A unicorn from a technologically advanced society of ponies is transported to a strange place when an experiment goes wrong.
This is a chronicle of his life in Equestria, and of the deeds that he accomplishes. From the first moments in Equestria to turning points in pony history follow Mixer as he deals with his new life, and changes the face of Equestria forever.
First try at fanfic, hope everyone enjoys it.
Feel free to give criticism, it is an ongoing work and much of the story later could be improved by suggestions on my writing.
*Any similarities to other fanfics are purely coincidences.
Thank you PAradoxSg
Chapters (37)
Wall of text, not going to bother reading this further than the first chapter.
I advise you to correct this, because most of the future reader are going to tell you about it or downvote you without reading more.
I'm surprised this is the first comment here.
If by "Wall of text" you mean a lot of dialogue, then yeah, can't fix that, but if you mean no paragraph breaks, I have a hard time fixing that with so much dialogue.
If you know someone who could edit my stuff then I'm all ears.
Maybe try to enter groups like http://www.fimfiction.net/group/394/struggling-authors or others related ?
And read some of the Top rated fics of this site, see how the top authors deal with dialogue and paragraph break to make a story more enjoyable for a reader.
2203677 I realize this, and the first chapter is like that because it was me trying to remember back from a month or so ago when I first started to think about this.
In my mind, I've already crafted Mixer's life so this is all putting it on paper.
At some point I'm going to go through and do a hard edit on the first few chapters, but that will be later when I'm not so amped to get the next book out.
Finally, you don't come across as mean at all, and I thank you for the criticism, that's how I went from not knowing how to properly use paragraph to what I have now. Thanks
The mixer x fluttershy romance is kinda nice. And the sombra-chysallis allaince seems to work great!
(I'm reading a chapter per day)
Also did you hear that Laruen Fuast is designing OC for fighthing is magic?
2219690 I know isn't it exciting!
“We didn’t really get a chance to talk last time we met.” - twilight
XD that is soooooooo ture
(Sombra didn't have many lines)
So far I see that your story is improving - Good work!
Don't beat yourself up and set up dates.
This is a hobby not a chore; do it when you feel like it or when you want to do something. If its something you love you always have to give time and space to manuver and take a break
If you have ideas and want to jot them down on paper, go ahead. but just remeber that not everything will go as planned. Some ideas you may rethink about.
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? I dont quite follow.
I work on this because I love to, and all of what I write changes slightly as I write it, none of it is concrete.
Now that I'm looking at what chapter you posted that on, I see what you mean, and by now, none of that applies, they finish when they finish, it just so happens that I've been able to start churning them out one a day again
I caught probably a misspelling and a few missing quotation marks but I am impressed at how you wrote discord and 'dicorded-mixer' in this chapter
Three thinsg came into my mind while I was reading this.
1. This reminded me of the time I ate spicy food from the middle east...
2. This was on accident, upon hearing "Over the mountains" XD http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=FwTWmQeA8b0
3. Over the course of reading a chapter a day, I see that you have grown up as an author faster than I have
well done, mixer
2263645 thanks, It took me a while to get into the groove but once I did, my writing got better, and I had so much fun writing the Discord chapter.
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same here....
reminded me of delta from rvb ^^
my little manicore slayer.... XD
also I liked how you returned Flim and Flam.
And I see better inprovemnt in writing and content! Thanks for bringing me back
DOUBLE BASS CANNON....
Also I noticed that Mixer and Fluttershy isn't really present that much now. Infact, the other pony he's usually with is twilight
2310441 explanation for that is coming, in the book I'm currently working on
“Quill where are those carriages going?” I jabbed the question at his as he walked outside
Wasn't sure if there was a mispelling here.
Overall this was a pretty action-packed tariler with that lucius-mixer twist and I see that you are learning.
I'm trying my best to read all your chapters so that whats taking me so long.
2324820 Thank you, I'm starting to slow down a bit with writing them, not much free time
When its finished... Just going back and editing it....
With your improved writing now, I bet that if you did edit all the old chapters, this would turn into one of the better stories on this site.
Just....
the ideas are amazing, the complexity and layers of background info, all it needs is a good edit.
Bravo.
Ahhh....so thats where souless comes in
2381084 Yeah...
Wait, hold the phone
I have a dislike?
Good stroy - I'm gonna check out the previous chpater for details but still awesome job with the dragon fight and the lore of the moon godess
And yes; Luna is best dragon slayer.
I have to admit this piece was great.
2419813 I love it, and Bach + Octavia= Awesome!
I must say, I'm eager to see when 'I' show up.
2441329 Hmm... well now that you mention it, I can put you in this one...
2442644 wait...what? I though I was always in this one...or were you talking about Ever After for that discussion we had before?
Pretty good chapter - memes:“We shall not let them pass,”
And souless on killing spree is awesome.
2477983 Yeah, too bad there's only two more books
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Don't worry you still have Ever After.
btw did you 'fix' the beginning chapters?
2478223 Working on that
Wow. 12 chappies in and no comments at all?
it. Pinkie promise that fact, my friend.
This is the most amazing reinterpretation of MLP I have ever seen. I
Cross my heart and hope to fly, stick a cupcake in my eye.
Why does it seem more like Mixlight than Mixershy now?
(My shipping names 4 u. Mixlight = u + twilight. Mixershy = u + Fluttershy)
2494451 If you thought that was an interesting interpretation, read on to Moon's Zenith
Someone told me to come here and give a like. SO I GAVE YOUR STORY A LIKE. I AM A MERCIFUL GOD.
where's thunder blur?
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wrong story... You're looking for Ever After
good chapter - I see right now you had to kill off a character....(sigh)
but I understand
2579715 You talking about Ivy?
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Yup
2581922 She's not dead...
I was just rereading this chapter; I have to say its one of my favorites. Also I'm wondering .... Is mixer your ponysona? ( I should have asked that long ago)
2729080 In a way, yes, he's kind of my persona, mostly because he was my first OC, but also because I have his personality parallel mine so I can identify with the character more, and write better.
Still it's nice to hear an update and the coming of an end to The adventures mixer had. I feel proud of you bro
Also I'm not sure if you worded this correctly: “True... if Twilight say this, she burn me in an instant,” the voice said.
2825618 Thank you, I fixed that error
The tower kind of sounds like Wan Shi Tong's Spirit Library from Avatar,
Veni, Vidi, Vici: I came, I saw, I conquered.
Multus: Great
Torris: Brand
3699245 The last one was close, but not quite. Firebrand
3699278 I just went with the first translation.
so is there another chapter?