When delivering a gift for Luna, Twilight Sparkle and her friends suddenly witness a reverse version of their first adventure. Unable to interact with the world around them, will they find a way back home?
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I have to admit, this is a pretty good "What if" story your doing. Is it just the first two episodes or more?
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Just the first two.
@Jawmax...
Definitely fulfills the Alternate Universe tag ;) .
Some constructive criticism...
1. I suggest some other name for reverse-Celestia, "Mareage" from "mirage" is just too much of a stretch for spelling and phonetics, for reader immersion & sense-of-disbelief.
2. I am not certain that having the classic Mane Six as ghostly observers are needed for this story, but that is a factor that can go either way. If you intend for the classic Mane Six to learn something from this vision-experience, then that is fine.
Otherwise, I like your reversal of roles so far. I particularly like Apple Jill as a prim-&-proper southern belle & plantation-owner; making her AppleJack's reverse, yet keeping her country nature. All she is missing is a parasol
. Good work there.
I look forward to seeing how you re-assign the Elements of Harmony to the reverse Mane Six.
*Sees, 'The Other Side of the Coin', which is the title of a fan fic Im writing but have not published*
YOU HAVE GOT TO BE KIDDING ME!
ITS THE TITLE OF MY FAN FIC WORD FOR WORD! HOW DAFUQ DOES THAT HAPPEN?!
OH COME ON!
When delivering a gift for Luna Twilight Sparkle and her friends suddenly witness a reverse version of their first adventure. Unable to interact with the world around them will they find a way back home?
Might want to write it as:
When delivering a gift for Luna, Twilight Sparkle and her friends suddenly witness a reverse version of their first adventure. Unable to interact with the world around them, will they find a way back home?
Or somesuch.
This is definitely a great story already. I would really enjoy it if the Mane Six end up actually interacting with their opposites after the whole ordeal is over. It would be pretty cool.
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Well, I have a story called The "Spike" Incident that I almost ended up giving a name that would have been the same as someone else's story with almost the exact same premise (They Call Me ... Spike?). Also, both were published on the same day and were fairly popular. It's not the first time this sort of thing has happened. It's just slightly unusual.
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I know how you feel. I was going to use the name Flipside until I saw that someone else had used it already.
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Thank you for your input.
very good keep it up.
Whoo, a What-If
MachineSpell. Would look on with patience.2164355 *'Flipside' was back up title* paranoidnews.org/wp-content/uploads/2010/07/fuuuu.jpg imgbase.info/images/safe-wallpapers/photography/miscellaneous/17975_miscellaneous_nuclear_explosion_explosion.jpg
I like to check out alternant universes but what makes this one special is that the current one gets to see this as well. Can't wait for the next chapter.
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Yeeeeah, sorry about that you two. If it makes you feel better, I'd come up with a different title now if I thought I could get away with it.
Anywho, about your story. In my opinion it feels a bit rushed a little mechanical, going from one moment to another... but on the other hand the important thing isn't how events change, but how the characters do. I really can't see each of them holding the same elements as they do in canon. Of course I wonder why they're so different from their canonical selves...
I think I'll keep an eye on this one for a bit, just to see how it develops.
2168863 So, basically what your saying is that:
If you change your name, JawMax can it to Flipside, and I can change it to the Other Side of the Coin...
I really really like this~
There are a few things I would have done different myself (name-wise, change Twilight to Dawn, and Nightmare Moon to Daydream Mare, etc), but I definitely would have never thought of "Ragity", that's just too good!
Another thing is, I would put what the "classic" ponies are saying in italics, just cuz there were a few times that I got confused on who was saying what...
Very nice job so far!
Punk rock Rarity is best pony.
Oh, no. We've stepped into the bizzaro universe. Now how will twilight Sparkle and her team of ghosts find a way to see Celestia's honor restored? Will you continue this?
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Yes but it is one of many projects but I am working on it.
Too bad you haven't written anymore of this story...
I was really liking it. I was thinking it might be interesting to see how the ponies are different in other aspects and which ones of the alt. mane six have which elements.
I also thought there could be a lot more humor potential in the future as the original mane six react to their alternate universe counter parts, along with other alternate ponies.
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I am working on the next chapter. Please be patient.
can't wait when you making next chapter oh you hear equestria girls on youtube and mlp fim season 4 is coming nov
You ever gonna update this story?
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I have other project and a life but I fully intend to finish it.
Awesome! Only I would have preferred Apple Jewel instead of Apple Jill. Otherwise, great story!
Wow, I though I was the only one to call evil princess celestia Daymare Sun.
I really Like this story Hope to read more soon
Quick question, are the elements going to be swapped around or are we going to see opposite? PM me the answer.
This seems to be a good idea. I want more of it.
Sorry for bugging you but do you know when the next chapter will be posted