I don't like how this started, but I'll track it, and give it a chance.

Well I can say you nailed the part about how "humanity is mostly greedy and evil, often manipulating things to their own benefit," those are just one of the (I guess it would be appropriate for the term) pointers about humanity, though I'm resisting the urge to get philosophical about this, so I shall stop here.

Also, I am enjoying how this story is turning out so far, tracked.

"An HiE story, no the main character will not be ponified, because then it would lose the whole point." Finally someone gets it!

Good story, I dont particularly like anti-human themed stories but this one is an exception. Good job! I hope when he explains humans to the ponies he isnt too harsh! Make sure to have him mention good stuff too!

Wow, only out a day and I have 13 people tracking it. Pretty cool. I made a couple minor adjustments to the first chapter, like adding Davis' age, (he's 19) and a couple spelling and grammatical corrections.

Oh by the way, commenting is appreciated. Props to Jiropracter. Explaining humans to the ponies was something I was thinking about how to do, mostly because I wanted to do it right, and I suppose I can add a bit of history, people like Mother Teresa and other good humans, but it's mostly going to be about how people like that are few and far between . Now I've already mentioned in the story about the "legend" of humans, and how they might NOT want to bring one to Equestria, so Davis, who is ticked off at the whole of his species, will be giving mostly a negative opinion of humanity. As for how this started, I read a bunch of HiE fics, and they normally go from, "I'm emo life sucks." To "OMG ponies I love everything!" in like 2 chapters. There wasn't ever really an internal struggle. This is going to be about someone with a buckload of pain and heartache trying to overcome it. There will be a bunch of philisophical stuff in it, but nothing too confusing.

One thing that kills this fic and made it so I couldn't read it.

You don't use paragraph breaks.

Whenever someone new speaks or does an action, you are supposed to put it in a new paragraph.

You do something like (He jabbed me in the shoulder with a scalpel, twisting it around before pulling it out. My screams of pain seemed to be like music to his ears. "Now then, heal yourself." "This is illegal, you assaulted me, kidnapped me, and now you're running experiments on me? Soon as the police get here you're going to jail." He jabbed me again. "Idiot, who do you think owns the police, who do you think controls the government? We do! We have money, and the world runs on money. people can be bought, officials can be bribed. Myself and the 3 on those  screens can do whatever we want!" He was laughing maniacally now. "So, I am your friend for years, and I give you an extra year of life, and this is how you repay me? What happened to 'making amends'?" He stabbed my chest, missing anything vital, but making it hurt like hell. "I only wanted to make things right because I though i was going to die. Who cares about the afterlife if I'm never going to go? If you aren't going to heal yourself, then I guess I'm just going to have to kill you. Then my eggheads can run tests on every single piece of you!" That idiot. As soon as I said immortality, he had forgotten completely about how it's a trade off, how something has to be lost in order to gain. I was indoors, so there weren't any plants, and the dumbass locked me in a sealed laboratory, without bacteria. Richards associates were in other countries most likely, only here through the screen. So it was just me and him. He stabbed me in the neck, severing my jugular. Fine, I'll take part in his little demonstration. He is going to kill me, I might as well make him pay for what he's done.)

It should be (He jabbed me in the shoulder with a scalpel, twisting it around before pulling it out.

My screams of pain seemed to be like music to his ears.

"Now then, heal yourself."

"This is illegal, you assaulted me, kidnapped me, and now you're running experiments on me? Soon as the police get here you're going to jail."

He jabbed me again. "Idiot, who do you think owns the police, who do you think controls the government? We do! We have money, and the world runs on money. people can be bought, officials can be bribed. Myself and the 3 on those  screens can do whatever we want!" He was laughing maniacally now.

"So, I am your friend for years, and I give you an extra year of life, and this is how you repay me? What happened to 'making amends'?"

He stabbed my chest, missing anything vital, but making it hurt like hell. "I only wanted to make things right because I though i was going to die. Who cares about the afterlife if I'm never going to go? If you aren't going to heal yourself, then I guess I'm just going to have to kill you. Then my eggheads can run tests on every single piece of you!"

That idiot. As soon as I said immortality, he had forgotten completely about how it's a trade off, how something has to be lost in order to gain. I was indoors, so there weren't any plants, and the dumbass locked me in a sealed laboratory, without bacteria. Richards associates were in other countries most likely, only here through the screen. So it was just me and him. He stabbed me in the neck, severing my jugular. Fine, I'll take part in his little demonstration. He is going to kill me, I might as well make him pay for what he's done.)

Please correct this mistake as soon as you can so your fic will be readable.

