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A new evil arises and must be stoped. The mane six must recover the elements of harmony to save Equestria, through unconventional means, and with a little help from some new friends. Also i suck at writing descriptions but if the title and the image doesn't give away what the story will be about then just read it.
not at all in fact if you pm me your email or some other way i can let you read the next chapter i could send it to you for editing/prereading. but also like i said in the beginning dysgraphias a bitch but im not going to use it as a crutch and pawn all my mistakes off with it so be gently brutal 
also im just glad that people are reading it
My biggest complaint is that the scenes felt a tad rushed and the transitions didn't quite feel as smooth as they could have. Also, the entire part where Applejack and Twilight argue about 'French or fancy' comes out of no where as no one says anything in french.
i will have to agree i suck at transitions but the 'French or fancy' part is a butchered version of the saying "its all Greek to me" and i included it because i needed to have Twilight and Applejack preoccupied by something so that Fluttershy would not just sit in the background for the majority of the scene. in the end it was suppose to be a comedic bit that functioned like two characters arguing in a movie while a third character goes and discovers something important.
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