It’s been a whirlwind romance, but the Doctor has worries. He’s going to try one last crazy scheme before he has to break an innocent mare’s heart.
Can YOU guess who she is before it’s revealed, dear reader?
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Aww.... I was hoping it might end differently!
Great story, Mr. Paleo!
I can't say I understand the proposal that well--let's hop randomly around all of creation until we end up back on Equestria? Wut?
Buah ha ha! Brilliant. You had me fooled every single time...
Well played.
Challenge accepted.
Yup, I guessed right. What I didn't expect was the ending. Since I have no idea how to conceal spoilers, I will just say this.
You ripped my heart right out of my ribcage, and then threw it on the floor, and then stomped on it until I died.
This was a wonderful story, and I cannot emphasis how much I liked how you wrote, well, you know. Spoilers.
Now, if you will excuse me, I have to go bawl in a corner like a small child whose pet cat died.[1]
[1] I am not even kidding.
Someone needs to write about that someday he speaks of. Love it!
This was a delightful piece! The misdirection used to keep the reader from knowing the Doctor's quarry was titillatingly whimsical and the conclusion, while evoking an emotive sigh, was very satisfying.
The fun part, dear readers, is to read it again knowing who she is and see what makes more sense.
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Believe me, halfway through I had the same hope. I had written the ending first, and wondered if there was anyway to get out of it. By the end, I had just made the Doctor sounds and act better than the first draft.
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I think "Take this ring with shining carbon and run away with me" is a traditional romance novel ending.
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Thank you! I was hoping I wasn't being TOO clever or too transparent.
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Yeah, its always bittersweet to get something right and have it be a proper ending but not the happy one.
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Maybe one day.
I'm so confused, but in a good way.
I had my suspicions, then I got misdirected by the misdirections, and then it turned out I was right to begin with!
It was never going to work, of course. She's (probably) old enough to be his mother!
Expert misdirection at every turn. I was close, but in the end I will admit I was fooled. I can honestly think of no pony better for the doctor, and hope he finds someday. In the mean time, Allons-y.
Yep, three ah-ha!s followed by three expertly delivered hooves to the face. Well done, sir.
Also, "“You’re hair was all pink back then.”" => should be "Your".
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Sure, but why do they need to be lost too?
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In my mind, he wanted to see if she would put down her responsibilities and go off with him. Ahoneymoon of indefinate duration. He wanted her to show that she was ready to let others do her job and live for herself for awhile.
2196801 "One More Minute" by Weird Al?
I'll admit, you threw me right at the end. After meeting the girls, the answer was either black or white. White was obvious, so I assumed it was black. Expecting a twist, I was blind-sided by the obvious.
Also, found a small grammatical misstep: "easily could easily she her".
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It summed up my feelings quite well.
Before reading I'm going to guess the TARDIS, it would fit with the TARDIS / Derpy relationship in your main storyline.
After reading, well I was wrong although it would have been funny to have a monologue to the TARDIS which was propped up in the resterant with a menu stuck in the door
I liked it and all the false hints, there were a few times I had to go back and figure out who had just been eliminated, I loved the romantic guard near the end. Unfortuantly, the only time the mare in question would be free would be after pony kind had come to an end and she might not be in the mood then, but anyway, timetravel.
2198534 What if, by chance, their very first jump immediately brought them back to Equestria?
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Most likely, they'd end up in the future or the past. Still, interesting honeymoon.
Beautiful story. Can we get an alternate ending plase?
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You may tempt me, good sir. I tried to leave it open so the reader can chose if "someday" ever comes, but if get enough motivation I just might...
First I thought it might be twilight, then Luna, and right before it actually said it I decided it was Celestia. Great story!
First I thought it was Twilight, then Rainbow Dash, then Fluttershy, then Twilight again, then I rested on Celestia. I got confused
i like how whenever we start to think that it was a particular pony you would show us that pony to prove us wrong! at first it thought it was rarity (or possibly twi) then i thought it was derpy then i thought it was celly and i was right!!!
at first, i was thinking
, but then i got caught into thinking it was 
. then i got the bit about 'yellow pegasus' and thought 
, but the 'multi coloured-mane' made me think 
but then i realised multi coloured just means 3 or more colours, so i got onto 
. yay! 
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Time Turner, Celestia...
Meet your descendants.
Holy buck
Very sneaky. Once Cadance was revealed, I went back to look for some random piece of dialogue and happened to land right where the Doctor said "sweet Celestia." I was amused.
Anyway, if you'll excuse me for a moment I need to reread most of the story.
Suddenly, I remember what he asked Rarity.
And then the discussion of the vacation . . . well worth dropping your cup over hearing.
A sad but very enjoyable story regarding the Doctor. Then again when is the Doctor not an ultimately sad character?
I came into this knowing that the mare was Celestia due to the link that I found it through. Still enjoyed it.
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Ooh, which link?
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*bites bottom lip*
I dont remember where it was
I had your story open on another tab a day or two before I read it
I think it was a link in an another fics discussion thread someone had for someone else. The comment had already gave away that it was Celestia.
The spies rather gave it away. ROMANCE
Hah, okay you got me. I thought it was Twilight up until you said they saw her elsewhere. After that I didn't know and was waiting for another clue. I had already ruled out all the other elements of harmony. It wasn't until he confronted the spies in the bush that I figured it out though.
Heh, and that ending. I'm half expecting him to just hop in the TARDIS. "Lets see if she changes her mind in...a hundred years?" Jump forward a hundred years, land in front of her and hop out with the ring. "How about now?"
Also, as a side note. I'm assuming this doesn't take place in the same universe as your usual one with Ditzy and the Doctor, Red Glare, Screwball, etc.?
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Yup, different universe one-off.
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You should make a sequel based off of this song!
Lovely, lovely song. You probably heard it before.
I thought it was
but then you said she spend time in the library so I thought it was 
then 
but in the end it was 