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Here, have a spell checker.
No.
Correct this. I wont even bother with the story until the summary is legible; you only used a handful of words here and a third of them were spelled incorrectly. That does not bode well for the actual content you were trying to entice us to read.
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Come to think of it, I'm pretty sure this site has a spellchecker built in already. You purposefully avoided using it. How and why?
2198198 sorry dude just was in a rush to get out thier and the summry was last min i forgot to send to my 15 betas first just got caghut up in my first story ya know
2196581 thax man need that it is now fixed
Spent a few minutes on it, but I was really just looking for individual examples of different problems.
2 questions.
1) Are you in high school/College?
2) What do you read?
My guess for the first is that you're in middle school, or early high school. Nothing wrong with that, but you'll need more practice writing before you can actually make the text on a page display the ideas you wish to convey. Basically, keep writing. It gets easier and, as you write more, you get better. There is no substitute.
In the interim, I suggest you get a proof-reader or a Beta (if you prefer that term)
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Recommended reading ( I would normally recommend my own story, but I'm in the middle of updating it. Since I rewrite almost all of it every few months I now have loads of new errors to fix. Still...here's Thick Scales):
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The Iliad-Simply for background
The Bobby pendragon Series
Pedestal-An amazing Pokemon fic
Understand -An oneshot novellete.
Animorphs-Simple but well written book series
The Bartimeaus book Trilogy-example of just about everything you would need to make the story better
Kindred Spirits -Spike and Gilda centric
It Takes a Village - Spike centric
WOMP - clever
Eternal -Celestia and Twilight centric
Hexonxonx - Vinyl centric. Intense.
Background Pony - A quarter of a million views. Enough said, I think.
On Pins and Needles - This made me like SpikexRarity shipping.
Song of... - Mechanics, and a bit of a lesson in writing in different styles
The Carnivore's Prayer - Same as above
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Later,
~Lord Doxkid~
2199050
Just a helpful pointer: If you want to write good fiction don't rush, EVER. You rush, you make mistakes, you make mistakes, you're screwed.
Now granted, some authors can 'pull good stories out of their asses' (as I like to call it), but that's because they've been doing it longer than other people have. They're the experts.
[Good] Fictional writing REQUIRES patience, end of story.
2208136 thank you for you advise my firend any other tips
2208434 You are welcome.
As to other tips: read, read, READ. Next to everything that I know about fictional writing I got from reading other good fiction.
Other than that: "He who can take criticism can likely take anything else while he who ignores his opposition is doomed to failure," ~Anonymous.
Good luck.
2208475 thanks man and hounstly it took 15 betas just to get it this good imagen what the orriganl would look like
WTF........ BROTHER..... WELL THAT WAS CRAZY...
2387227trust me waite till you meet the rest of the fam and his firends
2387333 HAHAHA lawl
So Spike have a brother that know dragon magic? Hm....well.....Spike you know little about your own kind, so say your goodbye.
2422995 trust me dude everything pony now including the 2000 year old princess is very little and bias
2423023 I belive you. And it 1000
2423043 my bad but seirsly dark shit will go down
2423064 Oh now I'll be waiting for the next chapter then.
keep going please
Come on we need updates.... we wanna know whats coming next and its been mons=ths since the last one!!!
2453938 sorry man but I got research papers and I have writers block with ch but if nessery I can split it an make two
2454356 uh huh ok.....
2454379dont worry dude after the report I can work on it and get it proof red
2454462 yaaaaaaaaaaaaaay.... (overexagerated exitedness)
Keep going dude. It's crazy a giant dragon is Spike's brother. I love the story already.
2506405 did you not seem transform he more badass in small form the huge trust me
2454532 ch2 is nearing MAHAHAHAH
Okay, well a cursory read of your story description, the second question cancels out the first, because we know he's going to go on the journey, otherwise the second question wouldn't exist.
In short, yes, I'll be your beta. lol
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Ohhhhh. Snnnaaappppppp IT'S AWESOME
3047810 wow you read it all that fast?
Yepppppp
Ima fav and like because THIS IS FREAKIN AWESOME
dude I need more i mean like 50 more chapters
You have my interest good sir.
3047951 well forchanly this is only ch 2 of of a llllllllllllllllloooooooooooooooooooonnnnnnnnnnnnnnnngggggggggggggggg ass journey of war new comrads maby some love a boat lode of one linners
3047810>>3047819>>3047951>>3048635
Ponies just learned where they stand in the Pecking Order.
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3049556hoollllyyyy crappppp I like
3051306 Lower than worms.
3051633 No problem.
lol wats a sentence amirite?
lol
3053485fixed it
Description is addled.
3072614?????
3072641 Look the word up.
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3185267 not cool dude not cool I just have trouble and I work as best I can and get any help I can for I will make this fic great one way or another
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3188104 I can understand getting jugged harshly but if you don't have a reason behind it I will just straight up ban you from here. are we clear
3188173 Oh, there's perfectly good reasoning, first and foremost that you don't seem to have ever encountered the English language before, much less have ever written it down.