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  • Sunday
    I hate me

    Dear FIMFic,

    God, life has been really mean to me recently. I can't write, think or be creative here in any way.

    I want to finish A Week In The Life, TGA PII and others like Rosetta and Unicorn: Gundam, but I feel like my dog after she chases her tail for fifty minutes straight. Nothing I write comes out the way I want it to, all the chapters I've left them on make it extremely difficult to pick back up, especially for A Week In The Life, since my rough drafts of them were deleted long ago. Then there's the problem of wondering if any of you care that I'm working on anything anymore, especially with the absolutely horrid responses I've gotten from my last two stories. While I know not everyone likes the same things, it makes me wonder if being 46 on the Top 50 authors means anything.

    I know I sound like some whiny teenager or whatever else you can come up with, but bottling this up only makes it worse for me. I can't tell you how nice quitting has sounded over the last few days, but there is far too much to be done before I can consider it. Too many promises I've made to break and just drop off the site or declare I'm finished writing. So, with that in mind, I want to say this:

    I'm sorry. To all of you.

    I'm sorry my quality of updates has dropped to almost non-existent levels, that I've published stupid ideas and that I can't make myself write.

    I'm also sorry to my friends Cerulean Voice, vren55, Nomad Sigma and Celestias Paladin for the mud and terrible lack of concern I've put them through.

    Regards,

    C.B.

    29 comments · 189 views
  • 1w, 2d
    Well, that's one way to send a message

    Dear FIMFic,

    So, I guess people are loving the new Favorite system, mostly because I got this today.

    aquapunkchick added A Week In The Life to THINGS THAT NEED TO FUCKING UPDATE BECAUSE I MISS THEM 2:46pm

    0_0

    I guess that's one way to send a message.

    And last week, I was asked this, too.

    Autumnfire said: do you ever plan on continuing "a week in the life?"

    So... you guys want to see that story be updated? I guess I should admit that the rather lackluster response is most of the reason it hadn't been updated, especially since I thought many of you were upset with the way I was portraying Rainbow Blitz.

    However, if you all are wanting to read more of Butterscotch and Red Gala, I do have a partial chapter written for A Week In The Life and I can devote my efforts into finishing it. Let me know!

    Regards,

    C.B.

    10 comments · 161 views
  • 4w, 6d
    It is finished

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  • 5w, 2d
    What a day...

    Dear followers,

    As the title says, I've had quite the day. I know many of you may lose respect for me or think I'm being whiny, but I just need somewhere to vent as of right now.

    Okay, so I've been writing a covert project to aid me with the next chapter of The Golden Armor involving a really depressing death scene. Going to sleep in a depressed mood already, I had a really strange dream that involved the nuking of my state and the crushing sense that it was about to happen in my hometown next. Surprise, when it did, I woke up sweating and clawing at the wall. Needless to say, things went downhill from there. Stressed from sleeping, I learned what I thought was a half-day at work was not only a full day, but an extra two hours of OT were tossed on it.

    Throughout my day, I was checking FIMFic and noticed some awesome things happen to some of the people I follow. Rainbowbob got Obselescence to do a new Feature Box group, Cerulean Voice was made admin of a new story reviewing initiative and Autumnschild has a schedule to start writing again. Then I came to my page and realized I offered to do a live writing over a week ago. Seems like other better authors come through on their promises more than me.

    So, I've come home and sat down, hoping to feel slightly better when I start writing, but realized that I probably am just going to refresh the page again and again, hoping for something to hit me. Anyway, I've got a date for the live writing if you all are still interested. This Friday at 10 o'clock AM, I will officially begin crafting the next chapter of The Golden Armor: Part II. If you all would like to join me, I'll release the link the night prior.

    To all of you, I hope you all had a better day than I did.

    Regards,

    C.B.

    16 comments · 222 views
  • 7w, 5h
    Live Writing, anyone?

    Dear FIMFic,

    Life has gotten a bit too tiring for me. But then again, what did I expect when work dumps 10 hours of mandatory OT on you?

    So, in an effort to liven up my inspiration tanks, I will be taking yet another leaf out of my friend's book. I think it would be cool to do a live writing of a chapter to one of my stories and I want ALL OF YOU to decide which one I'll do. Once a story has been decided, I will set a date and time to start the chapter and have all of your input on it.

