Never seen the anime past don't know much past what i have had told of me about it by people from time to time so a lil bit flew right over my head was like "ooooh i seen what you did there" but very nicely written enjoyed the read :3

OMG YES!!! lol I almost started to feel like I was the only one who remembers Ranma 1/2! Lol tracked!

okay, i liked that.

I liked that alot.

EDIT: I just read the other chapters at fanfiction.net and have to say it is just awesome

>>172176172176 there are more chapters on fanfiction! i'm going there!

I think i love this story.

-WW

A lot to process...its a good premise really. It has a lot of fun moments (Pinkie is definitely taking the cake)

I don't quite know where to begin with it...its...very...hashed together, hard to follow...and confusing on many levels. Rushed through to introduce all the characters who don't need to be there at the moment either. A lot organization and restructure is what I suggest to you.

Ha ha oh my god I'm reading this immediately.

>>185438185438

It may look hashed, but hey, I've seen worse set-ups. Besides, lots of characters had to be introduced. Both FiM and Ranma have lots of characters, so plot(and I don't mean the innuendo kind) has to be explained.  This is normal for Ranma crossovers. If you've seen that series,  it'll make more sense. Also, the Mane Six have changed a few things in the Ranma timeline(namely, Ryoga is a Gilda-level jerk without Fluttershy there, and Shampoo would not have shown up as early as she did; and she'd be wanting to kill Ranma-chan  among other things.)

Been a while since I've read any of your fics Emma, so far I'm impressed.

Let's see... good work on doing the crossovers and mellowing out Akane and Ranma.

Looking forward to this! Tracked.

Hey there, Emma. This is nightef37 from FanFiction.Net, one of your "beta readers". I am now a user in FiMFiction.Net. I'd like to say that I still prefer to receive what I need to edit via email. Also, as for the third chapter, you forgot to italicize some of the thoughts. Anyway, nice work so far. Better than the one on FF.Net. Thanks to Dr. Tempo and me, of course.

>>nightelf37

I have to manually add the italics every time I update so it makes sense I'd miss a few.

>>209245209245

I see what you mean. Well, you CAN correct them, right?

>> nightelf37

I can, but I need a full list what I missed, since copy and pasting also gets rid of italics on the master copy as well. I'll ask Dr. Tempo.

Ah, the madness that is Kuno. I wonder if the mane 6 will catch on when Nabiki starts selling photos.

And here I thought Ranma hadn't been crossed with ponies quite yet. Prove me wrong.

Kuno v. Fluttershy... my money is on Fluttershy. Great chapter Emma, good work on reworking canon and even giving canon a swift kick in the... *cough* I guess while things may have calmed down since the Amazons and Rogya aren't chasing Ranma, and Akane isn't mallet happy, so what chaos will be brought forth to fill the gap? Can't wait to see.

Celestia's Paladin

Enjoying this story immensely, great crossover, love seeing how the girls presence has changed the storyline I remember, and yet how some things stay the same.

Looking forward to more!

Hmm,The ponies work really well in the Ranma verse.

>>220057220057

Perhaps you can check back on the messages I sent. Orr do I have to send them again? I still have all of them.

>>nightelf37

Oh no, Dr. Tempo memorizes them. Does chapter 4 need fixing?

great fanfic, I look forward to the next chapter

My review:

Hmm…so instead of dumb, you decided to call Derpy a feather brain? I don't know if that's supposed to be an insulting on her intelligence or not.

My message:

I hope you at least even consider reading this through and through. You seriously need help and must read it. This review is from a FF.Net author named Lousy Poet Automaton. This review was written sometime after you had posted Chapter 20 and before 21.

"The My Little Pony redo makes me think the world is on LSD, but hey.

This fic is fairly amusing, and has moments where it rises to interesting. It's not great and it's not horrible, so normally, I wouldn't bother writing a review. I'm writing this because I'm hoping that eventually, you'll run into enough reviews like mine that will push you to get over the hump.

You're still kind of raw. And that is just plain odd because you've written over a hundred fics.

