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Hmmm. That was interesting. I don't want to sound like a jerk but this could use a few more spaces. Other than that, it wasn't bad
A few grammatical errors, and could use a bit more space, but all in all... Wonderful stories. Really worked up the feels in just a thousand words.
I like how the word count is a exactly at 1,000.
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2266932 2266992 I was hesitant about space, and definitely realize the issue there, but I felt like it couldn't be broken up well. But then again, I wrote this at about 2 AM, when my writing lacks common sense. That would also explain the grammatical errors, which I shall probably fix if I'm not too lazy.
2267009 It was actually super difficult to get to 1000 words. I was at about 997 when I finished it, and randomly put three extra words in.
You need to break up your paragraphs a bit more, it's supposed ti change each time somepony talks. I love it other than that. So beautiful.
Nice... Very neutral too.
I like that.
2268419 It does. You don't need a full double spacing, just a single one.
I feel like I've missed something.
What exactly was the issue with her eyes?
2277828 That's the point. That you never know.
I'm actually surprised no one has asked this yet.
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I figured as much. I imagine the other readers did, too.
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her eyes are red ?! (as rei's) so what's the big deal?
this one shot short story was nice ... but well, damn short ... you know ?
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It never states that they're red. And most things I write are short.
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they are red on 99,99% of all fan arts ?!
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Who said I was aligning with fan art?
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me
when there is no information about something, people use their own imagination to fill gaps
3338984 I imagined them as black yawning cavities where no light escapes
But maybe that's just me
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well good? for you then
Um, you're missing indentation on several of your paragraphs.
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Most fan art is incorrect. People chose red as her eye color, then stubbornly refused to change when it was revealed in the show.
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The content itself was an uplifting joy to read.
But please edit this. As it was, I almost missed out.
2278051 Great story. At least in the context of this story, I like to believe that she's blind and has been perceiving reality through her magic.
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That's actually awesome. Even I hadn't thought of that.
3619314 Thank you. Part of it came from her statement that she had a hard time reaching her tail and I imagined that it was because she couldn't see it and was feeling around with her magic. I keep thinking of her as having cataracts, or something similar, and that's why she doesn't like taking her glasses off: because she's afraid people will think less of her or treat her differently if the knew she was blind. Again, great story and a great read.
3619282 That's a petty nice idea actually^^ it'd be fun to play around with that^^
3436415 I guess they just do it because it looks awesome^^ Personally I dont care if they're said to be purple or red in fiction. Vinyl is awesome. Period^^
3619314 After rereading your fic, I found a flaw in my original premise:
I missed that the first time.
Still trying to come up with a workable explanation, but, for now, I'm going with the following: Unicorns are capable of perceiving reality through their magic. Touch is a simple task that most Unicorns are easily able to learn. Unicorns can also learn how to 'see' through their magic, creating images of reality in their minds, using their eyes as a focus in a complex interaction between magic, eyes and brain. Because this 'sight' (rather than perceiving reality through touch) is contingent on acting through the eyes, it has the drawback that it only works when the eyes are open. Thus, it's largely redundant except in darkness or for a blind character, which is why most regular ponies don't bother learning it, if their aware of it at all. The other drawbacks to this are an inability to perceive color and a tendency for details fade over distance, like being nearsighted. Hopefully that covers any mistakes I made. 
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Oh man, I completely forgot about that line too. But that theory is awesome! Somebody should definitely write a fic based on that.
I remember that an author did up Vinyl up as an albino and upon reading this story, that was my first impression, especially after stating that she needed to dye her hair.
Prolly not the intention of the story at all, but this is the first story I've read since then that reminded me of albino Vinyl.
I would draw a Picture of this fic, half because I want to and half because i want to draw a picture that tells 1000 words.
but I would need to show vinyl's eyes to do so, and that doesn't keep to the story very well. soo I don't know.
that said while I only Favorited it just now, I read it around a year-ish ago and enjoyed it, and I enjoy it now
4256906 You should totally draw a picture of this! You could just do Vinyl's eyes shut, right before she opens them.
4260518 Somehow I didn't think of that. i am not a clever pony, derp
The Tali'Zorah Treatment
For when you f*cking hate your audience.
I love it.
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I get it now...also, you are absolutely correct.