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Rainbow Dash and Fluttershy take a walk in the forest.

Written for a short story Writing Challenge between myself and UnlicensedBrony

So please visit his story and thumbs up who you like!

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Comments ( 14 )

Hmm. This has potential but it could definitely use a few tweaks.

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Thanks! I really didn't get much of a chance to edit it to much. It was a two week writing challenge and I ended up writing it in the 11th hour because I had this idea. :twilightsheepish:

That's a really creative take on the prompt, nice one! Even if it is a bit sad :fluttershysad:

I liked how you didn't mention right away that Fluttershy was... well, ashes, and had Rainbow talking as if they were walking together as normal. I was actually confused as to why Fluttershy wasn't talking at first! But yeah, if you hadn't called the story 'Ashes', I probably wouldn't have figured it out until Rainbow dropped her.

Anyways, really good work! Looking forward to the next round!

Loved it!

I was totally shocked when Fluttershy was ashes and Rainbow Dash was old! I read the title, but I thought that the two of them were just walking towards somepony`s grave or something!

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Thank you!

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Wait she was ashes!:rainbowderp: Oh wait... Right I wrote the story...facehoof: Thank you! I was trying to frame it that way. Glad I did surprise someone with it! :twilightsmile:

I'll say it with Luna since she looks how I feel right now...

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ooohhh new band to find out about!

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Ok that's damn cool!

2354339 hehe^^ to be honest, I have just found out about them recently too. But I'm gald you like them as well:twilightsmile:

My comp played that song shortly after I read this story and I thought it fit pretty good so I added it to my comment^^ Rest in peace, Flutters... :fluttercry:

2351738 Hell yeah! This is one of favourite bands.

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From depressing story to metal... Sounds bout right lol!

2551895 well the song fits the story pretty well so... yeah, sounds about right^^

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