    Think of it; you can correct my writing, toss out ideas or ask/comment on the story as it's being written!

    Oh, and voting begins now. Majority wins!

    Regards,

    C.B.

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This story is a sequel to The Golden Armor

It's more of a continuation than a sequel, but whatever.

Comet is the leader of Princess Celestia's personal guard. Angel is the leader of Princess Luna's.

Comet is awake during the day. Angel stays up all night.

Comet likes using a halberd. Angel excels at using claws.

Comet is a pegasus. Angel is a bat pony.

Together, they take on all the twists and turns life hands them. However, things don't always go as planned.

Cover art by Equestria Prevails.

Proofread by jmartkdr and Feather Scratch

First Published
4th May 2013
Last Modified
24th Sep 2014
#1 · 80w, 8h ago · · · Just Another Day ·

And we're off! In regal style! :raritystarry:

Love the sweeping, vibrant feel of the opening. Very cinematic.

I was snickering at the crowd control part. To someone who lived through the Royal Wedding I can say, folks definitely go strangely gaga for these big royal events. :pinkiecrazy:

Daww! It's great to see Angel still being Angel, even when she's on her best behaviour!

Ahem. Sorry. Proofreading... yes. Okay! Channeling the Descerning eye of Rarity now! :duck:

1/ "It all started as a day like any other." -Get rid of this. As an opening, it's one step away from "Once upon a time." It's cliché.

2/ "Below sat the familiar sight of Canterlot." -Familiar to who? Are you addressing the reader directly or are you implying that Canterlot is so engrained into the collective Pony psyche as to render its existence beneath interest? I'm probably reading way too much into that but, perhaps consider re-wording.

3/ "In truth, the guard didn't believe that." -Golden rule: Show, Don't Tell. This is telling. You're great at characterization; show us what a cynical grump he is.

4/Dude, as spectacular as your imagery is, you spend nearly two solid paragraphs telling us what the guards at the door looked like. I think in this particular instance, less is more. Save the sweet and savoury detail for the main cast!

5/ "Goldencloaks" I like that. Very dramatic. Bet Comet loves it. Is there a Lunar Guard equivalent?

6/ "A stifled smile at the corner of her mouth was evident, along with her leathery wings." -What are her wings doing? I can guess, but the way you've worded it makes it seem as though the mere existence of her wings are a sign that she's excited.

7/ "She had a very less pronounced collar." -I think you mean "much less."

8/ "Darkly, Comet thought." -Lose the "Darkly." Adverbs are the enemy of all good writers and should be used as sparingly as possible.

Aaaaaaaaaand, that's all I can think to say right now. So great to see the old team again! :pinkiehappy:

Is it too early to whip out the nostalgia goggles?:rainbowdetermined2:

Excellent choice to start the story at the coronation. Showing the characters at their ultimate highpoint means every little thing that goes awry will be twice as sharp.

Looking good so far! :twilightsmile:

#2 · 79w, 6d ago · · · Just Another Day ·

First pass: Very nice, like Feather Scratch said very cinematic! Strong visuals are important near the beginning; it's the only chance you'll have to really ingrain the images into the readers' minds.

Second pass:

" Celestia's sun shined brightly from behind some wispy clouds the weather ponies didn't bother with. "

Gah. Weather Report, really? The pan down effect is much more effective on film. Try starting in the castle itself, or at least the streets.

"Some pegasi and unicorns even floated in the air, " How are unicorns floating?

"One of them, a sentry in the standard issue armor, glared at several pegasi who hovered above him." Give this guy a name. Maybe he gets called back later.

"guards from the princess's own bodyguard detachment." princesses' plural possessive. Also, detachments

"One was a white pegasus with a red mane and tail, a quite unusual sight from the typical blue maned guards." This was a little weird until I realized: Are Goldencloaks not seen very ofter around the palace? I think you meant that he was not the usual blue maned type of guard. I would replace 'a quite unusual sight' with 'different' and leave it at that.

"Under one of her wings sat a rather large spear, ending in a pike tip with an axe blade on one side, hook on the opposite and the tip above both." It's called a halberd. An excellent choice for arms (it's what the Pope's Swiss guard traditionally use) but bronies on the whole are nerdy enough to know what a halberd is. Just use the word and leave out the description here.

