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A Hoof-ful of Dust


You can't see the forest...

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Bon Bon's had a hard day at work. Again. Written with a word-count of exactly 1000 words.

(Audio version by Pony Tales.)

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Comments ( 26 )

aw, that was super cute~

d'awww
I love a well-done L&BB, warms my (kinda cold right now, maybe i should go get my jacket...) heart :twilightsmile::heart:

not sure what this has to do with rope, though...unless we're implying an unwritten sequel of "later that night"?

That was cute.

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Lyra and Bon Bon are best fanon couple.

As for what the title has to do with the story - nothing, really. I name everything using song titles, and the connection the title has to the story has to the song is tenuous at best and usually only means something to me. I'd name all my stories things like "Short story about venting" or "Long adventure about alicorns and trees" if I could.

Exactly 1000 words, that'd be a deci-drabble, wouldn't it? :pinkiehappy: I can almost forgive the ponies in the story for reading the sign wrong, possessive apostrophes give me no end of trouble, since my first language doesn't use them.

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Something like that, yeah. I don't really dig the 100-word format (way too short for me), but I wrote a fair bit of fanfiction for another fandom where the length of a drabble was measured at 500~ words, and I liked the challenge of nailing the 500 words exactly when the typical length would be 1-200 words over. FIMFic requires 1000 words to publish, so here I have to up the size to 1000 words for super-short stories. It's still fairly tight.

And plenty of naitive English speakers mess up the possessive/plural thing, so you're not alone.

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I like the ~500 word format as well, and I've written some fanfics for the writers group monthly writer's prompt, rule is, no more than 550 words. Unfortunently, we haven't had any new ones since january, I really gotta poke the guy in charge of that.:raritydespair:

Short and sweet. I loved it. Not enough good LyraBons out there, but the ones that are are usually fucking amazing (like this). Take my star, dear author, and please write more LyraBon (and OctaScratch).

Now that's a Slice of Life I'll be looking up to when writing stuff from now on. :twilightsmile:

Wow, that was very nice.

Not sure I get the title, though.

Awwwww, no love for fudge? Short, sweet and simple, fine work all around.

I love the way you write romance. I love it so much. The things you do in 1,000 words some people can't get in five chapters... Thanks for making me feel emotions. I needed that.

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Everything about this is awesome. That squeaky Betty Boop voice of Bon Bon's has now completely overridden any sort of headcanon about how she sounds, and only too late do I realise I should have called this story Thank You (For Loving Me At My Worst). I had to pause the thing in a couple of places because I was laughing out loud - at lines I wrote!

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Wow, this is the first time I've come to say I did a podfic reading only to find someone has already beaten me to it. :derpyderp2: I'm glad you liked it though. :pinkiehappy:

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I honestly think you should title a fic that second one, or something similar. <.< That would be interesting. It's actually disappointing, almost, that the title seems to have nothing to do with the story. Not that that dulled my appreciation of it. You actually gave Bon-Bon some character! I really appreciate that.

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But picking titles is so... ugh. I just steal them from things that already have titles, and then people can make up their own mind how they're connected. For example, I wrote this story without a word processor, right into the site, so that's a bit like discarding the safety net when walking a tightrope. Then the actual story is about how Lyra mellows Bon Bon out when she's being all frayed and wound up, like and old piece of ship-rope. But that's just my spin on things; doesn't mean it's right.

I guess Bon Bon gets overshadowed a little by her other half, considering she has so much more fanon to work with. I like the dynamic they have here, and I dunno, Bon Bon seems a little pissed off at something a lot of the time she gets lines. I like the irony of a pony with a cutie mark of something sweet having such a sour disposition, haha. I want to write them again in something else.

That was the nicest story I have ever heard.
Thank you

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That's the thing that got me: there's a metaphor in this, but it has to do with hard candy, not rope, so in reflecting back on the story, I was completely thrown. Also going into it, I was expecting bondage with AJ. It does make sense when you explain it, I guess I've just always thought titles should reflect something in the narrative. :B I suppose I can deal with it, however.

A wonderful piece, truly. One of my biggest personal failing as an author is that I have never been able to write Short. It always seems to get long and involved and complex.

But there is beauty in Short if done properly, and there is certainly beauty in this. Thank you very much for sharing with us all.

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I know the pain of picking titles as well. Hard Candy would have been as succinct and evocative as the rest of this piece, IMO.

Edit: Hah! 100th upvote.

very enjoyable. listened to scribbler's read. flowed well

I wrote a review of this story; it can be found here.

Sweet. Although, and I'm probably overthinking this, but-- the relationship doesn't seem very... honest. I think it's quite common for real couples to behave like this, but that doesn't change that Lyra is essentially just telling Bon Bon what she wants to hear, and not at all what she really thinks. I'm not sure if I like that... prob depends on how much Bon Bon is aware of it.

A lovely and sweet character piece.

This deserves more recognition. Simple and sweet. Great job.

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