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Spitfire had always dreamed of becoming a Wonderbolt, ever since she was a little filly. Sometimes dreams do come true, however, but often not without a cost. How far is she willing to go to follow those dreams?

Cover Art by InuHoshi-to-DarkPen on DevArt

Edited by TheHerpestOfTheDerp (On Hiatus)
Pre-read by Eeveexpert

Chapters (4)
Comments ( 29 )

yah there'd better be more to come :rainbowdetermined2:

Upvoted for the Joe Satriani reference :twilightsmile:

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Haha, don't worry. I only put that there cause my pre-reader actually thought this was a one-shot after reading it until I reminded him it wasn't. :derpytongue2:

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Haha, thanks. :twilightsmile: This story was actually spawned simply by listening to that song of the same name. :derpytongue2:

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Yeah, I know, it's very inspirational. My next chapter for that Lightning Dust fic is gonna bear the same title :twilightsmile:

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Haha, nice. I'm glad somepony actually got the reference. Satriani really is amazing. I'll have to check out your fic when I get some time! :twilightsmile:

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Sure, take your time. You'll find it difficult finding it among all those OctaScratches, heh. :twilightblush:
And Satriani is, like, my hero. He's the reason why I started playing the guitar in the first place.

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Haha, alright. I think I found it already, actually.
And cool. Well, more power to you. I wish I could play, but I have zero musical talent. :ajsleepy:

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I have not. I'll have to look them up.

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Haha, thanks! Glad you liked it.

Well now. This is neat.

You have my intrest.

~Skeeter The Lurker

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Cool. Hope I don't disappoint!:twilightsmile:

Ooo. Nice update in the story of how they made it.

I had honestly forgotten of this one.

~Skeeter The Lurker

Glad to see this has updated. Not too bad with this chapter, but I did have one issue:

Soarin’ on the other hoof, had been put into one of the regular outfits, and had no qualms about it; he was perfectly happy to be considered “average.”

It kinda bugs me that Soarin' is typically portrayed so unambitious. Couldn't he possibly secretly competitive with Spitfire or maybe a little bit jealous? I mean he's going to be a Wonderbolt eventually, how else will he attain it? Its almost like Soarin' is the Luigi to Spitfire's Mario. I do acknowledge that you had Soarin' get upset about being called a 'lesser recruit'.
But then there was when he said he was going to prove himself for Spitfire. This isn't bad, but I guess I was hoping he'd more want to improve for himself (though I also understand this may be more to play on the romance part of the story, which is awesome, there are too few Soarin/Spitfire stories).
Now all of this is my opinion. This is your story, so feel free to completely disregard my comments. Since this story has updated, I consider it to be one of the few well written Spitfire Soarin stories, right up there with A Fire in His Heart. I really like the military overtones in the story. I'm also really looking forward to the Spitfire Soarin' dynamic. Hope this will be updated a little more regularly.

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Thanks for the input, Secret89!

I completely get what you're saying, and I agree. I will likely re-write that little bit when I get a chance to more reflect that. However it will not be a big change. There are a couple major scenes I have planned down the line that this is setting up for – one of which is next chapter.

I do plan to update a little more regularly. I had a bit of a creative slump over the summer and both of my current stories took a bit of a productivity dive because of it. I'm probably gonna start writing the next chapter of this while I wait for chapter 5 of my other story to come out of it's current pre-reading stage.

Thanks,
Spirit :twilightsmile:

Cool story. I like where this is going. I hope it gets updated sometime soon :pinkiehappy:

Would I be able to get the full image of the cover pic?

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Thanks! Glad to hear you're enjoying it so far. The next chapter is in the works and about 1/3 of the way written. It's a little slow going since I'm working on this and my FoE fic at the same time, as well as preparing my art for a local convention. Next month I do hope to have chapter 4 out though, so stay tuned!

As for the cover image, the best I can offer you is the source link: http://inuhoshi-to-darkpen.deviantart.com/art/Back-at-the-Academy-352577906

It wasn't a commissioned cover, so I don't have access to bigger files. I simply had Inuoshi's permission to use it for this.

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Thanks! Glad to see you're still around, Regolit!

Hey! This story updated. Sweet! Nice to see Soarin pulling some ace moves. I dislike how some other authors make him some buffoon, definitely not the case here. I am curious to see the plot develop though. Is this strictly going to be an academy story, or are we going to see a villain and adventure unfold? Regardless, I'll be waiting for more. Always enjoy Soarin and Spitfire stories.

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Yep, finally got back into writing it. And it's primarily an academy story, though there will be an antagonist developing soon.

This story isn't DEAD!! Had to make sure I got the date right:rainbowlaugh:. Haha Soarin's even faster than spitfire now, guess he took tons of effort just to impress his special somepony, sweet!

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