"All in all, she looked the role of a Solar Guard, or a Goldencloak as they were commonly known." Was she a Goldencloak, or did she just look the part? How about, "All in all, she was every inch a member or the Solar Guard, ..."

"polar opposite " This might just be me, but I hate that phrase. 'inverse'?

"He rightly shone the pride of the Lunar Guard" should be 'He rightly shone with the pride of the Lunar Guard'

"He was large, intimidating and awesome looking." Don't use awesome here. Or ever use the phrase 'awesome looking.'

"The pegasus had a white pelt, blonde hair but fiery red eyes that somehow looked like they were encapsulated in ice." This sentence is missing a word, but I'm not sure which word. 'somehow still looked'? 'they were also encapsulated'? Try a few versions, but play up the contrast. It's a core part of Comet's character, after all: tightly controlled passion.

" a tall armor collar leading to a turquoise star on his chest." armored. Also, why turquoise? Why not amethyst? or did I miss something?

"containing her excitement as best she could." This is telling where you should be showing.

"A stifled smile at the corner of her mouth was evident, along with her leathery wings. " PASSIVE VOICE! I just got finished with another story that did this way to much, which is really only two or three times anyway. I won't say never use passive voice, but it's bloodless and stale. Also, the dependent clause is incomplete, though Feather Scratch caught that too.

" a lighter version similar to the pegasus's. " Which pegasus? (I assume Comet, but it isn't clear enough)

"he complained." This may or may not need to change, but the dialogue should speak for itself.

Words like 'complained', 'opined', 'queried', or *shudder* 'exclaimed' are often a sign of weak dialogue that doesn't express itself well in the first place. i.e., we know he's complaining. This sort of invisible miscue can turn off readers early.

"the bat pony barely contained a fit of laughter." Don't tell us what she didn't do, show us what she did do.

This whole last paragraph is telling, but in this case, that's perfectly okay. Show action, tell downtime. (unless you have a really witty way of telling) Except for this:

"Darkly, Comet thought it was a job Shining Armor pushed on him so he could not worry about work that day." I was going to tell you to clean up the sentence when I realized: You haven't introduced Comet by name yet. Maybe just admit Shining delegated like a boss (pun intended), or say 'his subordinates' felt put upon because Shining didn't want to work that day.

Told you I could do mean. :ajsmug:

But hey, you should have seen some of my early drafts... :pinkiesick:

EDIT: seems like you fixed all that. Looking over it again, I'm liking how life moves on only somewhat smoothly. Waiting for the other shoe to drop...

#3 · 79w, 6d ago · · · Just Another Day ·

Much better opening although perhaps; “As a collective, their gaze was fixed on the magnificent gold and white castle,” could become: Their gaze, as a whole, was fixed on the magnificent gold and white castle.

“Straight to the coronation room where Princesses Celestia, Luna and Cadance awaited.” –Waited, not awaited.

“The Zodiac.” –Nice.

“In a crisp, well rehearsed movements.” –Uh, lose the ‘s’ or make it ‘In a series of crisp, well rehearsed movements.

“The pegasus had a white pelt, blonde hair but fiery red eyes that somehow looked like they were crystallized.” –Should be ‘and’ fiery red eyes.

“He had just put up with an hour and fifteen minutes of complaints from the guards, accomplished by burying his head into his desk.” –Hmm, this sentence doesn’t feel quite right. It makes it sound like he had his head buried in his desk ‘while’ he was dealing with complaints. Very unprofessional Comet. The Sam Vimes approach doesn’t work for everyone.

“He missed the days when he was guarding Philomena

, Princess Celestia's prized pet phoenix.” –What’s with the gap between Philomena and the coma?

“Shining trotted over to the window and stared out it, filling Comet with a sense of dread.” –Lose the ‘it’ or add an ‘of’, out of it.

“Comet's eyes shrunk to pinpricks as his superior officer told him that.” –Comet’s ‘pupils’ shrunk, not his eyes. It’d look freaky if his entire eyes shrunk.

“You were used in a similar way and now is one of the ponies closest to Celestia.” –Major glitch here. ‘And now you’re of the ponies closest to Celestia.’

“She'll be most likely staying here in Canterlot.” –‘She'll most likely be staying here in Canterlot.’ Misplaced ‘be.’

