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CoAlFire


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Ladies and Gentlemen, Fillies and Gentlecolts, I bring you the sequel to Adaptation. I don't know how well it'll go over, but you all seemed to want it, so I figured I'd give it a try.

In this volume, Echo has settled in to her life in Ponyville and has just begun to become accustomed to the strange ways in which ponies behave. While their social norms may be confounding to her, she is satisfied with her life. That is, until Scootaloo comes home from school one day shaken, and Echo finds that not everypony in Ponyville is as understanding and accepting of who she is as she thought they were. What has caused the normally kind ponies in this town to become so suddenly xenophobic?

Tagged gore for possible mild violence.

Chapters (13)
Comments ( 737 )

And Here We GO!

Poor Scootaloo... can't she and her mother just live in peace?:pinkiesad2:

I already like it.

And the awesomeness returns. :pinkiesad2: Keep up the amazing writing you Brilliant person, you :yay::yay::yay::yay::yay::yay::yay::yay:

My feels hurt :fluttercry:... MOAR! :flutterrage:

Dear Echo,

Tell Twilight she is mad. How can she think queen Chrysalis will be accepted when you, Scootaloo's savior, are barley accepted in Ponyville? I cannot stand by when the both of you are putting yourselves at risk. I will be able to assist you or queen Chrysalis once I return to the Everfree this afternoon.

Your Shadow,
Rebound
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Dear Twilight,

Are you mad? How could you possibly think having the changeling queen parade around Ponyville undisguised is a good idea? Unrelated to your insane antics, your hypothesis was partially correct and needs revision. We have a lot to to about once I return from the field. I expect to be in Ponyville at about noon. I'll be in the library's east wing organizing the notes about the experiment.

Your Assistant,
Puzzle Piece

Great start so far! The feels are starting to build.

Seems like Chrysalis was at the Nightmare Night spying Luna and Pinkie...:derpytongue2:

............................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................:unsuresweetie::rainbowhuh::rainbowkiss::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy:

Hm, I actually like this more than the previous one. It felt more fleshed out and less...contrived seems a bit strong and negative...so...contrived-lite? I don't want to come off as rude or that I didn't like the first story, because I did enjoy it. Regardless I like it, tracking to see where this goes.:twilightsmile:

*unread: like + fave* ^^

may I ask CoAlFire, do i have something to do with the fact that you decided to write... more ?:duck: :rainbowwild:
*caught*

P.S. don't worry, as i had said, your readers will help you, you just have to ask. ^^

You should make an update chapter to the first story linking to the new one, helps readers follow the story :pinkiesmile:

She REALLY hates twiligh in the comic, her changeling literally started replacing everyone in town and stole the cmc and held her captive in her castle (With her REALLY wantinng to hurt them.) and judging from what i seen It appear that the changeling have come to free her queen.

My life can go on knowing echo and scoots are still out there.

gahhh need more can't wait

Let the insta faves COME!!!

2214012 Hahaha, to be fair, I'm expanding on a story that I initially wrote without any concept of how popular it would become.

This one has had a bit more thought put into it before I began writing it.

When I started writing Adaptation, I actually had no idea what the story was going to be about. Hence the multitude of trailing plot lines. :unsuresweetie:

2215508
Well I saw the sequel up on the front page, so I went back to finish the first part where I'd left off. It improved enough each chapter, and then pulled Chrysalis in out of nowhere in a way I really enjoyed for reasons I'm not entirely sure about, that I wanted to see it continue...and I find this to be even better! So kudos.:twilightsmile:

2215580 Front page. :rainbowhuh:

I guess that explains the last 200 notifications. :rainbowderp:

I still don't understand how my work makes it to the front page.

Lol faved it before I read it and now I'm glad I did. Awesome read can't wait to see more of the series.

Comment posted by DaGoomba deleted Mar 5th, 2013

loved the Fluttershy vs disguises scene; keep up the good work

Saw the note in Adaptation.:pinkiegasp: Checked to make sure I wasn't being trolled.:trollestia: Saw the new story and nearly died of happiness.:pinkiehappy:

Excellente!

“...while the rest of the town gets used to me and Chrysalis being here.

I think that would be cute if Echo would use "granny", or "grandma" in here instead of 'Chrysalis'. It would ensure Scoots, that she have someone other than just her mother, and would familiarize both of them to the thought, that the queen is part of their family.

2215646
All new stories are posted to the front page under the "New stories" column, adjacent to the "latest updates" column. Everything everyone writes ends up on the front page for a while.