Ahh thank you Nightgazer. I do have a tendancy to ramble. Thank you for the input. I shall correct this, as well as the previous chapters post haste. And I will keep it in mind for future chapters.

I'm really surprised by how the main character uses his powers. It doesn't feel at all like you needed to limitate him to advance the story, which writers often do with these characters to make the baddies seem more threatening.

Looking forwards to future chapters

>>179506179506 That's the thing. His powers are pretty much based on what he has around him. In an abandoned park, he's rather weak, but in a massive city, he's pretty much unkillable. However, the fact that it's always a trade off means he has to be responsible. He could get ripped to shreds by a machine gun, and if he can't find the shooter, he has to decide whether to kill off innocent civilians in order to stay alive, or to take it himself. His power is pretty much unlimited, but he has to choose to use it, and the moral choice wears on his psyche. There will also be situations where he might not have access to them. One thing I HATE about some fics is when they basically make the character Jesus in a Gundam, and throw balance and sensibility out the window. While his powers are incredible, they are all of the same nature, and that is life manipulation, and they do have their limitations which will be explained hopefully in chapter 4. I don't think I'll write chapter 4 today though. Today is mostly me handling the fic's reception, taking suggestions, pooling ideas. While I wrote the first 3 chapters all in one day, I had been thinking about it for the week before hand, and while I do have many scenes already thought out, (including the ending) I'm still thinking about how to string them together, what order to put them in, and many of the other scenes I haven't thought of.

So if I leave a comment here, my face will get blessed? Cool!

Anyways, I wanted to say moar but putting moar moar in my moar meter makes me moar confused, so I'm just going to say the default line...

Looking forwards to future chapters.

"An HiE story, no the main character will not be ponified, because then it would lose the whole point." Glad to hear someone else gets it :D.

EDIT: Fuck, ninja'd.

To me for some reason chapter 5 feels a little awkward to me. I'm not sure why, I just can't put my finger on it. I keep reading it over and over, and something about it just doesn't feel right. I'm not sure what. Oh well, it's probably fine. If it's not somepony will point it out, and I'll be fix it if and when that happens. Probably just my paranoia. Maybe it's the character. He realized pretty quickly the whole thing with the plant, and changing his name. But I guess when you've been on the run for about 6 months, got thrown through a portal, killed a bunch of angry trees, almost died just because you touched a plant, and are hearing voices in your head that aren't yours making you think you've gone crazy, I guess you have to be a quick thinker. Just because he was a maintenance guy doesn't mean he was in any way dumb. His former boss confided in him after a short 2 years of knowing each other, so he's got to be pretty good with philosophy. Anyway, time to start chapter 6. And thanks to Anteh, I now know that people are actually reading my little blurbs. If you don't read them, you should, seriously. I put down my thought process and sometimes what's going to happen next, and after writing for a long stretch it's a really good way to clean up the puddle of mush that is my brain in preparation for the next chapter by letting loose for a bit.

>>187239187239 The elements of harmony dude. When they saved the town, the rainbow made a dome over the whole thing, which then exploded into white light. Season 2, episode 2.

This fic is coming along nicely, rapidly becoming one of my favorite fics, Great writing so far, keep up the good work!

>>187239187239 there, fixed it so now it makes sense. I could have sworn I typed that differently. Thanks for pointing it out. Hopefully that change takes care of any future confusion.

>>187397187397 Your comment fills me with *yay*. It's nice to be appreciated. In about 45 mins I'm gonna have the next chapter out, I'm telling you ahead of time just to make you all die of anticipation. Thanks again for the idea about introducing the good side of humanity. You will see a little of that in this next chapter.

Finally done chapter 6, my brain is pounding from too much thinking, and my heart is mush from d'aww. I'm starting to love this Fanfic. Before I write a chapter I usually read through the last 2 again, just to make sure it makes sense with the story flow. and I and rather entertained at reading it through, even though I'm the one writing it. You guys are real slave drivers you know that? Nah, I'm just kidding I love y'all.

>>187620187620

Real slave drivers? We're just rookies.. But since you want

I'll show you some slave driving

Anyways, I will be waiting for the next chapter.. So don't take too long or I'll forget the story (I read 'round 5-15 new fanfics daily So it wouldn't be unheard of. Of course, I won't forget if the story is good.. Hopefully)

PS: Get outta yer closet, kid. It's not that bad being open about being a brooooooneeeeh. Except if you don't like to be called a faggot, crazy, insane, idiot, ponyfaggotmanga (apparently a synonym for MLP fanfic, according to my friend ) reader, gay... Or just the normal weirdo.

I think my friends are getting annoyed with me speaking about ponies every few sentences, but whoooooooooooo cares.