“Pinkie Pie learned quickly that day not to make phoenixes angry.” –Nice joke, but doesn’t feel quite right. I don’t know. Call this a judgment call on your part but I personally don’t think there is enough context in the anecdote to bring Pinkie back a second time.

“She responded by nuzzling his chest further and sighing heavily in a content way.” –‘Contentment’ not ‘in a content way.’ Less is more.

"Sorry, but I've got my job to do," she squeaked, "But I'll see you in the morning, kay?" –Lose the second ‘but.’ Repetition.

And that’s all I can think to nitpick. Good job on the touch ups. I’m liking Clyde.:twilightsmile:

All in all, looking great. I can’t think of any major improvements that need to be made.

Is that the end of the chapter?

#4 · 79w, 3d ago · 1 · · Just Another Day ·

"She had her leathery bat wings spread, which Comet learned meant she was really excited, and trotted into the office. " Comet had learned (yes, past perfect is right here)

"Ouch, pull those claws back," Midnight said as he sucked on his teeth. Even though they were related, Angel and Midnight had a strained relationship. Being the first foal born to her mother after she left her father, Angel secretly loathed Midnight's company. He always reminded her of the unpleasant time in her life when her mother abandoned her and her father to go off and save the colony, all the while trying to convince Angel to do the same. With live births so rare among bat ponies, Angel wanted to avoid a life of bearing more foals than she could count.

This is a rather ugly infodump... it will probably be better to spread this out over several scenes, including the one where Angel tries to explain this Comet.

This feels a little long for one chapter. More like a chapter and a half. And the last bits with Midnight Glow are really tell-y. Definitely want to spread all that out over the next several chapters, with a few important bits put into the dialogue, i.e.:

"Hello, sister."

""Half-sister" You did this part well, we want more of that.

"Midnight never really knew his mother..." Bring this back up in conversation when Valyrie talks about her mom.

"It was an odd thing, dating a gryffon" Have Angel ask how Valyrie's doing (she is Angel's friend too, after all.) "She's fine,  still getting crazy letters from home, but she doesn't get too upset about them anymore." (Or is she just better at hiding it?)

The entire Midnight / Angel conversation should be in the second chapter anyway. I'm not sure if the scene in the office (with SA) should be the end of chapter 1 or the beginning of chapter two.

#5 · 79w, 3d ago · 1 · · Just Another Day ·

Fourth Pass:

"climb a wall meant for Royal Guard use only and fly off, leaving some very flustered and, quite frankly, unhappy guards" ...fly off, and leave behind some very flustered and...

" Comet barely had time to look professional as his commanding officer, Shining Armor, trotted in." ...look professional before his commanding...

"Shining half heartedly returned " half-heartedly hyphenate

""Good," Shining retorted. He stayed silent for a few seconds, but continued. "You are aware that the new princess is my own sister, right?"" I feel SA would call Twi his "little sister" here

"craziest mare in Equestria other than Pinkie Pie" This feels like a title, in which case it should be capitalized and separated by single quotes, like so:

'Craziest Mare in Equestria Other Than Pinkie Pie'

:pinkiehappy:

"almost didn't fit her face" Almost didn't fit on her face. (the idiom you used suggests a false smile. There is nothing in Equestria more real than Pinkie's smile)

"Pinkie Pie learned quickly that day not to make phoenixes angry." This is a poorly executed noodle incident. Consider revising.

""You're still annoying. I just can't yell at you now," he replied sarcastically." Comet's coming off a bit dickish here; might want to indicate he's joking a little better. Perhaps 'He couldn't keep the corners of his mouth completely down, however.'

"acting as if taken aback" What did she do with her hooves? (She placed one against her heart as though she were hurt, the other extended out in standard dramatic fashion)

"of tolerance to her annoying ways." Use another word for annoying here. 'manic'?

"Angel froze for a second before turning to attack the shadow" I thought Angel was a little more badass than that. I'd think she'd get a good kick in (even if it didn't quite connect) rather than being overpowered by her inferiors.

Overall good. I might have broken this into three separate chapters, but I tend to favor short chapters.

#6 · 77w, 2d ago · 4 · · Rules of Engagement ·

Okey Dokie Loki!:pinkiehappy: Edits, as requested:

-“The stone walls seemed to magnify it”- Perhaps change ‘magnify’ to ‘amplify.’

