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On Hearts and Hooves Day, Sweetie Belle decides that she should be Miss Cheerilee's new very special somepony. Anonymous cards, out-of-control rumours and failed attempts to "help" things along create havoc among Cheerilee's friends.

A story for the Lunaverse Hearts and Hooves Day 2013 event. Now part of the Lunaverse canon!

First Published
14th Feb 2013
Last Modified
14th Feb 2013

Comments ( 40 )

#1 · 75w, 4d ago · · ·

This...this was awesome! I loved the domino effect! I think this may be my favorite of the H&H stories so far (sorry, everyone else!)

Side note - ever watched Cardcaptor Sakura? The original, that is, not the dub. Cheerilee's talk with Sweetie Bell kind of reminded me of a similar talk that Yukito gave Sakura.

#2 · 75w, 4d ago · · ·

:rainbowlaugh: That was hilarious, I loved practically everything, I did fee bad for Sweetie but this was all great, Scoots zany scheme, Dinkie helping out Cheerilee's speech the constant misunderstanding, and Trixie at the end I feel awful for her but it's just so funny! :rainbowlaugh:

#3 · 75w, 4d ago · 1 · ·

Thoroughly enjoyable.  I love how everything escalated in small logical steps, unless Scoots was coming up with a Zany Scheme(tm).

Monsieur Bourbon will not abandon you, Trixie!  Never forget that!

#4 · 75w, 4d ago · · ·

Oh dear sweet Luna, this is hilarious! You win the internet. I love this SO much that I can't find the proper words to describe how mich I love it.

:pinkiehappy:

#5 · 75w, 4d ago · · ·

Oh, Sweetie Belle.:facehoof: Oh, Ditzy.:facehoof: Oh, Lyra.:facehoof: Oh, everypony. :facehoof::facehoof:

#6 · 75w, 4d ago · · ·

That ending.   What.  :facehoof:

#7 · 75w, 4d ago · · ·

Brilliant story! I'm still smiling. :pinkiehappy:

#8 · 75w, 4d ago · · ·

“Feelings are icky.”

Thats so Trixie.

oh no. Not him too! Why did I have to be so magnificent? It’s a curse!

Why do I have to fix everything I touch? :raritycry:

“I’m not attracted to Luna!” shrieked Trixie. “I don’t know why she thinks I am! Just because she’s amazingly powerful and wise and beautiful and kind and patient and always listens to me and takes me seriously doesn’t mean I’m in love with her!”

“Of course not, Trixie,” said Cheerilee. “You know, I still have that copy of Shoot for the Moon if you want to borrow it. Look, it’s nothing to be ashamed of.”

“But it’s not true!” Trixie wailed. “I don’t have a crush on her, I just want her to be proud of me and tell me what a good student I am, and spend time with me and show me all of her magic and… and…”

Trixie blinked in horror.

“I have a crush on Princess Luna.”

Sounds more like you want her to be your parents really.

#9 · 75w, 4d ago · · ·

Wow, thanks, guys! I had no idea this story would turn out so well! Thank you for all the lovely comments!

>>2121252 Gosh, thank you! In all fairness, this is also the longest entry to the H&HD event, so I have a little bit of an advantage there. But thank you!

>>2121696 I think that pretty much sums it up. :facehoof:

>>2122690

“Feelings are icky.”

Thats so Trixie.

It really is. I'm actually not sure how Trixie feels about romance, as such, rather than sex. She probably conflates the two enough that they both freak her out, but I've always favoured a sort of platonic or chaste marriage between Trixie and Ditzy as my primary ship for the Lunaverse.

“I have a crush on Princess Luna.”

Sounds more like you want her to be your parents really.

Well, that's the thing. Children (and emotionally immature adults like Trixiethe entire population of Equestria) can have trouble distinguishing between the different types of love. The way I understand it, a student notices all these feelings of wanting her teacher's approval, discovering how amazingly learned and brilliant and hard-working she is, realises how much she enjoys spending time with the teacher, and comes to the conclusion: "This must be what being in love feels like!" The actual emotions don't change much as you grow older (I'm a 31-year-old engineer, and I still squeal quietly when my manager praises my work), but your ability to distinguish the different kinds of love improves. A young student can easily have both "I wish you were my dad" and "I wish you were my boyfriend" as two simultaneous attempts at trying to understand "I find our mentor-student relationship very fulfilling".

#10 · 75w, 3d ago · · ·

>>2125110

"Feelings are icky.”

