Oh and what could you possibly want to commission Celestia? Nothing inappropriate I'm sure

Commisions?

LOL!

instant 5-Starred!

This was pretty fun to read, I'll give you back. The jokes worked well and from what I've seen the writing is good as well. Great job!

lol. Commission. What could she possibly want to commission?

Looking forward to reading more.

Well that was interesting...and quite funny...

Take all my stars.

That was really entertaining. A good laugh here and there. Good story all around, and the Tirek reference was a good moment.

There are not enough stars on the internet for how much this rocks... I've checked.

That... that was awesome.  

Great short story, well written, and quite the interesting concept.

Great job all around, that was very entertaining  

In detail. LMAO.

Don't do it Luna, if you take Celestia's commission then she'll turn into Trollestia and troll us all!!

Well done sir/madam you have won all the star good going.

Ahh! This is quite a change for the different and although its well written and all, I don't really care for it.

Good job....

I don't usually read a lot of clopfiction, but are you planning on actually writing Element?

....I'm a filly, what's a commision?

>>171296171296

A commission is when you pay someone to make something for you, in this case, a fic.

It's basically a glorified form of prostitution

Cool story bro.

pfffffft funny as hell here take all my stars

That was very well done I loved it.

I wonder what Celestia wants to commission?

Thank you SO MUCH for the kind comments, everyone! You have no idea how proud I am that I managed to get featured. I honestly wasn't expecting this good a response.

THANK YOU!

My bad, I meant 5 stars and hit 4.5 by mistake

So, if the only things Celestia doesn't understand is the SEL and magnets, does that mean she understands pinkie pie?

Great story by the way, five stars.

The SEL was one of two things in the world she would never understand(the other being magnets).

I c what u did thar

This story had me amused every second I have gone through it. This honestly made my day.

Well done!

Oh my, this was amazing, you need to write more like this!

5 stars and I'd give you more if I could.

Congraduations on being featured! I'm sure that you'll giggle with excitement for quite a while!

Take my five stars, take them!

Wow. This was GREAT. First of all, the concept of Luna-the-fanfic-writer (sort of) is just flat out funny. I don't care who you are, that's just amusing.

On top of that- anyone else notice that "not all' of them contain the Elements? I wonder if the Mane Six realize Luna writes steamy and not-so-steamy novels about them? :P

Oh heavens... comissions.

Take all of my stars you magnificent gentlecolt. Also, commissions, eh?

AND THEN 'PRINCESS MOLESTIA' HAPPENED.

....Woah. (no pun intended)

Now I'm curious, and for all the wrong reasons.

and, to borrow a Cliche line, Cool Story, Bro.

Cute.  But now you'll have to write the book.  

Great picture choice too!

>Impossibly in love with Princess Luna / Nightmare Moon brony here... hhnnngggghhhh

ok that was funny... needs a sequl tho

SEQUEL! FOR THE LOVE OF , I DEMAND A SEQUEL!

You my dear writter have started a chain of events that will lead you to a 5 star rating, being tracked, watched and stalked. For you need to create the story 'Elements of Lust' by Moony Maiden.

it kinda makes sense that celestia doesn't  under stand magnets seeing as she violates the law of magnetic force more often than magneto. great story just just great.

Bring out a sequel it needs to be to be something that no one would expect good luck and I hope to read a few more like this

WHY DOES CELESTIA EAT FILET MIGNON?! Steak wrapped in bacon is a horrible thing for a pony to eat!

Cool story though.

One of the more hilarious fanfics. 5/5

wow, lol, XDD loved the end there

Great story and made me laugh quite a few times! BUT, there are a few gripes I feel I have to present. Why do they eat Filet Mignon? >.>

Also, I think you've made a bit too many references here. Don't get me wrong, this particular story has a load of its own original content, but I never found references (unless they're really subtle) as a strong point of content. My observation, but still a deserving story overall.

