Rarity asks her lover to fulfill her greatest fantasy. Twilight is sceptical.
Rated Teen for talking about adult thingies.
I don't know, I rather like it, myself. Rarity would have a naughty side to her, wouldn't you think?
As for feeling silly - Twilight, dear, if she laughs that just means you need to get even more into character.
I'll give you a thumbs-up for doing a good job on writing this, but I'm not sure if I like the idea of Rarity & Twilight getting kinky...
But, that's just my opinion. Good job, kiddo.
Love it. Short and sweet I suppose.
I felt horrible and dirty reading this.
But then, that final line...
I remember reading this awhile back on some other site. I don't think I left a comment on it there, though. I can't really imagine Twilight roleplaying as an angry librarian ready to dole out some sexy punishment, but that almost seems to make it even more awesome.
Are you aware of the penalty for an overdue library book?
This made me LOL. :D
AHahah this was awesome! XD
Cute story, but I noticed some editing and word choice problems that kind of threw me for a loop. If you'd like, I can offer my services as a proofreader to help fix them up.
Sure. English isn't my native language, after all.
Hahahahaha, that's epic. Here I thought, naughty teacher, and it's Librarian.
Why is everypony doing...
Bwuahaha, YES! This is well put together, has good length / pacing, and an absolutely knockout final line. Thank you.
sometimes bronies forget that this is MY LITTLE PONY. still love it though. >u<
This reads much more like a great joke than a short story.
I love it.
It is, actually; it is based on a "script" for a comic strip that never materialized (cuz I cant draw ponies), just like A Thousand Year Urge. It would have been three panels had I been a better artist.
And thanks for the kind words.
This is great the perfect length for something so silly. Not a whole lot of explanation needed, just accept that the two are lovers and go with it. I like it, very humorous, doesn't overstay its welcome, and leaves just enough to the imagination to make it funny without being too... uncomfortable to read. Great job, and as for the grammar and such: for not being a native English speaker i have to say this is nothing less than impressive: I've seen stories with grammar that make this look like a new york times best seller straight from Native speakers. Keep it up!
The person who wrote Study Buddies likes something I wrote. yay!
Thanks for the compliments. I'm especially glad you were satisfied with the length; a lot of people who both liked and disliked this story (or, as I see it, anecdote or skit) wonders where the rest is, so to speak. I also like the part with not much explanation is needed - I feel I tend to over-exposit, which is bad writing IMHO.
The leaving things to the imagination is correct, and I'd like to note that while I have nothing against pure clopfic morally, I don't write it because A, I'm not terribly interested once ponies start "doing" things and B, because of A I couldn't write it in a way interesting for those who like that sort of thing.
loved this as much as "The thousand year urge"
It seems so... Obvious, now that I see it.
How come I haven't seen fetishized librarian Twilight before?
Haha, that was fun