Its Spikes birthday week! And by a delightfull twist of events he spends it with Applebloom. Hilarity ensues as they both try to is figure out exactly WHAT Applebloom is feeling towards Spike. With a little help from their friends, they'l survive the week and maybe even learn what love is! But someone may be out to stop that from happening, can they defeat this mysterious foe as well?
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Not bad . However you are trusting spell check to much. Example Big Mac refers to his( little sis)
and you have [little did], and there are others. You might want to read your story out loud or get one of the prereaders on this site to look over your work. Good start, keep on writing
Great job! Nothing but forward!
free rainbow cupcakes? you crazy mare you i see what you did their lets hope rainbow dont eat them all up nope
Eeep also spelling check tears instead of years and no point instead of not point
Great story some feed back is that you need to re-read your work you had several spelLing errors the wholechangling fight seemed to go offf the plot into an alternative conflict but i got to admit you did a damn fine job and i truly enjoyed this P.S the discord character was a little bit off his personality
wow this is an awesome story WRITE THAT SEQUEL. At first i never would have thought of spike and applebloom as a couple but after reading this fimfic i totally cant see spike with anypony else they are sooo adorable with each other im sure they cant be separated
p.s. i even cryed a little in the end it was soo cute
but i think instead of discord and twilight it should be discord and celestia
This is one of the better spikebloom stories i've read. definitely made a good choice of favorite-ing it.
2143259 amen good sir, amen to all you said about them as a couple.
Somehow, seeing a typo in the first word of a description isn't very promising
Uh huh not a bad story could use revising though so many errors with Capitalization.
That was a crap load of "Kingdom Hearts" references you put in there. Also, correct me if I'm wrong, but I think you also put in a reference from "The World Ends With You" in there when Applejack got that letter from Joshua.
Great story btw I loved it!
I love what you did with Spike and Applebloom. They make the cutest couple. However your spelling could use a little work. It wasn't bad enough to ruin the mood or anything, but it did get a bit distracting at times.
Overall I would give this story a 4/5 and not a 5/5 due to the spelling errors. I shall make sure to keep an eye out for any of your future works and if you need someone to proofread for you just drop me a line.
The letter from Spike is a play on that Shrek song.
"I thought love was only true in fairy tales" < that song. Very clever, i'm surprised nobody has mention it.
In any case, your story is well done. A few spelling and grammar errors, but hey, it's the idea that counts, yeah. Very cute story.
Well, i'm off to try and find Celestia clops
"Just making sure he be treatin ma little did correctly."
*sis (not did)
"Hmm... Well, I say flutter shy, Pinkie was Pinkie and... That's right!"
*Fluttershy (one word capitalized)
This is good, needs some work on aesthetics, but good none the less.
Sonic reference.....yeahhhh...
Great job! You make a great job with this fanfic. Very much details. Just watch out for the time references... The ideia was soo original. Keep wrighting!
From your friend of Brazil
Allec Fox
rofl a portal joke
I see the kingdom hearts reference
You did great. Now make a sequal
That. Was. Amazing!
I really liked that battle scene too, and it looked like you really enjoyed doing it; you really know how to make a great story, with good details. And that part where Zecora talked to spike, I believe is noteworthy.....Most stories I've read just can't get Zecora's character down enough with all of the rhyming; they usually do the rhyming in a way that seems way OC, but I thought you nailed it
Overall, simply awesome, except like everyone else has said, some grammar errors, but not enough to ruin the story
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Tge battle scene would be EPIC! If right after Spike defeated Gawain he stood up and said"Chaos" THAT WOULD MAKE IT TOTALLY EPIC!!!
Oooooh who's rainbows special somepony?
OMC OMC IM DYING FROM THE ADORBS :3
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Are we not going to mention the word “say” either? Lol
Suddenly, Diamond Tiara shows up.
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Everybody’s Super Sonic Racing!!! 😁😁😁