PSS: How could he think about eating ponies? Is he unable to see the adorableness and cuteness! And epicness! And.. Poniness!

>>187855187855 Well, I for one, being about as shy as the yellow pegasus herself, do not like being called names. So, no, I think I'll just keep this a secret. What's more, he was ASHAMED of himself for even thinking it, and he noted that she was adorable, kind of why he is taking on the father figure role. Come on. If you were in a forest, slowly starving to death, and a fairly large animal just happened to drop out of the sky, don't tell me you wouldn't think of eating it. Especially since this guy has BEEN killing animals in order to eat. He even tried to eat a friggin manticore. He was in the end, able to overcome his survival instinct by replacing it with parental instinct, and that fact that horse meat is disgusting. I've never tried it, but I know someone who did. He puked.

>>187855187855 As for you guys being slave drivers... *Sound of a whip* Alright, I suppose I can try to give you 4 chapters in one day, but you'll probably get chapter 7 after midnight. I don't dare do any more, Or I'll end up spoiling you lot.

Actually horse meat is very good, it’s full of protein, very lean, can be very tender depending of the horse it came from (an old work-horse is not good for consumption but there are horses raised specifically as cattle), and basically, unless you are told so, you wouldn’t recognize it as horse meat. All I’m trying to say here is, try it before you judge it, or do I have to remind you of the Bridle Gossip episode? or about the first time someone told you that a My Little Pony cartoon was good? (Never judge a book by its cover)

Anyway I congratulate you for this fanfic, indeed it’s not the first time I see a character (pony related or otherwise) with similar powers to these, but you have manage to make a very interesting story so far. So good luck and don’t mortify yourself with strict updating schedules, just write at a pace that works for you and don’t rush perfection, je if we survived the gap between season 1 and 2 I believe we can wait a little more for your updates.

>>188296188296 Well, thanks, I guess I can take a bit more time with these updates, but it's just I have so much information and story and plot and character development packed into my brain that it feels bloated and I don't want to forget all the stuff I've thought of. As for horse meat, these are ponies. These are not raised like cattle, they are running around all over the place, doing awesome things and having adorableness which causes viewers and readers to suffer from cute diabeetus, and heart attacks. If a horse is active, it's meat will become extremely tough, to the point of being practically inedible. And these are ponies. and they are cute. If i found out that I had just eaten Rainbow dash, (not like that, get your mind out of the gutter) I'd vomit from the thought.

If you have inspiration to write then write! the best time to do so is then. if you have to force it DO NOT FORCE IT. i have learned from personal experiance and seeing it done to others that forcing a chapter is really bad. so if you have inspiration to write or just idea's, Jot them down. also. Great chaper!

>>188695188695 It's just that once I get in the writing mood, and I have all these idea's, I kinda just HAVE to write. It's like I NEED to write it. A bunch of punk kids kicked down some of my fence boards last night, so today I get to be a CMC fence repairman. I'm actually kind of happy that I have something to do, while I cement the next part of the story in my mind before I write it. Again, I'm probably going  to take a LONG time writing this next part because it's got Zecora in it, so if I don't update for a while, don't worry, I'm working on it. On the flipside I really like how the story is turning out, all your comments and feedback are great!

As tyber zahn says.... quality over quantity! If you have writers block, dont force out the content. Give your readers some credit, we wont go running just because you get a little delayed! Even though HiE fics are almost everywhere we turn, you still have an intriging and quite original concept!

Rather than you writing 4 chapters you dont like, where you end up either;

A - Droping the story as a whole.

B - Deleting the bad chapters, back to square one and rewrite said chapters.

C - Or even worse. Keeping the bad chapters and piledrive the whole story consept into the ground!

While I wait eagerly every time, for a new chapter to come out. There is no problem, what so ever, with you taking your time to get the chapters done right.

I do like that you wont hurry his ability to adapt into Ponyville. Personaly, I hope he ends up ''settling'' inside the Everfree forest, somewhat like Zecora. Not like an emo, but more like the ''taking responsebilty'' in not disturbing the ''balance'' in Ponyville too much.

As you have made Davis into a man, who has his wits with him. Are you going to set him to attack the matter of finding out why he cant use is power on many of the things in the Everfree forest?

If you will, I can maybe help you in forming a simple idea or theory of why that is!

But what are your plans when it comes to, and I will use it loosely, ''shipping''? Because like you allready have announced that Davis wont be ponified (Thank you for that) I dont get the feeling that Davis, ends up shipping, with anyone in the traditional way. But more like a parental father/uncle figure for Scootalo (something like a guardian angel), like you somewhat have loosly set!

We can, and I will wait patiently for the next chapter.

Get yourself some well derserved rest. You've earned it, and more!

