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IceOfWaterflock 29116366

Joined August 2011
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    IceOfWaterflock's Stories (29)

    • A True, True Friend
      After Princess Twilight's second coronation, word has come from the south that a great evil has returned. Will the Elements of Harmony be able to stop it in time, or is Equestria doomed?

      10,014 words · 1,594 views · 345 likes · 9 dislikes
    • Sin
      Chrysalis has nothing left. Everything's gone. Everything except one little Changeling.
      5,548 words · 851 views · 89 likes · 1 dislikes
    • I Wasn't Prepared for This
      When a last-minute hug from her assistant interrupts Twilight's coronation, the spell goes horribly wrong.
      20,598 words · 6,960 views · 992 likes · 63 dislikes
    • Wonderbolt Academy
      Rainbow Dash got a summer job as a rookie race-builder for the Wonderbolts. She's incredibly happy, but she's in way over her head.
      4,224 words · 345 views · 41 likes · 0 dislikes
    • Forces of Nature
      5,559 words · 511 views · 102 likes · 4 dislikes
    • Wired
      20,459 words · 367 views · 34 likes · 0 dislikes
    • In Victory
      1,005 words · 802 views · 63 likes · 2 dislikes
    • Hive Mind
      15,335 words · 3,047 views · 148 likes · 10 dislikes
    • Blaze
      1,028 words · 105 views · 30 likes · 0 dislikes
    • A Fear of the Dark
      3,233 words · 534 views · 63 likes · 3 dislikes
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    The rain had slashed at the windows for a long time before Twilight had noticed it. With a tear-stained muzzle, she looked up from the floor of the library, up to the largest window, past her bed...

    ...and past the small bed of her assistant.

    Her head lowered back to the floor, and she resumed her crying.

    Side characters include Applejack, Fluttershy, Rarity, Rainbow Dash, Pinkie Pie, Celestia, and Luna

    First Published
    6th Feb 2012
    Last Modified
    6th Feb 2012

    Comments ( 28 )

    #1 · Chapter 1 · 71w, 1d ago · · ·
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    Hm.  There aren't so many in which Twilight dies.  I'm enjoying this one already.  Definitely tracking.

    #2 · Chapter 1 · 71w, 1d ago · · ·
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    Aaaaaannnnnnnndddddddddd!

    Now I'm sad... :fluttercry:

    #3 · Chapter 1 · 71w, 1d ago · · ·
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    cool shit

    #4 · Chapter 1 · 71w, 1d ago · · ·
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    >>191343

    I feel you, bro.

    #5 · Chapter 1 · 71w, 1d ago · · 1 ·
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    This was brilliantly written and a heartwrenching sad-fic. I'm tracking because I am now emotionally invested in  this, something that I find rarely happens. I don't need to see other chapters; if you keep writing chapters of this caliber I know this is a five star fanfiction.

    I hope you get featured for this, this is an excellent tale.

    #6 · Chapter 1 · 71w, 1d ago · · ·
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    NNNNNOOOOOOOO!!!!!!!!!!!! . . . . . . . . . . . . . *sob*

    #7 · Chapter 1 · 71w, 1d ago · · ·
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    Wait, is there going to be more chapters? This is labeled as incomplete... I know it's stupid of me, but I still hope for a happy ending... I can hope... :fluttercry:

    #8 · Chapter 1 · 71w, 1d ago · · 1 ·
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    *sniff* Wow, sad...

    :fluttershysad:

    #9 · Chapter 1 · 71w, 1d ago · · ·
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    Emotions? None. Call me cold-hearted, but it's just not that sad of a story. I liked the writing though, but it just wasn't very compelling to me.

    4.5/5

    #10 · Chapter 1 · 71w, 1d ago · · ·
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    *cries*

    You bastard...*tracks*

    #11 · Chapter 1 · 71w, 1d ago · · ·
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    I liked it. 4.5/5

    skimmed through some of Spike's initial parts, but *shrugs*

    #12 · Chapter 2 · 71w, 1d ago · · ·
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    Epilogue complete and story finished. Thanks for reading, everyone.

    #13 · Chapter 1 · 71w, 1d ago · 1 · ·
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    I just can't get my head around the idea that her friends would go for a month and a half without checking in on her... especially if they knew Spike had left.

