Warming Eve thing

>>420509420509 Basically, the team was praising her and that bothered Luna, so she wanted them to stop. A part of her likes being praised, but not for things she invented or did as Nightmare Moon. Sadly that deflated the whole thing much more than she wanted. Sorry for being not clearer.

>>420639420639 A squire like Trixie is no match for Twilight Sparkle's steel! Especially when its for Celestia's honor! Remember when that dragon insulted the princess? She almost jumped out of that costume and went Dennis Quaid on that guy!

<- Staunch defender

<- Innocent flower

>>422307422307

i was imagining her charging by herself.

That mental image with Rarity though.....it blows my mind....

CURRENT MENTAL SCENE:

Twilight sitting/standing on Rarity's back, magically gripping a jousting spear of some sort,

Across the field, Fluttershy is riding Applejack, gripping Bloomberg as a spear.

Rarity participates because she is horrified at Fluttershy's completely unladylike "fashion" choice of black spiked armor

AJ, of course, only agreed because she's worried Bloomberg would get hurt if Rainbow Dash took her place.

Trixie is serving Fluttershy as a squire, wondering just how she got involved in this (Fluttershy Stared her into agreeing).

Celestia, being a Delicate Flower, is gazing over this all with a look of complete bewilderment and mild horror.

Luna is laughing her flank off.

>>422573422573 We need somebody to draw this... NOW!

>>422605422605

CHALLENGE ACCEPTED!

now i need to learn how to draw ponies.

this might take awhile....

>>422307422307 I never said it would be a fair fight, I'm a stalwart follower of Twilestia after all

>>424412424412 If you put the shipping in, I imagine it to sound like this:

Defeat her, lord, and claim the princess virtue!

Do I have to? The princess was pretty nice.

Erm... she did say that she hated trees!

I DESTROY HER AND HER KINGDOM!

Nobody but me claims Celestia's virtue!

This armour is so heavy!

Quiet! Now CHAAAARGE!

Don't I get a say about who claims my virtue?

*WhydontwehaveanyLunaemoticons?Plzimagineonehere* No, Tia. This is a medieval setting.

So, it's monastery and not moon for you!

>Wasn't interested in watching her sister shower for once

>for once

Oh my!

>>569569569569 Right, I remember that mistake... I should probably edit it

>>571696571696

By Odin's bushy beard, do not!

>>572151572151 As much as the idea of Luna being incredibly interested in Celestia's showering weirds me out, I really don't want that to be the gateway to Celuna-cest... This is a Twilestia Story!

D'aawefully good, this.

You could say its

Ad'aaawwable.

YEEAAAH

SRSLY, unsure Twilight in a Twilestia is the sweetest thing.

Litterally, it causes diabetes. Tis a killer, that Twi!

EDIT: well will you look at that. 1st on this chapter, to boot.

Also, cannae wait for the next installment. Luna, that matchmaking goddess must

have some serious psychology skills to plan all this out.

You should add a link or somthing showing them cuddling

great update.

a bit of trollestia going on there i see.

cheers.

More...

Just how much belladonna is in that shampoo in order to affect Celestia, and what is a similar dose going to do to Twilight, especially if she uses it more than once? I have a feeling some drama may be coming up...

So she blows up the letters pretty much...*scratches head* seems legit

Sprechen Sie Deutsch dann?

Ahh, so adorable... Also, Twilight talking to herself is cute crazy, not creepy crazy.

Looking forward to more! Hopefully without the delay...

>>259224259224 damn dude youre  everywhere.

loving this, tracked a million times

when do you think you can the next update out?

“Who is Pete?”  

Pocket dimension in bladder?! GENIUS. I want one.

Image: http://scranton.mylittlefacewhen.com/media/f/img/mlfw2963-130796838883.jpg

Pocket dimension in the bladder? imagine the time that would save, dood, we no longer need to walk to the bathroom, we can stay watching ponies and let the pocket dimension handle the nasty stuff, also, nice twilestia, there dood

image that someone opened up a portal to the pocket bladder dimension working the other way around, piss tsunami over all of equestria! oh, the horror!

but enough piss talk, great chapter, cute, fuzzy and damn-it-I-love-twilestia. I'm really REALLY curious to see where and when Luna put her crafty hooves to work in this case, I see little room for maneuver here, I'm dying to see you smartly pull it off!

A sting of spite ran through her. -You love to take long baths, Tia! You should enjoy them whenever you feel like it. Not rush into the shower.-

Not sure if 'spite' is the word you should use here. Her thoughts make it sound more like she pities her sister being forced to take a short shower rather than the long baths she apparently loves.

"watching out to not stab her beloved mentor"

nuff said.

>>599024599024 Don't call her like that, please... I really hate that name.

The fact that Celestia actually enjoys her life, instead of being a cliché perma-serious mentor makes her so delightfully unique. And the the internet gives her a mean name.

>>599457599457 Dun Dun DUUUUUUN

>>599629599629 Glad I'm not the only one who likes to see Twilight going Adoro-Gollum on us.

>>599910599910 Nein, in Österreich sprechen wir kein Deutsch... nur so was ähnliches. Nächstes Kapitel kommts wenns fertig ist.

>>600329600329 Just don't get one with a sentient race in it!

>>600898600898 Oh, I'm curious too. Just kidding

>>600928600928 That was actually chosen on purpose. I tried to make her come across as more malicious and aggressive while in the cloud-form, more concerned with resenting the surroundings than feeling bad for Celestia.