>>189461189461 Truth be told, while I don't like writing too much at once, when I get started I don't want to stop. Sure my head hurts a bit afterward, but I'm also glad I got to get my idea's out and don't have to hold on to them. Kind of like writing something down, that way you can let yourself forget about it. And I don't have to worry about the story turning out crappy, because I pretty much have the whole thing in my head BEFORE I even start writing the chapter. As for the reason why he has difficulty with his power in the Everfree, It's explained that creatures with more stamina are harder to drain completely, and timber wolves are just animated trees, they don't tired out in the first place because they are animated magically. His powers DO work when it comes to replenishing himself, but not as effective an offensive tool. It's not just the things in the forest. When he knocked out the workers at his old job, they had all been working late into the night, and were tired to begin with. The soldiers chasing him had been running for quite some time trying to catch him, and the first manticore had chased him for a half hour. They were already tired by the time he tried draining them, but because of this, he overestimated his abilities. As for him settling in the Everfree, I have something along that lines, but not exactly, you'll just have to wait and find out. Davis/Nightshade is starting to get mad at Lyra who keeps pestering him and still doesn't know he's in Equestria, while she's getting mad that he keeps brushing her off. Figuring that he's in the same world as her, he doesn't want her to find that out or he'll NEVER get and peace and quiet.

As for shipping, yes there will be a relationship, but only after a very rocky start. You might be able to guess who it is from looking at his personality, but I'm not giving you any hints!

>>189534189534 Ah, a strategic writer I see!

OK. it just seemed like when he was on Earth, he had no problem replenishing energy from trees, but in Equestria (more spesific Everfree forest), he could only replenish with the use of the minor flora, and not the trees (maybe the trees in the everfree is ''corrupt''), thus also being unable to use his power on the timber wolfs.

As for the part regarding the manticores and other lager beings, the ''rules'' was well explained in the chapter, so that I got that.

As to why I was ledd to belive that, was because of the nightshade incident.

''Trying to pass his illness onto something else, he noticed that he could not, and he kept vomiting.''

''...and a path of wilting plants in it's wake. Davis looked like death incarnate.''

I thought that flowers, shrubbery and bushes wilt. While trees ''dies''.

When it came to the part of his limitations on how much he could drain, I imagined two ''containers'' one for ''life'' and the other for ''stamina''.

While ''life'' can just be extended till the point where Davis/Nightshade could call himself immortal, but it only affected his aging prosess and not that he absorb a life and keep as a spare life (like a certain italian plumber munches green 1UP mushrooms).

While ''stamina'' is a fixed container that depends on his fitness and can not be ''overflowed'', thus limit it as a offensive skill against creatures like manticores, hydras and dragons.

But when it comes to poison, he can transfere the injuries and effects, but not the poisen itself.

Would that mean that the poisen actually tries to kill him constantly till his immune system deals with it, and must thus over time dissipate the poisons injury and effects as they come (thus making Fluttershy think he was ''Death'')?

Or would the effects and injury also be like a ''container'' with a set amount, and then the poisen would just become a strange harmless body of ''plasma/goo''?

Please correct my imagery if I got it wrong.

As for the rest, I will wait for the surprise!

>>189937189937 You got it! You are absolutely right in every aspect. He can only have ONE life. It's not like he could steal someone else's to have in addition to his own. Now, if he were to say, DIE, then.....crap no no no nonononono now I'm giving away some of the future plot. And life DOES act like a container with a fixed amount, same as health and stamina. It's not like TF2 where he can 'overheal' he has to use it up before he can take more. You got that completely right! As for when he was like walking death, you were right with the first one. The poison is constantly trying to kill him, so he had to bear it while his body was damaged, as the effects came. You got it completely right. You are so smart.

>>189937189937 Also, if you hadn;t noticed in the actual episodes of the show, many of the trees are dead or dying. Also, animals have much more life energy capability than plant life. For example. To gain one year of life span, he'd have to sap about 30 or so years from a tree. Same as with passing off his injuries. At the point with the nightshade plant, he was just sucking life from freaking EVERYTHING in a 40 foot radius, trying to keep himself alive. It's a very fast acting poison, while the manticore venom was a bit slower.

>>189970189970 I am so smart! S.M.R.T... I mean S.M.A.R.T!

>>189986189986 well...... A diffrent world can have diffrent rules....

Take zap-apple trees for example. Until told otherwise, we can assume that they are native to the Everfree forest where Granny Smith found them. And these trees seem to be either dead or dying, but that is just the natruall state of them until they ''bloom''.

BUY HEY..... Its your fic AND your theory do seem a bit more probable than my wish-wash bingo-bongel-dingel-dangel yike-di-do.yike-di-da-ping-pong lippi-lappi-too-taa!