    #14 · Chapter 2 · 71w, 1d ago · · ·
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    already    

      " man i could i do nothing" George Lopez quote lol

    well awesome story will save for future reference and when i get depressed

    and also spike was cool in the end scratched of celestias name awesome bro

    #15 · Chapter 2 · 71w, 1d ago · · ·
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    Finished huh, pity . . . this story has the potential to go further.

    But as it stands right now . . . not a bad job.  I doubt that Celestia would be so cold about her student's death however.

    #16 · Chapter 2 · 71w, 18h ago · · ·
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    >>191885

    Try living more than a thousand years and see how you feel about emotions. Chances are she's had hundreds of pupils by now.

    Anyways, brilliant finish to the story, was a good read.

    #17 · Chapter 2 · 71w, 55m ago · · ·
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    Okay...Review Time.

    I'm not good at these, but this story interested me somehow.

    Very interesting characterizations.

    The plot was instantly depressing, with the suicidal thoughts of Twi in her final moments and Spike's sadness after the fact, Luna's rebelling against her sister, and the all around dark tone gave me a 'it's raining outside' feeling.

    Celestia's response was actually almost how I expected. My thought was that she would react that way at first. Then near the end, mourn in secrecy, showing that besides the fact that after a thousand years and many students, Twilight was like a daughter to her.

    Spike's reaction was surprisingly calm. I would have at least spit fire at Celestia, but it's good to see him keep his cool.

    Luna deserves the right to be angry with her sister, after all, Twilight was the one who saved her from her Nightmare Moon form. And the fact that Celestia wasn't sorry for sending her to the moon broke my heart.:fluttercry:

    The writing was almost poetic and neat. I hope to match such a way.:scootangel:

    Overall=5 stars, Favorited, and a heart:heart:

    Hope this meant something.

    #18 · Chapter 1 · 70w, 6d ago · · 1 ·
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    Holy shit that is sad, ive been looking for a fic like this for a long time 5/5

    #19 · Chapter 2 · 70w, 6d ago · · ·
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    >>195604

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    >>191885

    I really appreciate all the feedback, criticism - which there wasn't much of - and requests of continuation. I really enjoy writing stories outside of school, and it makes me happy knowing my work is appreciated. Thank you, TotalLostCause, for your review. I hope to have more stories up like this in a while, as All We Have got similar replies. I just want you to know that I read all of these comments, and squeeed a little inside whenever I got a favorite or a track.

    Thank you to everyone for your support.

    ~Ice

    #20 · Chapter 2 · 70w, 6d ago · · ·
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    >>197148 Well if it's criticism you're looking for I'll be more than happy to help you out.

    #21 · Chapter 2 · 70w, 5d ago · · ·
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    >>198719

    I wasn't requesting any, just letting everyone know that even the low points are appreciated. :twilightsmile:

    #22 · Chapter 2 · 68w, 3d ago · · ·
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    Buck Celestia, not caring and then acting like she did, good job Spike

    #23 · Chapter 2 · 51w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>192748

    wait so you have lived for a thousand years?

    #24 · Chapter 2 · 51w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>784100

    It's supposed to be a secret. Shhhhhhh!

    #25 · Chapter 2 · 51w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>787137

    your secrets safe with me....maybe

    #26 · Chapter 2 · 25w, 4d ago · 2 · ·
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    And then Discord said, "F*ck, this world is boring", and he brought Twilight back just for fun.:twilightsheepish:

    #27 · Chapter 1 · 8w, 6d ago · · ·
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    No.

    Just.

    No.

    Five weeks? Five. Weeks. And no one checked up on her? Not. ONE. OF. HER. FRIENDS. CHECKED?!!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?

    BULLSHIT! :flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage::twilightangry2::twilightangry2::twilightangry2::twilightangry2::twilightangry2::twilightangry2::twilightangry2:

    And that's ingoring how you DESTROYED Celesita by portraying her as nothing more than  COLD, MERCYLESS BITCH instead of the loving, belovenant ruler and personal teacher of Twilight Sparkle! SHE WOULD CARE. SHE WOULD KNOW WHEN THE MESSAGES ARE SENT, WHEN THEY STOP AND WOULD CHECK ON HER FAITHFUL STUDENT

    #28 · Chapter 2 · 8w, 6d ago · · ·
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    >>2436009

    She was told to only sent one when she learned something about friendship. Her friends probably thought she was on a studying binge - wouldn't be too unlike her - and Princess Celestia's lived for how many years?

    If you lost everyone you loved, hundreds of times over, would you let yourself be hurt that easily?

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