>>171305171305

"It's basically a glorified form of prostitution"

Okay, that made me giggle.

Oh this was really funny. I love your Celestia, “Screw privacy, I have power!” greatest line ever.

lol Filet Mignon. Not the first time I see someone making the ponies eat meat, I think it's unessesary to cause conflict, since there are lots of nice expensive dishes without it. If it's just a joke, is ok I guess.

>>171792171792

'Element'

Sorry I had to.

Good to see this story here :)

well done!

I lol.

Oh boy... It's stories like this that make me wish we had a Luna Emoticon.    

Well done.   Well done.

That was good.

Funny and captivating.

Didn't outstay its welcome.

You did a great job, keep it up... hehe magnets hehe.

I lol'd. Commissions.

Commissions...?

Commissions?

Oicwhatudidthar.jpg

Anyway, only thing I found wrong was 'fillet mingion' or however you spell it. That is a meat dish. Ponies are herbivores.

I FOUND A PLOTHOLE!!  

AHHH

NURSE!

Ok, now that was funny. I do so love a good story about the Sisters. Quite humorous. Why is I think Luna's mind broke with that last sentence. Also we need a Luna emoticon. I mean we have freaking but no Luna! HERESY! Heresy of the highest order!

I'm... worried about what Twilight and Spike were doing. Very worried.

Funny stuff ya got here, real funny. Ain't got nuthin' technical to complain 'bout neither.

>>171836171836 >>171886171886 >>172084172084

AH CRAP

Yeah, the "filet mignon" thing is from an early first draft. I forgot to edit it out. Changed, thanks for pointing it out!

I had no desire to read this until I saw the picture...

*processing*

omg it's so cute. Glad I read it by the way, t'was awesome.

Image: http://88milhasporhora.files.wordpress.com/2012/01/shut_up_and_take_my_money.jpg?w=600

The sequel: Twilight finds a book by Moony Maiden about a romance between her and Celestia.

DO IT PONY !!!

Imagine waking up one day and finding out somebody has written a story because you asked for it!

Excuse me, I'm just terribly giddy at the moment.

Also: “Screw privacy, I have power!” will live on in my memory forever.

Another great story!

And you know what I'm going to ask now right ?

We need a copy of the element of lust! (or at least other works of the moony maiden)

Thanks once again, I'm going to reread it now if you don't mind. /bookworm

>>172251172251

yea, i laughed at that a bit when i was reviewing your first draft on ponychan.

>>172275172275 THIS! Great story.

>>172275172275 Recommendation:

http://www.fimfiction.net/story/8424/Where-the-Mind-Wanders

Celestia finds a story by Twilight about a romance between them.

THEY DID THAT, PONY !!!

....I haven't even READ this story yet, and I'm adoring and/or laughing hysterically because of the title.

"The Moony Maiden," eh? Reminds me of "The Spoony Bard."

xD Haha, anyway, now I HAVE to read......

EDIT: ......and was I ever right. I elicited a few stares from my roommate (who is sitting on the couch just staring at me currently), because he couldn't figure out why I was laughing so hard, or what I was even referencing! xD

I think.... the standard response is to track+watch and so I shall! Ciao!

>>172453172453

Then it should be:

Fluttershy finds a book by Moony Maiden about her, Big Mac and Celestia. Because shyness + Swag + royality is win.

Screw privacy, I have power! is the best line ever. As in, ever.

And the ending was priceless.

5/5 and eager to read more.

I very nearly lost it at two points: When Celestia was walking down the halls with a hammer, and when she was talking to Abacus I mean the abacus.

The only thing I'm wondering is how do you 'track' a published book?

>>172723172723

Those were my favorite parts as well.

>>172275172275

Pony, please. Everyone knows comes between day and night. Ergo it must (end up as) a ménage à trois.

“Screw privacy, I have power!”

BEST...LINE...EVER PERIOD.

>>172275172275

DO IT!!!!