Damn its fun to be crazy!

>>190477190477 You're right, it IS fun to be crazy, but only if it's mania and not dementia. I have tasted both, and found the former to my liking.

Ugh, i cant belive i'm about to say this... Oh well, here goes!

MMMMMMMOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOAAAAAAAAAAAAARRRRRRR!

FROST!

>>191446191446 Ask, and you shall receive! It has been given freely!

Also, somepony want to come up with some cover art? I'm a writer, not an artist, anything I make in terms of lines and colour would look worse than if Sweetie Belle drew it. Come on, you KNOW you want to. Pretty please? Once I find one I really like, I'll add it and make an update chapter giving you a shoutout. Post da links in da comment section.

I'll admit, I found the Psychic Applejack thing to be quite funny, although I didn't realise it was supposed to be a tf2 reference. I notice that most of these human in equestria stories seem to involve Applejack owning any would-be thieves, and you handled it quite well.

>>191798191798 Well thank ya kindly. And again, I figured most people would figure it out, and putting the reference in the story itself didn't seem to fit, but in case someone didn't get it, I put the explanation in the blog. I thought it would be kind of funny, getting bucked in the apples. God knows how many times that happened to me in high school, till I started doing it back.

Well, I've never been bucked in the apples myself, but I did manage to punch myself there once (don't ask) and I didn't think it was very funny at the time. Also, and I really should have thought to say this in my first comment, I'm quite impressed with the whole story. It has an original concept, it's well written, and your update speed is nothing short of incredible considering the length of the chapters. Therefore, have some stars and a Derpy.

Woot! I just found out my story is in the popular stories sidebar with 25 readers. So awesome! You guys rock you know that?

ARTICLE 2

http://www.equestriadaily.com/2011/08/story-article.html

The End

http://www.fimfiction.net/story/1219/The-End

Order from Chaos

http://www.equestriadaily.com/2011/09/story-order-from-chaos.html

Human

http://www.fimfiction.net/story/5590/Human

Last Man Standing

http://www.equestriadaily.com/2011/11/story-conversion-bureau-last-man.html

Arddun Lleuad

http://www.equestriadaily.com/2011/04/story-arddun-lleuad.html

And your's are the HiE fanfics i have enjoyed the most (as well as My Little Dashie), see if any of those cath your eye.

Also The Conversion Bureau - Yellowstone is a good one, if you're in the mood for some ligth reading with kickass action (in my opinion is like reading a Tarantino movie, really fun if a little bit silly)

http://www.equestriadaily.com/2011/10/story-conversion-bureau-yellowstone.html

>>191859191859 Thanks, I'll be sure to check them out!

I look forward to the next chapter!

>>191598191598 And I thank you, kind sir!

Lols.

FROST!

D'aaaaaaaaawwwwwwwwwwwwwwww

what would happen if he encountered something with an infinite amount of stamina?

>>194114194114 are you thinking about something like a dragon or a hydra?

I think its unlikely that there would be an encounter, based on that hydras probably stays in the swamp and not in the forest and dragons live in the mountains.

For any other creature, it must be a fan-made creature in the forest. Or maybe Lune visiting the old castle in the everfree forest!

Before I read the spoiler paragraph, I was begining to wonder if the mane 6 or the orphanage would go "where are scootalo going all the time?" and then follow her to the cabin. And thus reveal the "local forest monster". But hey... This works just as well!

he said something about being "immortal" i take he does that by stealing the years someone has of their life. if he did this to an already immortal being would he steal their immortallity? if yes couldnt he do this to discord to kill two birds one stone. killed the immortal spirit of chaos. immortality GET!

>>194210194210 As for his powers, he could essentially just steal years and years from an immortal, because they would never lose anything any way. Infinity-7 is still infinity. Also, stamina, health, and years ALL depend on the life 'spark', the thing that he can see in every living thing and tell their physical state from 'reading' it. That and the fact that since they are all aspects of life energy,  they can be used somewhat interchangeably. He can already become a "false immortal", in that he can just take lifespan as he needs it, if he wanted to. To become a "True immortal", having an unlimited lifespan without constantly needing to feed on others, he'd have to have an immortal life source.