>>601180601180 That is no laughing matter! You try cuddling with a knife attached to your face!

>>601249601249 that i understand perfectly but you cant be serious all the time so a few jokes here and there shouldnt harm anything but i understand the seriousnes of the given title so i wont use it here but still celestia is pretty good at joking around and pulling pranks, but then again she should be having had all the years she's had.

>>601260601260 Don't get me wrong: I LOVE the fact that she does it! I just hate the name "Trollestia".

...my morning turned sour when I noticed there wasn't another chapter after this one...

It's Twilestia! the more the better!

>>601249601249

So looking forward to "dilated pupils, sensitivity to light, blurred vision, tachycardia, loss of balance, staggering, headache, rash, flushing, dry mouth and throat, slurred speech, urinary retention, constipation, confusion, hallucinations, delirium, and convulsions*." Whee. Celestia is going to murder Luna.

*According to Wikipedia

>>601516601516 >>601765601765 I am just a single person! This chapter was already too long! Greed leads to discord

>>601999601999 as am I...yet I pumped out an entire fic(34 chapters including epilogue) which averaged in at about1500-1600 words a chapter in less than eleven days

ahh i see lol i didnt mean to imply that Austrians speak german i was just asking if you spoke german meinen aufrichtigen Entschuldigungen

>>602455602455 You should not apologize: It is a common joke, we make around here. Austria's official language is German, but most of us have accents so thick that foreigners and Germans from beyond Bavaria have a very hard time, understanding it.

That's why we say: "Something similar"

Sorry if it came across wrong

excellent chapter im looking forward to the next to see if luna notices twi using the belladonna schampoo, this could spiral out of control quite quickly...

i dont know how much belladonna there was in that bottle, but even small amounts can be deadly, so some greater symptoms are bound to happen in my opinion

on belladonna:

"The symptoms of belladonna poisoning include dilated pupils, sensitivity to light, blurred vision, tachycardia (accelerated heart rate, may or may not be be dangerous), loss of balance, staggering, headache, rash, flushing, dry mouth and throat, slurred speech, confusion, hallucinations, delirium, and convulsions (extreme cramp)" (i took away two which i doubt that you would ever include anyways)

this is gonna be interesting...especially the underlined parts

>>603145603145 Its fine i am just a little new to foreign customs and the like. I am studying German and i am attempting to speak Japanese and write in kanji. Believe me it isn't easy, even if English is among the hardest languages to learn. speaking of which hence you being Austrian. Bravo! learning English!

Oh and i just realized something! I'm not watching you! How dare I!!! There i fixed that problem.

>>603520603520 Ok, before the "Luna will kill Twilight" suggestions get out of hand:

All those symptoms apply to INGESTING the poison. Even if we count the amount Twilight's exposed mucous membranes absorb, it would not cause more than a dry mouth. The only reason it works on her eyes is because she gets it in her eyes when she showers.

>>603638603638

i never said kill, i just said that small amounts can kill, and she got some of it into her through her eyes, i didnt think you would make anything serious of it. i was imagining something like: maybe a little confusion/hallucination/delirium but mostly any light combination the smaller things like dilated pupils, sensitivity to light, blurred vision, slight tachycardia, loss of balance, headache flushing, dry mouth and throat and slurred speech. only small things, nothing to really focus on.

Hm.

So far, I told Applejack, who came by after fetching her cousin from the train station. You know: the one we met during before the summer sun celebration, Red Russet... or Red Baron? I’m not sure which one. Apparently he is paying the family a surprise visit.

Hmmmm.

Ah, uncertain/nervous/shy Twilight. Always adorable, more so in Twilestia. And talking to herself to add for more fun.

AAs a suggestion/request? Any cut stuff you particularly like, add it in later. Or as a deleted scenes mayhaps.

>>604469604469 Oh, Celestia, I love readers who pay attention!

>>608342608342 What I mean was: I cut it "from this chapter"

Some of the stuff is important to the plot/funny but wouldn't fit yet. Have to keep a semblance of balance between plot, jokes and foreshadowing.

That is all.

OH COME ON!!!!! that was amazing...MOAR!!!!!

*“Yes: What would happen to a regular pony that used your shampoo?” Luna asked.

“The pupil dilation would last slightly longer... and maybe a dry mouth for a little while. It should go away after an hour maximum.” Autumn answered professionally.*

awww, i was looking forward to a seeing twi acting silly over some of those effects....

are we supposed to get what his scarf is? (have to make sure i didnt miss anything, during the bigger part of may; my thought and memory process is next to zero, at least while it's the later hours of the night)

>>613245613245 I gave you more than 7000 words in two days! People, I need sleep too

Seriously, though, thanks for the positive feedback, you greedy, greedy person

>>613311613311 Twilight doesn't need to be drugged to be silly

And about the scarf: Not yet. I just wanted a cliffhanger ending and reveal it somewhere along the way

>>613352613352 you can't give me that man...in the story i completed I put out that much daily for almost ten days straight but yeah I know. just make sure you update frequently

Yep I injoyed this

Oh geeze, SpikeXRarity and TwiLestia?

This story has gotten very interesting...

Fun fact: Moonbows are actually a real thing! I'm sure they're a lot more colorful in Equestria than they are here, though.

Dammit Rarity he is a baby dragon! You're like 35!