Halfway through the war, a decision was made. After several unsuccessful assassination attempts, the Ministry of Arcane Sciences and the Ministry of Wartime Technology cooperated in what was to be the (arguably) greatest failed project of the entire war. Crippled by public opinion and ethics, it was announced as a failed project and supposedly abandoned. Or, at least, that's what everyone thought.
The truth was, too many resources had been poured into this project to just walk away. Lives had been lost, budgets had been spent, and time had been wasted. So, research and development continued unofficially, as the ministry mares turned a blind eye.
This project, was 'Project Rapture'.
This, as you may or may not have guessed, is a story based upon Fallout: Equestria. It is also pretty heavily 'inspired' (stolen) from Bioshock 1 and 2.
I've basically assumed that you've read 'Fallout: Equestria'. If not, some details might not make sense to you. So, if you haven't read it, go and check it out at Equestria Daily
Any constructive criticism is completely welcome, since I'm pretty new to writing fanfics.
You have a very interesting concept here. I will fav to see further updates.
Thanks for the praise
wait so hes a ponified version of a big daddy? so something like this
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or do you have a different design? regardless this has a lot of potential as a concept so im favoriting to follow this
also if he is a big daddy in pony concept is he going to be acquiring a little filly to accompany and keep safe
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That's pretty much exactly what I was going for!
Well, barring the drill on the head. If he had that, escape would be a whole lot easier.
He'd also have slots/a frame for a battlesaddle to be attached, but that's just a small detail.
I haven't got all the story details ready quite yet, so he may or may not get a filly.
First of all, welcome to the FoE sidefic herd
I must say, I like both the premise and the triple-crossover (much like my own fic
). Also, your character's back story has thus far been very interesting. Have a fav and a thumb 
I've found that the FIMFiction community is often very supportive and willing to provide feedback, and since a good many have done just that for me, I think it's about time I did it for someone else. So here's a short list of a few things I noticed:
You've used the same pair of words twice in two consecutive sentences, which doesn't scan well. Synonyms are your friend in situations like these
Your paragraphing is a little disjointed. It's a good technique to speed up a scene with short paragraphs and brief sentences/dialogue, but you seem to have taken a new line after every sentence at certain points.
You missed a capital letter here.
These should probably be 'hoof-to-hoof' and 'hooves'. (I have noticed however that you correctly used 'hands' as the unit of a pony's height
)
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I hope this is helpful! Keep that plot progression going - I'm looking forward to getting to know your protagonist better
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great chapter. So how come he hasn't spoken yet(to his captors i mean)? Is he mute or is he just that silent type of guy (understandable seeing as he wakes up to find out hes been out of it for a LONG time).
this was a good chapter to get some background knowledge on good ole fishbowl head 
welp, other than being kinda confused a bit
as for being an editor well i would have no idea at all how to so sorry
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Thanks for all the advice!
Hopefully the mistakes should be corrected now.
I've decided not to correct the paragraphing errors yet, but I shall definitely bear that in mind for future chapters, and I will most likely change that at some point in the future.
2147419 I'm gonna go with him being unable to speak, either from physical trauma or from Psychological conditioning.
That might change in the future though
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Glad to be of help
Did you said you were looking for a pre-reader?
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Yeah, I mean, if you're offering then I'll gladly accept
And if you can't do it yourself, then just suggesting someone is also a great help!
Just realised that I didn't save the edits.
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Yeah sure
Are you on the compilation document btw?Just logged in and saw you in the chat windowThis is probably one of the most consistent Fallout Equestria side stories that I've ever read. Keep up the excellent work.
Hazzah finally got to reading this! Welp now its time for Red Eyes obvious villainous speech about using him for his needs and whatnot. Maybe throw in a mustache twirl with a good BWAHAHAHAH!
Just a quick little question but are you able to see any facial features through his helmets visor or is it reflective and whatnot? Well anyways thanks for spending your own time into writing this for readers and such. Its a good story so far
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Sorry for the delay! I've been contemplating life, and regretting writing this in the present tense.
You wouldn't be able to see his face, but the glass isn't reflective. In Bioshock, the Big Daddy's visor glows yellow, or other colours depending on their mood. This glow obscures the inside of the helmet, so that's what I'm using as an excuse.
good fic keep writing
Pretty good start, I'd say. Will there be Plasmids in this or just the Big Daddy concept?
Great chapter but is a bit boring I know filler chapter but still umm by? I guess.