-“the elite Night Guards, usually were posted”- reverse the ‘were’ and ‘usually.’

-“swirling mass of black against a wall with a smile.”- Is the wall smiling?

-“her most prominent feature was the holes in her body”- I’d change this to: ‘her most prominent features were the holes in her body.’

-“Angel felt powerless and vulnerable afterwards because, no matter if she could do anything in the dream, Comet seemed to accept the changelings advances.”- This line confuses me a little. Do you mean ‘no matter what she tried to do in the dream’ or ‘despite anything she may have done in the dream?’ The way you’ve worded it just feels odd.

-“After the attack and the harsh realization he had gotten more physical contact with the changeling princess than with her, Angel had felt inferior to her.”- I’ change to: ‘After the attack and the harsh realization that he had gotten more physical contact with the changeling princess than her, Angel just felt inferior.’

-“wished it was the changeling or Valyrie he wanted.”- Lose the ‘he wanted.’

-“Determined not to let this rob her of yet another good sleep.”- Another good day’s/ night’s sleep.

-“It should be the local dump.[/]”-Why is everything after this point italicised? Also, lose the [/].

All in all, great chapter (part of a chapter?). I always love it when we get a glimpse into Angel’s mind. Poor mare.

Poor Comet! Regardless of past sins, nopony should be subjected to Blueblood for a prolonged period of time!:twilightoops:

#7 · 77w, 2d ago · 1 · · Rules of Engagement ·

Ah, time to set up the new conflicts.

I like the idea of Angel being jealous; it fits with her character nicely and flows rather naturally from the end of book one. Also, Blueblood. (Poor Comet!) Some fans are going to want to see Valyrie soon, though.

Specific points:

"bedquarters " Pretty sure that's not a word. Use either 'bedchamber' (one room with a bed in it; more formal than bedroom) or 'apartments' (many rooms; more realistic for the monarch/diarch, as she would have a study, bathroom, dressing room, etc. in addition to a bedchamber, and the guards would be posted outside the apartments. Unless the maid is also a guard or some such.)

"The two of them closed their eyes and passionately exchanged saliva, making some rather odd noises." This sentence changes tone halfway through. It's jarring. I would go with 'kissed' rather than 'exchanged saliva' This isn't sloppy-clop.

"Angel felt powerless and vulnerable afterwards because, no matter what she could do anything in the dream, Comet seemed to accept the changeling's advances. Angel was by no means insecure, but the nagging thought lingered in the back of her mind." Why the 'anything'? take it out. Also add the apostrophe and switch the 'a' to 'the'.

So much tell, so little show. I think that you can assume that your readers are familiar with what happened in book one, so I would skip the recap or have it in the form of dialogue with a new character. Just tell us what her body did (heart rate, trembling, etc) and we'll understand that she was very shaken by the dream. We already know she and Comet are a thing from chapter 2, so it makes sense in context already.

The next two paragraphs (why Angel feels inadequate) are also tell-y, but more necessary. Is their someone she can talk to? Maybe not even a real pony, but I could see her confiding in a stuffed animal.

Overall, I can see what you're doing. A lot of information the reader needs in order to follow the story from here on out, plus a little bit of drama with Angel and Comet. Just be careful, you don't want a boring infodump. Try to make the info come out of conversations or body language. Think of how (good) movie get this stuff across: while other things are happening, as little side stories framed as one character explaining it, or flashbacks. That's the essence of show vs. tell. (there are times where telling is okay, but you should pretty much never tell emotions.)

Have we re-introduced Valyrie as a POV character yet? What she's been up to (aside from Midnight :raritywink:) Might want to add a quick section with her guarding Philomena or whatever she's up to.

This is coming along nicely; can't wait for more. :pinkiehappy:

#8 · 77w, 2d ago · 1 · · Rules of Engagement ·

Second pass, more detail stuffs:

" cocked his head a bit and his ear twitched " cocked his head and twitched his ear. more symmetrical.

"princess of the moon." It's a title, capitalize: Princess of the Moon

"A pair of wicked green eyes stared at him from the other side of the room. The enchanting eyes stared out at him from a swirling mass of black against a wall with a smile underneath the eyes." You use 'stared' twice in a row; maybe change the first one to 'appeared'? Also, I think you can skip 'the eyes' at the end of the second sentence.