A little more detail would be good, and, yeah, do one or two copy edit passes through each chapter before posting (so you can catch those errors that make it through spellcheck, like missing words or correctly spelled but incorrect words like using 'slat' in place of 'salt').

Yes, fanfics are just for fun, and you're not getting paid... but since you're putting so much effort into writing these already, and you've been doing this for more than 5 years now, you really ought to be further along with your writing skills. I haven't read any of your other fics, but I've checked your profile and: 1) English appears to be your first language and 2) the writing quality of your profile is higher than the writing quality in your fic.

This suggests a couple of things to me. You probably rush through posting each chapter. And you may not be trying to stretch yourself when you write.

Look, it's not a race. You don't lose anything by taking the time to do a couple of passes through each chapter to check for errors and think about word choice. Don't tell people to shut up about grammar in your profile. They're trying to help you get better. If you don't care about that, then don't even read your reviews, because what's the point?

You're putting a lot of yourself into your writing already, so it makes no sense to blame your writing flaws on muscular dystrophy and emotional stuff or whatever. That was more than 10 years ago! You're not defined by all those things so far in the past but by what you're doing and how you're living in the present.

You can improve on your own, you can read The Elements of Style by Strunk and White on your own, and voice recognition on computers has gotten quite good, so any physical issues shouldn't be an issue. I'm not a grammar fanatic, but it just makes no sense to *ignore* your writing weaknesses when you obviously like writing so much. The fastest way to get better is not to work on what you're already good at, but to work on what you are BAD at.

This is about more than grammar and spelling. If you don't like writing fight scenes or you don't like writing horror or you don't like writing mysteries, those are the things you ought to try. You might surprise yourself and discover that you like writing stories you thought you'd hate, and at the very least, you'll grow as a writer.

Anyway, good luck."

>>nightelf37

Okay about the feather brain comment: I actually got that from Winter Wrap-Up, it something Rainbow Dash called "Ditzy Doo" when she went to get the southern birds.

Also you're being vague... is this about this version or the ff.net version. Because if it's the ff.net version, that needs to be discussed on ff.net, not here...

>>353178353178

Well, the drafts you send me are fairly bad quality, and perhaps comparable to my first fanfic in FF.Net. And I've improved since. You've written LOADS of stories, but here you are still as (sorry if it's offensive) crappy as ever with the drafts you send me. Don't ignore our advice to you. Implement it in your future stories no matter what site you write them to.

>>nightelf37

Can we not have this discussing in public? Because this more of an e-mail/PM discussion.

Wow. I remember that scene.

Ouch...Ranma has weird luck, doesn't he?

>>407484407484

Apologies. Still, don't ignore it. By the way, excellent pic!

>> nightelf37

I know... but I still think you need to see the raw version. Which is why I'm going to send you it next time I work on Ponies One Half.

Nice to see you decided to make a battle scene (compared to the FF.Net version). Or was that your other beta Dr. Tempo? Oh wait. I'm not supposed to talk about that here in the comments, aren't I?

>> nightelf37

You can talk abotu the diffrence, and yes that was Dr. Tempo since he is in charge of making fight scenes longer and more detailed.

Yep, this story is good alright but with some grammar mistakes and spellings scattered about. Not too bad since its easy to get what you're saying

(well the did, Twilight owned one but it wasn’t the type of computers humans had)

She aid pointing to the otaku boy,

1. Its they not the in this case.

2. Its said.

Minor mistakes but it's my job (not really) to notice them. Still love reading it

>>refferee

I fixed it, neither of my betas saw those two additions I made so thank you.

And I hoped you'd put like the Carmen Sandiego/Waldo gag. Oh wait. I'm not supposed to talk about that here, am I?

>>nightelf37

It's okay to talk about things that you added that didn't make it in. I decided not to add it because it felt forced sure even those two want a picture with Ryoga it just didn't feel right...

>>463984463984

Then wny not at least just Carmen Sandiego? I just thought of putting in both for "rule of funny". Also, you can reply to my messages with the reply button on the right of my comment. Otherwise, I can't tell if you responded, okay?

>>490518490518

Also it would have created a weird plot hole with the joke that Dr. Tempo added.

