A botched spell brings a human into the land of ponies. Could this possibly lead to offbeat hijinks? Read on to find out.
Note that this story and all subsequent parts takes place between the first and second seasons of the show.
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Shadowmane
Just a normal guy who got hooked on the new My Little Pony show.
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♫♥I look forward to reading what happens next in your story♥♪
Not bad. I'm looking foward to the next chapter.
After reading the description, I really wasn't expecting much out of this story. With all the amazing (seemingly) self-insertion stories out there though, it really shouldn't surprise me that something like this could be so well written! Though the whole Twilight messes up a spell route is a little bit overdone, it's a heck of a lot better then the getting sucked into your computer or TV screen idea. It hasn't gotten too far in yet, but I really can't wait to see where this goes!
So basically... I guess I'm in agreement with Meta Knight. I look forward to reading what happens next in your story.
On a completely unrelated note...
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... Hanzo? Is that you?
WAAHAHA!!! Another good story to keep track of!
Not bad. Certainly better than most "Human in Equestria" stories.
I say 3.5 out of 5.
Oh my gosh, how awesome is this? I didn't even know you updated this quickly, and yet you just happened to update with another chapter after I got a feeling to check up on this story. I mean, seriously what are the odds of that, especially since you only posted the first (part of the) chapter yesterday!
The meeting of Pinkie PIe was really an awesome surprise, although I guess I shouldn't be too surprised seeing as she'd be bound to hear about him arriving in town considering he's not really a species native to Equestria, and that would obviously (and did) attract a few stares/gossip.
I'd have to say my favorite parts of this issue were the parts where Rainbow Dash tried to break dance and the part with Luna. Hopefully things don't get awkward between the two,.. and, if Jesse's not imagining things, let's hope Celestia doesn't find out cause I'm sure she could use that to play one hell of a prank on the two of them!
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Glad to see that you're enjoying this. I actually have most of the chapters typed out and nearly completed already, so I'll just be adding the final bits and changing a few things before uploading them. The updates will probably be more spread out from now on, though, so there won't be a new section every day.
♫♥I look forward to reading what happens next in your story♥♪
Stranded in a zoo....ADVENTURE!
♫♥I look forward to reading what happens next in your story♥♪
4958yes yes it is
this is awesome!!!!
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Was there ever any doubt?
This story is quite incredible, I must say. In concurrence with some of the other comments, I was a bit sketchy at first, thinking "ugh, this is just going to be another one of THOSE stories...."
I'm glad I took the time to read it. VERY well written, I take quite fondly to your sense of humor, and overall I LOVE your writing style. You describe things in a way that's detailed, but it doesn't feel forced. Also, very clean, I don't think I came across a single spelling or grammatical error in any of the three chapters so far. I look forward to seeing where this goes, so I am definitely going to follow this one, which is something I don't say often.
A solid five stars from me. Bravo, my good man
i love human in equestria stories idk about you guys but they just fascinate me to no end
Ok, that's slightly creepy. My name is Jesse, I'm 19, I can be a douchebag, the only flaw is the cali part.
Time to actually read it*
I'm really liking this so far. Keep up the good work.
Sweet!! Awesome job!
Also, so I sense a bit of Rarity relationshipping in the near future...........? A bit outlandish for a pony to be with a human, but somehow at the same time, me gusta (assuming Spike doesn't murder you first).
Haha anyway, good job on this, keep it up! I really look forward to reading the next part! (I'm going to assume that when you said "Happy ending", you didn't actually mean the end of the story).
cute
MOAR!
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Thanks, glad to see that you're liking the story. And no, I just meant a happy ending to that particular part. I thought that I needed to make a blatantly cute, feel-good conclusion at least once.
Hah, that was awesome!
It was a great story, but the best part about the whole thing was the fact you seemed to be drawing inspiration from the flash cartoon The Greatest Present Ever! I mean, it's really the only thing I've seen that involves Happy End written in big rainbow colored letters with a red and green pepper (that were dancing in the cartoon, mind you).
Glad you didn't include the sinister device to blow up the moon though... Luna wouldn't be too happy about that!
... Dang it, now I wanna watch the Demented Cartoon Movie again!
Yaaaaay~
This is one of the best H.I.E stories I've read in awhile, and it's definitely a good time! Keep this up man!
For the love of the god I do not believe in, moaaare!
Finally! A human in equestria story done right!!! I say good sir! Well done, and while I didn't enjoy RD cussing, I enjoyed the slice of life style this story is taking. It seems whenever there's a human in equestria story, we get either death,clopping,superpowers,or a political scandal! Thank you so much for writing this. I hope you have a long way to go before you finish this story. Also I would be willing to offer myself up as a pre reader should you be interested...(gose off to crate an account)
Awesome! I'm really enjoying this! Keep up the good work!
just plain brilliant! PLEASE continue to write stories like this. I was getting sick of that humans are bad guys stuff. so this is extremely refreshing! javascript:smilie('
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oh and btw, it would be awesome if twilight and friends accidentally find themselves in our world. (and they actually like it. )6197
did he just threaten celestia?
"They needed a guardian. They needed a champion. They needed a savior.
Unfortunately, all the help that they got was some random douchebag from California."
Best part was the line with Gummy. I was laughing so hard I couldn't read.
You are the most hilarious writer I've encountered so far.
Especially the bit with the moustache!
God, this story is amazing.
Did I spot a Red vs. Blue reference?
♫♥I look forward to reading what happens next in your story♥♪
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Nope.
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I've put in two so far, so you very well may have spotted one.
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You say that a lot.
omg meta knight i love you, you always take the words from me before i even read the story
THE BEGGINING IS FUCKING LOLTASTIC!!! Shoulda said this:
Jesse: Hi! I'm Jesse!
RD: And I'm Rainbow Dash!
RD & Jesses: AND THIS IS JACKASS!
*Take off on the wakeboard*
This is amazing. My favourite bit was the "; Black cloak + bitchin' goatee = awesome. It's science.)"
and the dream at the end. Best story I've read so far, and I'm an avid reader.
Im afraid to inform you that I am suing you for attempted murder...
...Because I nearly died from laughing so damn hard and falling backwards in my chair!
Loved the random joke you put in the middle of the classroom.
Priceless. Just priceless.
ALL MY FIVE R BELONG TO U.
For the love of god moare!
You, my good man, are a genius of sorts. I greatly look forward to reading more of this.
yes yes yes yes yes
i had a dream like that once. except the students were all german shepards and my pants were made of bacon...
I said it before and I'll say it again, THIS IS HOW HUMANS IN EQUESTRIA STORIES ARE DONE!
THIS IS AWESOME PLEASE DON'T EVER STOP WRITING THESE!
I want all human stories to be like this form now on
This is glorious, and must continue, it must not falter!
Great idea with the 'radio'. For a brief moment I thought that the ad at the end was him thinking out loud...