>>194114194114 (screwed the comment up, forgot I could edit it until just now.) Having truly unlimited would be impossible, same as with health. Think of life like a campfire. You have the campfire pit, which is a metal ring preventing the flames from escaping and catching the nearby grass on fire. That's the spark of life, and life cannot exist without that. Then you have to wood, the fuel for the fire. Changing lifespan is like stealing someones firewood, or giving them some of your own. You don't have an ax, so you can't chop down trees. The size of the flame is health, and changes with the wind. Too hard a gust and it begins to falter, but a gentle breeze makes it stronger. (Working out damages your muscles, making them repair stronger, no pain no gain) And the heat coming off it is stamina, and is constantly regenerating. Ever notice how the back of your refrigerator is hot? It's because the system is bringing heat away from the area. Stamina theft works the same. No matter how much heat you take, you will never cause damage to the fire. No matter how much health you take, you cannot make the wood burn any faster. However, if you add more wood to the fire than necessary, the fire will grow, and so will the amount of heat it gives off, while shortening your supply. Celestia, has a fire pit the size of the Sun which she represents. Instead of wood for the flame, she uses nuclear fusion. So basically, she won't live FOREVER, just as long as the sun, making her life span several billion years. We may as well call her an immortal then. With this she has near infinite capacity for health and stamina, which is why the only thing that can hurt her is Luna, Discord, or the Elements of Harmony, all of which are other immortal forces. Luna is younger and weaker than her sister, but was stronger when she was Nightmare Moon, forcing Celestia to tip the scale in her favor again with the Elements. As for Nightshade, no, he would not be able to make them fall asleep, there is just way too much stamina there for him to absorb. It has to go SOMEWHERE. While the immortal's bodies use that stamina at a faster rate as well, so they still need sleep, but there's no way he could even affect it in the slightest, unless he gained an equal capacity for life as them, or he somehow saw the entire universe at the same time (since he needs a line of sight to do it), and fed it their energy. Also, he does have a maximum rate of energy transfer, which is equal to his own maximum of the specific type of life energy per second, unless he has physical contact, in which case it's unlimited.

>>194707194707 okay so if i'm getting this right he would need 2 things to make it work.

1) and object or being (lets go with object) that could hold the life spark of such a large amount that it would be considered" immortal

2) physical contact to which ever source he's stealing from.

the problem i see in this theory of mine is that he would need to beable to "steal" and "give at the same time to tyransfer the life spark into the object. the second problem i see is that i dont believe he could steal the life spark from abeing that is trapped inside a magically enforced stone prison that is discord's, correct?

Tracking

>>194770194770 Well, you're right, he wouldn't be able to steal Discords, because he's in cased in stone. So even if he put his hands right on the statue, he wouldn't be in physical contact. What's more, transferring a "spark" Would be like digging up a fire pit, with wood and fire burning in it, and moving it somewhere else. The only way he could be immortal would be if he took the fire pit itself. If he tried to take all the years, it wouldn't work, because a spark has a specific capacity for years as well, same as stamina and health. So, if your maximum lifespan is 100 years, then you couldn't drain an someone of several billion years, when your own max is 100. Once again, you can't replenish it until you use it up. He also can only have one spark, as I said before, nothing can have two. Then the only way he could become immortal is if he lost his own life, and had physical contact with an immortal while dead. But then he'd be dead and wouldn't be able to do it. So unless he has a baby sized immortal riding around on his back, (insert adorable mental image of baby Celestia in a backpack) to be an unlimited life source for him, it wouldn't work. As for bringing inanimate objects to life, it wouldn't work because there is no hole dug in the ground to put the fire pit in in the first place. Non organic material can't hold life. And again, it would be like pulling a fire pit out of the ground with your bare hands, flame still burning, and carrying it somewhere else.

Okay folks, next chapter is written. I'll give it to you tomorrow....AFTER i write the one after. I'm gonna try for 2 chapters a day, while only feeding you one maybe every 2 days, for a little bit just to get ahead, then i'll start giving em out more regularly again. I may be awesome, but eventually I'm gonna run out of idea's and need to brainstorm again. What I have planned for the future, although I won't say when or in what order, is there's going to be some Granny smith, a Great and Powerful guest, a rampaging unicorn, and, although I said I was gonna cut her out, I think I like having Lyra in the dreamscape, as a kind of balance to the hustle and bustle of being awake. She's kind of the comedy relief, as well as a relaxing 'somepony I can talk to without being judged' for him, besides Scoots, the crusaders, and Zecora.

By the way, from now on, if someone asks a question I intend to answer later in the story, as much as it kills me to do so, I will ignore your question. Basically, you guys are so smart you keep forcing me to give away bits and pieces of the plot ahead of time. I'm not going tell you to stop it, that would be something a big grumpy meaniepants would do, so if you ask a question and I don't say anything, take it as. "I'll answer your question in the story." Seriously though, Vinetion is some kind of mind reader. All the questions he asked I totally intended to answer in chapters 10 and 11.

