Just brilliant; spectacular writing and imagery.  Looking forward to more!

Holy.....shit

I haven't read imagery like that for so long.  TAKE MY STARS!

Y'all are so nice!  ^_^

I apologize for such a short chapter, the next should be a smidgeon larger.

Okay I felt like I was reading a transcript of a ponified sailor moon episode lol tracking!

Um... yeah... seems... good...

*tracks*

I think I can honestly say I have... nothing I can say about this except maybe... wow!

... I think it just took me 2 chapters to truly figure out what the hell is actually going on.

This is just wonderful.

Ah, I love the premise of this. Non-linear stories just get me in that special spot. Only a few grammar things I can nitpick, I think, and they're obvious, so I won't touch on those. Liking it so far!

Good god even more beautiful descriptions and images were painted in my mind.  You sir are a brilliant artist as well as an author.

This deserves way more views than it is receiving right now.  I wish I could give you more stars, because you deserve them.

I think I would understand more if I wasn't attempting to read it as 2:34am. I had to skip a couple of paragraphs as t'were.

However;

this story is brilliantly written and the descriptions are so engaging that I could picture absolutely everything with ease. The only downside was that, being so tired, I couldn't focus on it all and had to resort to skipping parts. I will try again, however, after a decent night of sleep.

All my moustaches and Trollestia's are belong to you, good sir.

Congratulations.

No words can describe what I feel about this storie... probably because it's early and I dozed off during the end from lack of sleep...

Nothing can describe the expirience I had reading... so here...