A few spelling mistakes here and there, but not bad.

I didn't note any spelling errors (but I didn't read it that closely).
There may have been some grammar/style errors but I wasn't paying too much attention.

Not the hottest sex scene I've ever read, but I definitely approve.

so this is a clopfic.

i aprove

<- imagine that is the face rainbow had when she...

<-imagine that is the face twilight had

good story