OH GOD THE SUSPENSE

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also, great chapter

I want moar, liek rite nao

So yeah. I want to see what happens neeext!

Damn you, cliffhanGERRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRS!

May i have some more, please?

FROST!

Finally!

Cliffhanger be damned. more! more! more!,

I really want to know who far they will go to catch Nightshade, how far he will go be avoid capture.

Well, to answer one of the questions, most of ponyville is stuck in their stereotypical stereotypicalness because that's just how they are. Most of them still don't fully trust Zecora, and it IS nightmare night, and most didn't see Gilda attack, because they were busy doin their own stuff. When you go into town and see a whole bunch of scared ponies, an unconscious griffin, and a never before seen creature wearing shredded robes that are stained in blood, what are they going to think? I mean, even if it is Halloween, his 'costume' was far more gruesome than any of the others. That's right he's gotten so much blood on his clothes that a previously midnight black trench coat has been stained dark red. He's tried washing it and it just won't come out. also, Scootaloo and friends had run off BEFORE Pinkie Pie freaked out, and BEFORE Twilight and the gang showed up. As far as they know, it was a random monster attack. They didn't have time to go around getting eye witness reports.

As for you people wanting more. I already said that I would only be giving you one a day, I've got the next one written, but you'll have to wait for tomorrow while I work to get ahead a bit. I'm serious. I'm not budging here. If I don't hold back I won't be able to get ahead. You understand, I need a buffer, so when I hit the creative wall I'll have something to fall back on. Hey, why are you looking at me like that? Where did you get that rope from? Umm, guys? GUYS? Ok fine, here it is. But seriously, starting TOMORROW I'm gonna have to start holding out on you. You're like Pinkie Pie when the sweets shop is sold out.

damnit, he only wants to be left alone

Ugh... now to wait for the next update...

FROST!

Fluttershy is so OP. As always

.. Am I seriously the only one that wants to kill Mane 6 and Luna RIGHT NOW!!

I just want to tear their darn limbs off and murder them brutally and feast with their blood and flesh..

Assholes....

Rainbow Dash = scootaloo's favorite "PONY" takes out and arrests scootaloo's "DAD"..... rainbow dash just lost an admirerer

Part of the reason Fluttershy flew off the handle is because as far as she's concerned, this creature is capable of killing plants at will, and she just saw her friends faint. She probably thinks they are near death or something. And Rainbow Dash, her oldest friend, is now bleeding. This chapter kind of makes them into 'bad guys' but at the same time, they just wanted to know what was going on, if he hadn't ran, then it would have all been settled. Of course he DID run, because he was trying to avoid confrontation. I think I got each of their reactions down properly, so that it didn't feel awkward. Next chapter is gonna be a bit calmer, but I'm not gonna write it just yet, because it's time for dinner.

I only have one random comment to say

*slams my hands on my coumputer desk*

THIS IS BULLSHIT there is no way in hell someone can make something original amazing awsome and make a cool character look bad at the same time

*puts on a top hat and specticals and claps*

bravo my good sir bravo keep them coming

Fluttershy's stare defeating all kind of evils is a cliche thats needs to die, ffs stop using it!!! Anyway nice chapter  :D

>>197796197796 Yeah, I know it's a bit overused, but then again, so is Lyra's human obsession. Don't worry, there isn't going to be any more OP Fluttershy stare. I was just planning on using it here, and to be fair, she's not defeating evil with it, she totally ABUSED her power right there. She was so mad, it made what the dragon got look like a birthday party.

Wild Everything appeared.

Go Fluttershy

Fluttershy used Stare (13/60 PP)

Critical Hit, It's Super Effective.

Everything Fainted

(fucking OP stare i should have seen that coming)

besides that part, was a pretty good chapter

Well, besides the stare I do agree that it was a good chapter, but I kind of NEEDED the stare, because while it was a bad experience, it set up the framework for the next plot device, which will be in the next chapter.

<- will have something to do with it.

Hmmmmm remember what I said about not mortifying yourself with strict updating schedule and taking your time?.... Yeahhh I’m gonna have to take that back, I can barely wait for the next chapter.

Oh by the way, what color is Nightshade’s cloak? Dark blue or black? I can’t find it, and those kind of meaningless questions refuse to leave my mind.

>>198058198058 It's midnight black. Or at least it was. He's gotten so much blood on it from his various injuries that it's actually a deep crimson now. Just a testament to his level of badassery. As for the whole holding off on chapters, writing them and not publishing them, you know what. SCREW IT. I was going to, but what does it matter? If I hit my creative block, then I do, I'll just post it in the comments with an apology. At this point I'm cranking out 2-3 a day, I don't think there's any lack of creativity going on here. Next chapter will be out sometime at midnight.

