This is very well-written I must say, but it doesn't seem to go anywhere. A might boring, I guess you could say.

>>47714771 A first attempt, from a long time away, no great thing did i expect, but i posted anyway

at first i was like then i was like

>>66566656

i read your comment...

At fist i was like then i was like now i"m like

Congratulations you have given me brain damage from trying to figure out what you meant was wrong with it.

Next time...WHY DON'T YOU JUST SAY WHAT'S WRONG WITH IT! THAT'S HOW WE WRITERS GET TO IMPROVE OUR WORKS< WHEN PEOPLE TELL US WHAT IS ACTUALLY WRONG WITH IT!

It was rather short, but with great detail. But, aren't ponies flanks on their hind legs? I read that as if he had lungs in his legs

>>84498449

...I guess? But then again it kinda makes sense to me...

And yes it was short...I hadn't written in over 5 years so I wanted to start off slow.

>>84698469 I kinda see what you're getting at... but then again I'm not you so that may explain why I didn't get it.

>>87888788

Thank your kind fortune that you aren't

I liked this. Seemed well done to me. And shorter tales don't bother me.

Keep up the good work!

Cute, cute

Shall there be more? Please?

Where is the Mac-Dash part? I can't wait to see it!!! Keeeeep theeeeeeee goooood woooooooooork

>>928726928726 Funnily enough it is right there, It's just only 26 words long and I have the most terrible Writer's Block and an intense case of procrastination.