"He neither responded or reacted to the pony that approached him from a magical portal in the wall." change 'a' to 'the', if there's only one portal around.

I'm thinking you should put a page break at the end of the dream. It feels weird without it.

"Inside were paintings of excruciating horridity." This, right here, is awesome.

"large white easels, " canvasses. Easels are the stands. Unless Blueblood can't even hit the canvas in the first place. (suggestion: "all over the large white canvasses, and most of the easels as well")

I don't know if this was on purpose, but

"I would suggest a vintage look with an art deco overtone," Comet spoke, wondering just what the hay he was suggesting.
this is beautifully nonsensical.

Only a few little things, really, and most of those aren't even objectively wrong, just maybe "could be better" type stuff. You're getting better at this, I can tell.

#9 · 76w, 4d ago · · · Just Another Day ·

Huzzah! a sequel!:eeyup:

#10 · 76w, 4d ago · · · Just Another Day ·

I just saw this and went:

:rainbowkiss: OhmygoshOhmygoshOhmygoshOhmygoshOhmygosh

:derpytongue2:

#11 · 76w, 4d ago · · · Just Another Day ·

Right in the middle of me writing a big blog post (about pegasi dressing themselves) this gets posted. Of course.

Anyway, I'll read this when I get done with that.

#13 · 76w, 4d ago · · · Just Another Day ·

Cool beans. Now i have more distractions from my story writing! :ajsleepy::ajsmug:

#14 · 76w, 4d ago · · · Just Another Day ·

Hmmmmm. Continue with this, sir.

#15 · 76w, 4d ago · · · Just Another Day ·

YES! Nice to see that one of my favorite Fics is back for another round.

#16 · 76w, 4d ago · · · Just Another Day ·

:pinkiehappy: I saw this and i was like EEEEeeeeEEEeEEeEeEeeeEeEeEeEEeEEeeEeEeEe :pinkiehappy:

:rainbowkiss: THIS IS GONNA BE !!!!!SO AWESOME!!!!! :rainbowkiss:

#17 · 76w, 4d ago · · · Just Another Day ·

YYYYYYYYYEEEEEEEESSSSSSSSSSSSS!!!!!!!!! :raritystarry::raritystarry::raritystarry:

#18 · 76w, 4d ago · 8 · · Just Another Day ·

Huh. Golden Armor II?

No big de-Oh who am I kidding?

#19 · 76w, 4d ago · · · Just Another Day ·

The story shall continue, but I wouldn't recomend doing it until season 4 comes.

#20 · 76w, 4d ago · 1 · · Just Another Day ·

0-o

I lick your face in love <3

#21 · 76w, 4d ago · · · Just Another Day ·

ah... the memories :pinkiesmile::yay:

#22 · 76w, 4d ago · · · Just Another Day ·

Yes.

Yes.

Yes.

Yes.

Yes.

Yes?:derpyderp1:

YEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEES!!!!:pinkiehappy:

#23 · 76w, 4d ago · · · Just Another Day ·

As an avid and faithful reader of the previous part, I'm definitely excited for this one! Off to a good start!

#24 · 76w, 4d ago · · · Just Another Day ·

*Sees this. Jumps around like an idiot. Parents look at me like I'm an idiot* I DONT CARE!!! I LOVE YOU RIGHT NOW!!! YOU. ARE. AMAZING!! ALL OF MY YESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYES!!!

#25 · 76w, 4d ago · · · Just Another Day ·

YESYESYESYESYESYESYSYEYSEYSEYSEYSEYYSESYYSYESSYSEESYEYSAPDORJEKFDIKCLJVKAWERFCX,;Q~!@!##!1!!!!!!!!..............:flutterrage:yay.

#26 · 76w, 4d ago · · · Just Another Day ·

I love it when an author from my top three favorites writes more stories; it fills dull days with pure awesome!

Keep it up!!

#27 · 76w, 4d ago · · · Just Another Day ·

I knew it!! I knew there a sequel somewhere!!!

#28 · 76w, 4d ago · · · Just Another Day ·

"Just another day, after all."

:twilightoops: Oh, boy. S**t is going to go down so hard. That line just confirms it.

#29 · 76w, 4d ago · 2 · · Just Another Day ·

*me the moment I saw this*

OHMYGODOHMYGODGOLDENARMORPTIIEXISTS!INEEDTOREADIT!MUSTMUSTMUSTREAD!