And I do hit the reply button... it's just that something is weird with my reply... it never ends up right...

Well, what about just somebody who dresses as her, then? Although it's too late for that.>>491048491048

>>492845492845

Sorry, but I made my decision... and besides I heard Disney Parks don't allow adult guests to dress up because it would confuse children...

>>492857492857

Oh, sorry. I didn't realize that. My bad.

>>492869492869

That's okay, it's not a commonly known fact, I only heard about because of a news story of a woman who wanted to dress up like a Princess for her birthday but one of the parks wouldn't let her in.

Now I got the Carmen Sandiego theme song going off in my head, Ryoga as a internet celebrity... that is perfect.

Pinkie Pie is now and Otaku, oh Epona and Gaea I fear for Equestria when they get home. What is next then, Celestia becoming one?

>>492884492884

Oh, really? I didn't know that.

>>502463502463

Yeah... it was a while ago thoguh...

MEANWHILE IN PONYVILLE

Spike: "Twilight, Rarity... Rainbow dash... pinkie pie... anypony... its scary in the tree house all alone. Oh well time for parties."

Three hours later:

Make that plot roll, roll, roll!

Spike: Thats what im talking about!

Sorry but i had to.

Well... I guess it is a standard thing in Ranma fanfiction, there has to be at least one chapter centered around Akane's attempt at cooking. At least this time she acknowledged that she is a bad cook.

Can't stop laghting. to epic. LOLOLOLOLOL

Yes the Akane's bad cooking is a comedy good. I can not imagination any liquifying toast.

Sweatie Bell wins  

That was when music started playing form nowhere.

If looks wrong then don’t add it! Always check the labels!♪

Akane though she was used to Pinkie, but apparently she was wrong…

1. From.

2. Dunno if its supposed to be like that but the actual sentence should be; If it looks.

3. Thought.

Still looking good

>>522152522152

Fixed...

I can't only my blame myself this time... both me and both of my betas missed those...

Now to follow the story both here and on FF.net! It will be interesting to compare this version to the un-beta'ed one.

On the homepage of Where in the World is Ryouga Hibiki:

"Ryouga Hibiki, the young man that has confirmed sightings in Cairo Egypt and Sapporo Japan within an hour and a half of each other. Border patrols of a dozen countries are offering a $50,000 US dollar reward for anyone who can actually see him crossing state lines. Current location: Disney Tokyo again, see pictures below."

Guess what guys! Someone put up a TV Tropes Page for Ponies One Half: Here

So please add any tropes that are missing (or scenes that you consider to be funny/awesome/heartwarming/tearjerking).

FIRST

"She still kept the pendant though."

- But you removed the sentence that presumably mentions the necklace. Now this doesn't make sense. Please add it back.

“No… I don’t think for a date with Ranma.”

Umm... I don't understand that one line?

>>574759574759

Shoot I have to fix that, I had to get rid of the necklace since it made no sense (with the store being a stoe that only sells things from Shonen Jump), I'll fix it...

>>574836574836

I'll fix that one too.

intreresting turn on event. All this skreems: made in Japan

>>353178353178

Well, while this version has had some polish added it isn't quite shiny yet to overextend a metaphor.

I'm not spotting much in the way of spelling errors anymore, but there are several places where you switch from past tense to present in your verbs. In the first chapter at least, I haven't gotten any further.

I hope the rest of the story gets edited, fixed and posted. I eventually stopped reading the fanfiction.net story just because the grammar was such a headache, which was a shame given my love for Ranma and ponies.

>>625104625104

Damn it! It might have to do with my betas...

I'll go ask help from them help me find all present tense verbs as well stop them from using present tense verbs.

EDIT: Confirmation, that was only one scene in the first chapter from a mistake by the beta in charge of fight scenes. I have since fixed that mistake.

So far so go-

One Piece reference

tracked

All caught up

Pinkie is best otaku

Also, I look forward to whenever Haposai shows up. Oh the chaos shall be fun (wish there was a Discrod smily)

Who wants to bet that the only girl that Haposai is not going to grope (Other than Kasumi) is Fluttershy?