Also,Celestia is a mormon?!?! she..worships herself? or her ass...

Commission LOL!

Very good indeed

i herd you liek fanfics

Image: http://everyboty.net/shared/emotipix/silly/yo%20dawg%20-%20dog%20-%20xzhibit.png

>>173019173019

So i put a fanfic in yo fanfic so you can read while you read.

We need to go deeper-fanficception

LOL. I wonder what they all did to um... 'discover' lust....

I bet the story that Luna wrote was a prophecy of what was going to come, and when Celestia ran into Spike and Twilight, I bet she was 'researching' Lust with Spike! 0:

Since there is no point in simply joining the chorus of the people telling you just how awesome you are (let me just say here that starting at the very least the moment Celestia was talking to "Abby", I wouldn't have stopped reading even if the house had been on fire), have some nagging about minor stuff:

"the Alicorn of the Night herself, Princess Luna."

In the context I couldn't harm to leave the "Princess Luna" out, especially since the very first word of the next sentence happens to be... "Luna".

"Unlike the Luna’s"

Don't get me wrong, I'd love to meet the Luna's, but somehow I think that's not what you were trying to say.

"It was the socks all over again!"

Oh sweet Celestia, LOL

Take my stars, take them.

>>172723172723

It's magic, he ain't gotta explain jack.

Loved it.

THE BOOK MUST BE WRITIN

Did I spot a Yu-Gi-Oh! The Abridged series reference in "Screw privacy, I have power!"?

And these quotes make me smile:

"(the other being magnets)."

"This should be it... NOT THAT I KNOW WHAT IT LOOKS LIKE!"

"...How's life?" I say this all the time, lol XD

Nice job, I loved it ^.^

Tracking on the off chance you decide to continue

That Joseco image kills me every time. XD I may have to read this just for that.

''Screw privacy, I have knifes!''

Creme brulee night.  Oh that takes me back.   I knew a place in Philadelphia, PA that used to make passion fruit creme brulee.  Oh Celestia!  Oh Luna!  IT WAS AMBROSIA!!  I would agonize over every atom of it, savoring each tiny nibble to make it last as long as possible.

>>Archaeopteryx i like how you think

Research, really, if thats research then my friend is a scientist. By the way, cool story bro.

>>171792171792 Element

: ( :) :/ :0 :D D:

I have know idea what my mind thinks it was good grammur wise but my anti-love peice of my mind is at war with the rest of my mind  FUUUUUUUUUUU....

So the list of stuff I liked:

Was funny, I liked the jokes. made me giggle horribly.

Celestia! (Second favorite pony and probably my favorite one to read about in fics)

MAKE A SEQUEL! (If you don't mind that is...)

Author...is on Ponychan? MUST FIND. Honestly, this was hilarious. I lost it at the magnets line. Also...per chapter.

Also, does anypony else reckon the SEL has a connection to L-Space?

"Screw privacy, I have power!"

Words to live by, folks

is celestia commissioning for a story about how spike ended up strapped to that table with twilight doing "research"?

"Celestia flashed the mare a toothy grin, one that shouted: “Hi! Don’t be afraid, I’m your friend!”

Bookmark’s eyes delivered a quick response: “PLEASE DON’T EAT ME I’M SO SORRY.”"

I laughed so hard at that line you wouldn't even believe.

Well, this was certainly not what I was expecting! The whole... thing just looked like another trashy clopfic, but I figured that since I had nothing else to do today I could read it anyway, due to the more-interesting-than-usual synopsis. I got quite the surprise, that's for sure! It was actually pretty hilarious xD

I find it amusing that there's a library in Equestria where you can find fanfiction.

Lol, brill.

Great story! I might be missing something, but . . . who's Tirek?

>>175937175937

In the original My Little Pony (Gen I, 80's) cartoon, Tirek was the first villain in the series. He controlled the Rainbow of Darkness, if I remember correctly.