The 200+ notifications however are likely due to how many people like your work, which is rightly deserved.

If you were talking about the feature box...well no one actually understands that thing, for instance I don't actually think this story made it into the feature box...despite having a huge number of likes with 0 dislikes...outperforming a couple other fics that are in the box...It's weird, and you'll probably be on it later if not the first time you updated this story..:applejackunsure:

I LOVE IT!! and you're writing is far better than mine

Like many here, I laughed a bit during the whole Fluttershy and Chrysalis. But, unfortunately, it left on a sad note, poor Echo and Scootaloo. So far, so good...keep up the great job with this.

C&Cs:
“Pardon me,”
> Correction: “Pardon me?”
Everypony turned their heads to see queen Chrysalis.
> Capitalize ‘queen’ when it is used with a name.
Come on, then, queen Chrysalis.
> Same as above.

This seems pretty good. It will definitely have a different feel to it and if you write like its own story it should do fine. Don't feel forced to write up to a standard by comparing it to Adaptation. That is usually asking for trouble.

Keep up the good work sir.:moustache:

Damn!
Tiara is really slimy and despicable!
Deserves to be hung on a sturdy branch of a sturdy tree, however Scootalo was great as he defended his mother from false accusations grabbing a thrashing but at least they are still giving currioso to see what else will happen and how will the shifter to be accepted , largely because they are in two to have the same problem.
However, the family is complete and I am sure that they will win (grandmother the queen, mother and daughter Echo Scootalo).

This is a worthy successor to your previous story.

MOAR!!!

If you reach 200 likes without a single dislike you will be a LEGEND...

Ooh yay! more to read! who cares if i fall asleep in class tomorrow?

2213678 Imma go and agree with you.

2216567
I suppose this makes CoALFire a legend then, huh? :duck:

when I read the part with Fluttershy's intro I couldn't help but think "did Zack actually get to you?":rainbowderp:

"I sqee'ed the mere possibility:pinkiehappy:"

Good thing you left a link at the end of the last story. I wasn't following you at the time and probably would have missed it.

I really like this story's Chrysalis. She clearly cares about her family and has the potential to eventually be reformed in this story. Eventually being the key word here. Eventually being the key word. I love how she doesn't instantly submit. She is still about as prideful and short-tempered as when she first appeared, and integrating her into pony society seems like it will take a lot of work on both sides as it should I wouldn't expect them to accept her as readily as they did with Zecora or Luna, and with good reason.

I also noticed the gore tag put in place for possible mild violence in the future. The idea of mild gore just seems strange to me I don't understand how that would work but I will stick around and see. I'm also wondering if Chrysalis is exaggerating about the way she expects the town to react to her, or if this is one of those fics where the sight of a changeling puts the whole town into lynch mob mode.

yes a good start to part two cant wait to see what happen to Chrysalis hwen she was in town it should be pretty good.

FROM YOUR EYE IN THE SKY Star Shooter :rainbowdetermined2:

2216833 Wee, I'm a legend... apparently.

2217331 Chances are that there might be some violence. Impalement could happen, possible brief torture scenes, etc.

I wanted to err on the side of caution and tag it so that nobody's shocked too horribly when it crops up.

Excellent! It does well as a continuation and we get to see more of Chrysalis.

THIS IS A JOYOUS OCCASION! WE REQUIRE M. BISON'S HELP WITH EXPRESSING OUR FEELINGS FOR THIS!
(Not speaking like old Luna, talking for me and my OC's!)

An excellent start on a new chapter of the story, if you ask me.
I simply cant wait until the next chapter, just to see what happens next, and how the integration into Ponyville will be for Both Echo, and Chrysalis.

I already love it. :heart::heart::heart:
And fav.

Dear Echo,

You're going to need every last bit of help you can get if Scootaloo is going to be able to control her new powers. I'll need to drop the act and reveal myself to everypony just as you have done if I am going to be of any real help. I have been working with Twilight in secret since before you crashed in the Everfree Forest. Disguised, I found you at your welcome party. You may remember me as the "pervert" you nearly knocked unconscious. If you recall, he was a tan stallion with black hair with gray bands, had a cutie mark of a puzzle piece the same dark violet as his eyes. He is – that is to say, I am – Puzzle Piece. Write back to Twilight if you need to, or we can meet at the library. I will need your help in explaining myself to Chrysalis. I think I'm ready to face her now.

Your Shadow,
Rebound

So first, well, first
Second, I loved the chapter. Great twist going on.
Has some mustaches
:moustache::moustache::moustache:

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