It's Brony man, and I would suggest asking Editors Group for help with, well....editing. Damn, I was hoping for a new Spilight, I read every single one on this site and Fanfic.....no joke That's honestly very sad but I am a very big fan of the pairing so....yeah. Anyway, be sure to request an editor if one will aid you, I'm hoping to really see more of this, I loved it, and now it's time for a smoke

I liked where you were going, but this was a mess, sorry.

I read this on fanfic a while ago.
Dude, you REALLY need someone to help you with grammar.
Otherwise you did a good job so keep up the good work.

sorry I don't usually get all Grammar Nazi on people because I know that sometimes the people who write these are not using their first language, however I must say a story about Twilight of all Ponies that is not grammatically correct is an affront to Twilight.

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"Why don't *HIC* you made love *HIC* with me pretty colt." Twilight hazily spoke it was clear that the alcohol truly have a hold on her

Spike felt his body tense, a familiar glow surrounded him, halting any movement he can make. Slowly the dragon's body levitated in the air facing his unicorn friend looking at him, her eyes filled with desire, filled with lust.

"TWILIGHT PLEASE STOP THIS YOUR NOT YOURSELF!" He screamed but those words only hit deaf ears as Twilight only resumed her doing.

Soon Spike is placed just an inch close to Twilight side bringing an uncomfortable feeling to the dragon.

"Now how do I BUCK you Lover boy?"

I would love it if it continued like this.

Spike then started yelling out "I NEED AN ADULT!" Fearing that his virginity will be taken by his mo~I mean Sis~I mean family member that is no way related to him.

Upon saying this, Twilight whispered in his ear. "I am a adult sexy...." and then comes the rape....The end.

If you have Google Drive, I would happily edit this.