spike wanted rarity to go on a date for the longest time. even when they first meet spike loved rarity, and wanted her to be his. after a lot of failed atemps and brutal regections, spike gives up on rarity and love. after twilight finds out about the tragic events, she seeks help from a few determined girls. the Cutie mark crusaders try thier best to help out thier friend spike.
please don't hate that story. if you don't like it then don't read it.
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Poor spike and if anything you lost when sweetiebelle ran off different punctuation
and what not.
A weird story, but great all the same. It's a little fast-paced though.
I got super lost
@_@
2203042sorry to hear that
here rock out
Tip:Not capitalizing names and first words in a sentence in descriptions is begging for downvotes.
Also, your formatting is a bit wonky and awkward to read.
If you need an editor, there are plenty of groups willing to help authors who ask
2203077 oh it is actually ok. i have an editor (and a good one at that
) but the spelling and noncapitalizing is my bad. i normally get that stuff fixed.
and it was a small fic just for fun and releving stress
so i woun't really mind getting down votes.
and lasly. i am glad you cared to read this.
u don't get a lot of large people to read them. 
2203087
What do you mean>?
2203107 like more known people. like people that are very good at making storys and such.
like people like twizledragon, and demo3n (i spellt it wrong)
2203182
Oh, I'm flattered to be compared to them
I'm not that great though, I just mash the keyboard until words come out
2203196 ok.
i will get back to my rainbow factory
this is actually funny for some reson
Well, this was rather awkward and difficult to follow.
But it was decent enough. I think.
So, while this could have been better, it could have been worse.
2205300 thank you very much, i know it is hard to follow
good idea, just bad execution... it will come in time, all you need to do is work on it and ask for pointers
2209036 ok i guess. i couldn't even under stand half that sentance but ok will do
2217431 I meant "execution": you need to work on how you write your scenes
2217530 okie doke
Cute story. A few grammar and spelling errors though
2219745 thanks youzzzzz.
2203087
What's his name? I need to
burn him at the stakethrow him a party!2421159 he is in a difrent contry.
as i persummed you are from the riff shit
2421187
What gives you that idea?
I was just looking for
the worst fic arounda fic that could use a lot of work, and I found yours. I think your editor deserves aswordcake in his stomach for this impressive work of art. But it could usea furnace to be thrown ina chainsaw to be sawn in half witha little work.2421195 stop trying to be funny or you'll end up like heh rest of them.
chose the one i stusted the most to edit this fic, and it is my prized joy
2421211
I assume you meant THE rest of them... So if I stop trying to be funny I won't be popular and well known? Why would I stop then?
I think those three words should be your prized joy, they're the only thing I can really understand that you've written.