Don't bother reading this if you don't want critisism.

The writing and everything is good but it seems to me as if the protagonist has a little too onesided view on humanity. I mean free healthcare exists in some countries so I don't really think that is something you would be that surprised by. Now I don't really know anything about the universe that this human comes from but I don't think humans are savages and there are a lot of good points that are missed. I feel like someone who is so well educated would have a little more objective view.

>>172628172628 I understand your points and I do reference this in a later chapter. Yes, he has a one sided view of humanity for a reason--a lot of psychological trauma.

Thank you for reading!

>>175793175793 Your comment. It confuses me.

>>175810175810

left eyeshit right eye shit left eye shift right eye shift and hold for 2seconds.....

Happens alot..

Seems like a story if you experiensing the dream of your life. It was well written and you go into detail alot. You have negative thoughts about religion aswell i see. I disagree a bit there. If you study history you can see that its power that drives us to do these horrible things, not really the religion. Religion is just used for an ekscuse in that case.

You write well so i gave you 4,5 stars.

Who knows maybe when life is over you end up in the place you wish the most for? Thats how i like to think about it atleast :)

Anyways good luck to you i really hope your dream comes true one day...

>>220206220206 I blame religion, but really it's the conflict of ideals that cause the hate. Thanks for the review, this helps me figure out what I need to make clearer in later chapters. In a later chapter I mention the power-struggle as well, if you decide to continue reading. And yes, I do get into detail a lot. I am a wordy motherf*cker. Thank you for reading and thanks for the review.

Well written. Still i feel like you look a little narrowminded at humanity though. Healthcare in my country are free, and if your life is treatened they will still help you, even in the US. The story is good, but im going to ask you something philosophical...

If everything is happyness what is happyness?

If everyone is caring what is caring?

And at last im going to ask you... Apples and plant aswell as vegestables are all living creatures. We dont know if they think or feel, but the cruel irony of life is that you cannot live without killing, wheter it be animals or plants.

I like that you put yourself into the world really good however, you bring yourself into this world, and i can fee lthe experiense. :)

>>220710220710 Just keep reading. There's more to it than what's in the first couple chapters. When you undergo horrible trauma like Shade has, everything is one-sided. I don't know what else to say without giving away future chapters, so I'm just gonna say "keep reading".

That one was really good, and it gave me the answers ive been waiting for. If im correct this is some time in the future, since you have the tecknology to do this.

Anyways its really exiting, ecspesially the ending.

The only part i did not like was the fighting scene. Killing 4 armed guys with a knife after they wake you up, seems a little far fetched.

Anyways good going, il leave enother review next chapter.

>>223635223635 If I remember correctly, only one of them was armed with a firearm. Not to mention (I guess I could give this info away) he has military training and police experience, so it's not as far-fetched as you imagine. Sure it seems unlikely in words, but that whole even took place in a very short amount of time, a few seconds. His intent and experience + their shock = easy win.

Oh god...

This is EPIIICCCC

I got shivers while reading the chapter... And I only get shivers when something really EPIC happens (Example: Sonic Rainboom in the young fliers competition)

MMOOOAAAARRR

>>302171302171 Thanks for the review and for reading. You have no idea how awesome that made me feel

And with your "MOAR" I am on Spring Break starting Friday, so I will hopefully have 2-3 chapters done by next Sunday.

Wow...you're really good at this, y'know. :]

>>333399333399 Thank you very much!

Wow man I was a little bit uneasy at the start of this story what with shade hating on humanity and all the same sex couples but now that I've read the entire thing I see that I was worried for nothing and now see it for the master piece it is. awesome job I hope to read many more storys from you in the future.

>>854530854530 And you had the reaction I was hoping from my audience. "Man, why is he bashing humanity so much? How can this world not have flaws?" The same-sex couples portion I tried to even out with straight couples, but... Eh, it's not so bad in my publishable version of this story. Thank you for reading and for your review, it means a lot

>>861083861083 no worries mate and now that I've had time to think about it I think the biggest reason I loved this fic and hated others with these themes i.e. same-sex,post apokalipic earth and death is that it never felt like you were  rubbing my nose in it like"This mother die FEEL SAD!" you weave it into the emotional rollercoaster and move on with the main plot line. Hopefully I can take what I've learned from you an make my stories awesome too. Once again epic work mate

>>861490861490 This review made my day Thanks again, man.