>>198260198260

Was hoping he would put up more of a fight but still, pretty well done. And im glad to hear the next chapter is near

>>198352198352 Part of the reason he didn't fight more was because it's not like he's trying to hurt them. He knows that they are doing what they think is right, but that doesn't coincide with what he thinks is right. And besides, he has Scootaloo to think about. If he pulled a knife on them, he couldn't bear to look at her. And as for putting up a fight, he knocked out Rarity, Applejack, Rainbow Dash, and Twilight Sparkle. Pinkie has way too much energy, and he didn't think of her or Fluttershy as a threat. He was ready to start fighting the princess, but then Fluttershy came in and was all OP.

>>198260198260

Dried bloodstains turn brown after a few days, in my experience, but I've never had a whole cloth covered in blood. Oh well, rule of cool.

Now, to comment on the story. I'll come out and say Nightshade does irk me in some ways, constantly going on about how humans are evil, and violent, and not being a greedy douchebag makes you not human. That's a recurring theme in some of these HiE stories, and one I don't like. I do get the temptation to compare our shitty but real world to the nigh-perfect but fictional world of the ponies, but with reality comes the fact there is seldom true black and white morality in our world. Nightshade seems to be really jaded, if he can't see that. I get that a guy you thought was your friend trying to kill you can really change your view of things, but I find it hard to believe he'd have his eyes closed to everything else. I'm sure you've heard this all before, and I do give you props for attempting to show the other side at one point, but that's just a pet peeve of mine.

However, I do like Nightshade as a whole. He's got a lot of integrity, and control over his actions, seems like a good guy overall. I'm also interested to see where this story is going (goddamnit Mane Six, leave him alone!). Just look out for grammar and punctuation errors. I've noticed you do this "Blank...blank" a lot, you should put a space so it looks like "Blank... blank." A friendly word of advice. Until next time!

DAMMIT LYRA!Y U RUIN TOUTCHING MOMENT?!?!

"Damnit LYRA!"

Now post more!

By the royal decree of the king of Tungestania, Aldenator the First,

MOAR MOAR MOAR MOARMOAR MOAR MOAR MOARMOAR MOAR MOAR MOAR

NOA!!!

I do say chap..............PLEASE POST SOME MORE NOOWWWW!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!..............please

nice goin man,love your stories.

i like what i see

MORREMORREMORREMORREMORREMORREMORREMORREMORREMORRE

I've got a problem, one I never thought I'd have. I have too many idea's. I thought of 6 different ways I could write the next chapter, 3 of which are REALLY good, and I can't decide! Oh wait, I got it! I know a really good one! Even better than the others! I hope it turns out alright. I'm also glad to see such a good reception of my story. For being my first ever fic, it's going swimmingly.

Oh i'm using NightShade on my fanfic.Now.Care about using ME on your fanfic?

-Fire Bolt,Alicorn living outside of Equestria...And knows how it feels to be different...-

>>200009200009 You're using him as like how? A side character? Main character? Like what? As for using you in my fic, that honour is reserved for the one who comes of with the cover art for the story. Besides, I'd also need a complete personality and character overview, that way I can figure out the best way to insert the character, although I already have a plan for the one who get's me the cover art. Post links in the comments, I'll take the one I like. If they take too long, maybe I'll put them in the sequel. Yes that's right, officially confirming that I'm writing a sequel. After this one is done, in like a YEAR. Which means nobody else get's to write the sequel. I do. It's mine.

2 miles?! damn, not looking good

LYYYRRRRAAAAA!!!!! lyra better get smacked for this later

istantanteuos transfer? smash into a tree and immediately move all pain into surrounding area? i dont know but that seems to be the only way to survive

http://today.msnbc.msn.com/id/17113222/ns/today/t/skydiving-miracle-man-falls-two-miles/#.TzLn_eb37pQ

>>200394200394 Don't worry, i'll explain it within probably the first 2 paragraphs of next chapter. Unless I have Lyra but in.

By the way, if you look at Canterlot in the show, it's WAAAAAY up there. And that's from far away. I figure it's about 2 miles. i mean, it's on top of a freaking mountain.

>>200453200453

hence the reason I posted the link.

Blackberry bushes saved a guys live from an over two mile drop.

I think there is an easy way out involving bushes.

>>200474200474 NOPE, Chuck Testa. There wouldn't be stuff like that growing in the shadow of the castle, not enough light. And besides, if this guys history is any indication, he NEVER gets to take the easy way out. It's just not there for him. The discovery of this ability will be vital at the end of the story, so no. No bushes. This guy is the unluckiest guy in the world when it comes to avoiding danger. He just never gets a break.