And I can't wait till the principal shows up. Twilight's gonna FREAK! (Wish there was a RapidashTwi)

OH YEAH!!! I can't what till Emma get to those parts.  

But, it well be a shame that it going to be sometime before any of them show up.  

FIRST

Ummmmmm.... The battle wasn't that great (no injuries or complications on either side to make you anxious at all) but then again, it was Kuno. The fight was one-sided to begin with. How that guy even survives his practically daily bouts with Ranma is a freaking mystery. Though the bit with the shirts was a little funny.

Anyway, I am looking forward to the next....episode of chapters? (Please be focused on AJ, please be focused on AJ.)

Great chapter, love the changes

At the two exchanged blows, Kuno’s sword broke.

Ryoga grabbed one of his belts and began to weld it like a sword.

Expect for anything that cut wood!

Rarity sighed as well. I really wanted to give her a full makeover.

Then again, Akane's just as tomboyish as Rainbow Dash and Applejack, so I probably shouldn’t be surprised.

1. As.

2. Wield.

3. Cuts.

4. She.

5. She.

I agree with >>683638683638, the changes are quite pleasant. Or maybe that's just my inner grammar nazi smiling... I don't know...

>>683917683917

Fixed the grammar and and added the italics to the thought I missed (the ones that you told me to put "she" was a I thoguht I missed).

Japan vs America: who will win the aniamation battle?

Let me start out by saying that I was [and still am] a big fan of Ranma 1/2, as well as My Little Pony: Friendship is magic. As such, during my off-time in between writing the chapters in my own work, I tossed about the idea of just such a crossover. You can imagine my elation when I finally decided to search FiMFiction and I came across your fic.

Reading the synopsis, however, I began to have misgivings about the story. Right off the bat the 'botched teleportation spell' has become somewhat of a frowned upon cliche in the fandom. Then they all conveniently land in Nyannīchuan? You could have done so much more with the Cursed Springs of Jusenkyo, but it seemed like you were dead-set on them all going to Furinkan High School as girls.

I honestly tried my best to give this a fair chance, but so much of the first chapter came off incredibly forced, both in jokes and character introduction. I understand it is your own fic, and each is permitted to write in their own fashion, but character introduction could certainly have been spread out a bit better. I know you have to account for altered events, and this in itself is something I'll be talking about later, but it just felt rushed.

Then there were the jokes. Again, this is your fic, and you're allowed to write it in any way you see fit, but referencing Kung Fu Panda and the Matrix: Reloaded in such a blatant manner I found detracted horribly from the story. There was no subtlety to it at all. Sometimes the best jokes are the ones you let a reader draw from what is written. Given that Ranma Nibun no Ichi began serialization in 1987, referencing anything later than 1996 - the end point of the manga - just doesn't feel right.

Finally, we come to your decision to begin at the starting point of the manga/anime. I don't deny that if done right it is certainly the best place to start. The way you started, however, feels less like a planned out story and more like something done out of convenience. This feeling worsened as soon as you began to use the altered circumstances that I hadn't even read to introduce characters who otherwise would have yet to be introduced in the series. It just did nothing to help the flow. Waling over Takahsi's footsteps felt like a lack of effort, if anything. As a fan, it became too painful to read.

I know you were simply doing what you thought was best as a fan-fic writer, but as a fan of both series I'm saddened by this fic. In my opinion it could have been so much more if you'd given a serious effort to make it something fun and unique. Don't let this one user's displeasure discourage you from writing, however. Each writer has their own niche.

>>723044723044

Yeah, yeah, I know, I know the whole Twilight Botches the spell is old stuff... which is why EQD rejected off the bat.

Next up: the Matrix joke was from one of my betas (the King Fu Panda joke is all me, but I mean come on... in this day in age how, I could I NOT call Genma "Kung Fu Panda"). But you should know I do the "Key to a Successful Interview" (a rather popular Ranma AU) and it's spinoffs approach to the universe, instead of having it take place in the early 90's having it take place now, later on it's revealed that Ryoga is an internet celebrity due to the fact he gets lost and Pinkie becomes an Otaku of modern anime (One Piece for example).