*me after reading it*

:trollestia:

You have earned this:

:moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache:

#30 · 76w, 4d ago · · · Just Another Day ·

i literally started to just exhale loudly for almost a minute until i actually went over to click and start reading this. and i am so very glad that there is now a part 2 :pinkiehappy: :pinkiehappy: :pinkiehappy:

#31 · 76w, 4d ago · · · Just Another Day ·

I just started searching the comedy section after a sort of annoying day and then I saw the story. At first I was like :rainbowhuh:. Then I checked the author and clicked the link to double check. THEN I SQUEED AS HARD AS I COULD :rainbowkiss: AND INSTANTLY FAVED! I am so glad this was continued.:pinkiehappy:

#32 · 76w, 4d ago · · · Just Another Day ·

It begins anew! The adventures of Clyde the Guardpony and Friends!

#33 · 76w, 4d ago · · · Just Another Day ·

The moment i saw this i popped a blood vessel. IT FELT GOOD:pinkiehappy:

#34 · 76w, 4d ago · · · Just Another Day ·

Normally I'm a little skeptical about sequels, but this one doesn't feel too out of place, and does feel almost required in a few respects. Plus, your writing is among the best I've seen in here. Carry on. :moustache: :pinkiehappy:

#35 · 76w, 3d ago · · · Just Another Day ·

YES! :pinkiehappy:

And a happy life for Valyrie.....yay!

#36 · 76w, 3d ago · · · Just Another Day ·

Yes, bucking YESS!!!:pinkiehappy: one of the best stories I know of...HAS A SEQUEL!!!!:rainbowwild:

#37 · 76w, 3d ago · · · Just Another Day ·

Finally! Those two kiss like it's nothing! Good times await us, I can tell <3 If foals aren't foaled by the end of this story, I'll be disappointed (that is, if pegasi and bat ponies CAN breed)!

#38 · 76w, 3d ago · · · Just Another Day ·

good job

have a moustache :moustache:

#39 · 76w, 3d ago · · · Just Another Day ·

:yay:-{YAY)

#40 · 76w, 3d ago · · · Just Another Day ·

It's finally here  :pinkiehappy:

#41 · 76w, 3d ago · · · Just Another Day ·

As if a dream comes true. :pinkiehappy:

#42 · 76w, 3d ago · · · Just Another Day ·

Whoot! Huzzah for a sequel to one of my favorite fanfics ever.  And it's starting off good :D

#43 · 76w, 3d ago · · · Just Another Day ·

Wait until she gets pregnant :trollestia:

#44 · 76w, 3d ago · · · Just Another Day ·

>>2530844 ValyrieXMidnight i imagine there baby would be a jet black gryphon with leathery wing and golden eyes also for some reason she gets a cutie mark later on

#45 · 76w, 3d ago · · · Just Another Day ·

Woah...

Wow I am really impressed. Your writing skills have really improved, the suspense! I just paused in the middle of a important school project to read this. Everything's looking good. At first I was a little confused about the part of Pinkie Pie, but then I realized what that meant so I'm good now.

Goldencloaks and Zodiac? Best names ever! :pinkiehappy:

Right, onto the good stuff. The description of everything is amazing, you've really just satisfied me immediately. I like how the scene sort of revolves around Shining Armor and Comet and their conversation, you have really described Shining Armor's personality perfectly.

So for you sir (maybe it's a madam!) I'll give you 4 moustaches out of 5. You really must keep this up, you're on a streak!

:moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache:

From the humble sh:trollestia:tty writer.

#47 · 76w, 3d ago · · · Just Another Day ·

So you did make a sequel. Good job:pinkiehappy:

#48 · 76w, 3d ago · · · Just Another Day ·

How come I haven't discovered this sequel 'till now?  It's an outrage!  My thoughts on this chapter?  Good start dude.  I kinda like that it starts at the Twilight's coronation and what exactly the characters were doing.  Plus, I'm glad things are still good for the group... For now... But anyways, can't wait for the next chapter.

#49 · 76w, 3d ago · · · Just Another Day ·

Looking forward to the next chapter. Your story is very well written, good job.  :twilightsmile:

#50 · 76w, 3d ago · · · Just Another Day ·

Welcome drama, in any way possible.

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