And lastly: you're judging it on chapter 1... Chapter 1 is not the best chapter, it's all set up. Not only that but you didn't even read chapter 2, one of your complaints is about how I ignored how the character was introduced... if you HAD read chapter 2, you would have read why Ryoga, Shampoo and Cologne are there...

You only read chapter 1 out of 10 that is on THIS site, (on ff.net there's the uncut version which has grammar and spelling mistakes but enough to not enjoy the story... it's also has 6 times as many chapter), the thing is you claim you gave it a chance, but you didn't... a chance would have reading at least chapter 2... AKA: The explanation of how everyone met chapter but no... you decided to bail on chapter 1...

Oh and don't EVER use the line "Don't let this one user's displeasure discourage you from writing," without checking to see if they have an ff.net page... let alone one who had been on the site for over 6 years, has over 100 stories: one of which is over 200 chapters long. You come out as incredible jerk.

>>723462723462

You are right of course in that it is hardly fair of me to bail on Chapter 1. Here is the problem however. A prologue or first chapter is supposed to act as a hook; just enough to wet the lips of a reader, but not enough to choke them. When you throw no less than eleven characters at the reader all at once it just comes out jumbled in a way that makes taking interest in ANY of the characters. Personally, I feel the 'how they all got there' probably would have functioned better, for all intents and purposes, as the hook. Granted it would not be 'true to the flow of the manga', but it's a fan-fiction; you're supposed to take your own spin on it, even if it means altering the flow or mood of the original source material.

I worded my message it like that because the shaky start to your fic gave the impression of somebody uncomfortable with what they were writing [I know what you're thinking, so stop right there. 'assumptions are bad, mmmkay?' ]. I'm not one to discourage folks from writing, and most of the times when I've provided reviews, they have been received as genuinely helpful. Writing is a fun activity and everybody should have a chance at it. I could have been one of the ones to look at fan-fics and just point out an author's terrible grammar and spelling, citing that they should quit writing, but I'm not. I am sorry I came off as a jerk to you, but that was certainly not my intent.

The reason I don't e-stalk a person, know their life history just so I can give a review on a fic is so I don't go into situations where I see a person who has been writing for a number of years, and go in expecting the world of them. Could you imagine how it would feel for someone to just flat out say "I see you've been writing for six years. It's a shame that in that time, you've failed to grasp how to start a piece of fiction in an interesting and engaging fashion." It wouldn't feel good, and you would think that person is an incredible jerk.

Speaking of things to never do, throwing around how long one has been writing or how much one has written is another such thing that makes you look like an 'incredible jerk', or an arrogant one at the very least. Smug might be a better word, but that is dancing around the point. If you want coming off as a jerk, try "I'm published on Equestria Daily, so you should listen to me!" on for size. Touting ones accomplishments or benchmarks is simply unbecoming and accomplishes simply nothing.

Alas, I was unfair and for that I apologize. I shall give the story a true chance before passing judgement, if that would please you.

>>724054724054

I know that the first chapter is shaky, but I like said, it's more set than anything and being forced to introduce so many characters at once it takes a toll. In this story's case, Chapter 1 is just the set up, chapter 2 is where the story really shines, after all not all stories start off with gold I mean there is the trope "It Gets better" for a reason.

Oh and I wasn't touting my accomplishments, I just pointing out that you I'm just the person you don't assume is a begging writer... the stuff I said was just a small fraction of what I am on ff.net, besides on this site I'm next to nothing. Sure I'm doing okay... but it's nothing to compared to what the ff.net cut of Ponies One Half is.

And I do accept your apology, don't worry... just give it one more chance...

>>724219724219

I admit. I was being a horribly biased jerk. I let the shaky start to the chapter [and a few too many bad puns] completely turn me off and skew my perspective of the chapter. It may also have been the all-at-once descriptions of appearances that threw me for a loop.

Usually I conduct myself better than this.

Thoroughly amusing, though possibly for the wrong reasons. There's a few moments where "you don't say" came to mind.

>>724287724287

Like I said no problem... I'll just be happy if you read chapter 2, and yeah I understand why reading so many descriptions in one chapter can be grating... but I'll just be happy if you give it another chance...

>>724322724322 Oh I did. Onto 3 now that I've gotten used to your particular writing quirks.

>>724332724332

I'm so happy! Thanks!

Funny story, and nice weaving together of two stories.

One funny typo I saw:

marital artist

I don't think Akane is that good at marriage...

>>746139746139

I'll go fix it.

this reminds me of a show that these girls found a spring thing in a volcano or sumtin and then they are mermaids and when they get splashed with water the turn into mermaids and hot water turns them back but they can also turn back naturally but its longer the show was called O2 or sumtin

OH MAI GAWD, YEEESSSS!!!!!

If you somehow can find it within you to go all the way through to freaking Sailor Ranko, then I will love you forever, and I haven't even read this chapter yet~! The Sailor Ranko stories go a lot further than the accompanying comic, and makes a lot more sense. If you're an avid reader, then you'll enjoy those stories. I just wish BurgerBecky'd update! TT~TT It's been quite a few long years... I hope she hasn't died, or something!

PRE READ: OH. MY. GODDESS!

I KNEW IT! BUCKING CALLED IT THAT SOMEONE WOULD DO A RANMA 1/2 CROSSOVER! Because -everyone- knows that Ranma 1/2 goes with EVERYTHING.

I NEED TO READ THIS. RIGHT. FUCKING. NOW!

So, You've finally posted this on FIMFiction, uh?, I suppose that Fanfiction will still get the the main updates and you will eventually post your other pony stories here, Congratulations for geting Feature box on the first day

>>841866841866

I posted this months ago... the feature box thing was in the section for new updates...

I like this.

I'm pretty sure the handkerchief is actually a furoshiki.

>>841896841896 well, it is good to have you here as well, I'll be looking forward for any updates(On Fanfiction)

“Don’’ ask.

1. Don't.

Now I just wonder how long it will take for your entire story to transfer here I don't mind re-reading it again cause it's good.

>>237161237161 I can't wait for Sailor Moon to enter this, and make it Sailor Ranko... with ponies.

If that ever comes to pass, I will freaking dance on the roof of the Empire State building, in a Pinkie Pie costume. To the first song in a response to this comment.

Later that afternoon, Ran had decided to join the track team for one practice to try it out, while Rarity and Shampoo had work. So it was Akane, Hikaru, Momo, Chiyo, and Alex who took Ranma to Dr. Tofu’s. When they got there however, they had a surprise; there was a panda sweeping the walkway. But it wasn't just any panda.

Note that Ran is with the Track and Field team.

Ran smirked. "Pay up, Twilight. I knew he'd be here."

Hikaru handed Ran a 500 yen coin, grumbling.

Suddenly, Ran is at Doctor Tofu's.

Not even Momo coulda seen that one coming!!!

And I'll finish it off with Detective Conan,

I will not lie, this one made me squeal like a little girl. I frikkin love DetCon! Conan is Best pony.

Image: http://www.failking.com/img4/19295-oh-deer-god_w.jpg

Things 'bout ta get caaarazayer!!!

Something I've noticed about the way Pinkie skirts all of the things that deal with Ranma's story, is that she has a little thing that looks like this:

Image: http://i2.kym-cdn.com/photos/images/newsfeed/000/167/116/tumblr_lahlyxjUPa1qa13ow.gif

>>843312843312

Fixed

>>843423843423

Also fixed, I switched two of the "ran" with Ranma and one (that wasn't talking to her) with Hikaru...

>>841751841751

H2O: Just add Water. Also, this water TF series has been around for longer than that. The Ranma 1/2 animé, that is.

May I just add the input that there are a few too many "sweat drops" It's ok occasionally but it seems to be getting overdone atm.

I have an announcement, one of my betas nightelf37 is going to start up a special comment guessing game. He originally wanted to have it as part of the fic, but I said no. So as a compromise, it's going to be a comment only game, I do approve of it... but beyond that, I have no part of it...

Quick question. Are all the fights going to be with people from the Ranma universe? Because I'd really like to see some FIM villains as well.