Thats so Trixie.

It really is. I'm actually not sure how Trixie feels about romance, as such, rather than sex. She probably conflates the two enough that they both freak her out, but I've always favoured a sort of platonic or chaste marriage between Trixie and Ditzy as my primary ship for the Lunaverse.

I've been thinking the same thing but with Trixie and Pokey, I think it would be rather a deep and probably difficult subject to write about in a realistic (rather than overly romantic style), there would probably be quite a bit of frustration on the sexual partners side and possibly jelousy from the asexual partners side of those who could deal with their partners physical needs (not quite worded right really more a fear of loosing the sexual partner because they want something you can't give). I could see an interesting scene where Trixie is willing to give her self up as a virgin sacrifice (literally) to Pokey to show how much she loves him dispite how much it creeps her out and him not going through with it because it would feel like rape.

Well that's certainly darkened the mood.  

#11 · 75w, 3d ago · · ·

I thoroughly enjoyed reading this, thanks for uploading this story..:yay:

#12 · 75w, 3d ago · · ·

Oh man that was incredible! I totally knew where it was going by the time Lyra said she would solve everything... :rainbowlaugh: What an hilarious mess! I can't help but imagine the whole thing still has a domino effect all over Equestria :derpytongue2:

#13 · 75w, 1d ago · · ·

Oh, this was a cavalcade of comedy of Rube Goldbergian proportions! :rainbowlaugh: Perfect domino setup and tumbling, here. Loved it. :pinkiehappy:

#14 · 75w, 1d ago · · ·

Well that chain of misunderstandings managed to run its course and fall apart without resulting in tragedy. Also the characters for all there faults and differences all seemed believable as people and seemed to be fore the most part grounded save for Sweetie Belle's disconnect with reality that set this whole thing in motion.

#15 · 74w, 6d ago · 1 · ·

This is briliant. A hilliarious escalation that still made perfect sense and was still sensitive to the feelings of all the characters.

#16 · 74w, 6d ago · 2 · ·

Brought here by IAH's review post.

Zany schemes are always the correct answer! For shame, Dinky!

Dinky chewed awkwardly on her lower lip for a few moments before she managed to meet her mother’s gaze. “Well, she’s… kind of… an adult. Um… her teacher.”

The temperature in the room seemed to drop sharply, and the conversation suddenly stopped being at all cute.

Mama bear mode engaged.

And there goes the window! :rainbowlaugh:

It's always time for bourbon! It'll especially be time for it once Lyra tells the Princess you have feelings for her...

No flies on Ditzy I see.

Excellent story!

Comment posted by Walabio deleted at 8:14am on the 26th of February, 2013
#18 · 70w, 5d ago · 4 · ·

“I have a crush on Princess Luna.”

"Dear Princess Luna,

Apparently, I have a crush on you.  How do I kill it?

TGaP Trixie"

:trixieshiftright:

#19 · 70w, 1d ago · 1 · ·

So cute and funny! And all the characters react believably to their different situations. There were plenty of situations where a lesser writer would have made the characters dumber and thus extend the misunderstandings even further, but nopony likes dumbed-down characters who can't see through situations at all. Still, the driving force of it all is their jumping to conclusions, but I think that's nicely executed; I can easily see myself drawing the same conclusion Lyra did about Trixie. On that note, I loved the little twist at the end, and how you thus avoided a predictable status quo re-establishment for everypony.

#20 · 70w, 52m ago · 1 · ·

It's not just a romance train wreck, it's a train that derailed onto the interstate, caused a pileup and launched another car into a different train. Truly a thing of beauty in organized chaos

Discord would be pleased

+1 and faved well done

#21 · 61w, 15h ago · · ·

I feel the train could have wrecked a little more spectacularly, though it is pretty funny.

Also, is it me, or is there something in the water in Ponyville?

Of the characters featured in the Lunaverse thus far...

Lyra, Bon Bon, and Rarity all have interest in other mares. Cheerilee is heavily bisexual. Diamond Tiara is a prepubescent foal, but expresses strong early tendencies in that direction. Though also prepubescent, Sweetie Belle has crushed pretty strongly. Trixie seems to believe she now has a crush on Luna, though that's probably just her panicking as usual. Lyra is cited as having two dads.

Scootaloo is up in the air, since she's prepubescent and is, really, as liable to be just an object of DT's affection as anything else. She's not expressed any interest in others at all at this point, so no telling.

Nothing wrong with any of that, per se, but I'm starting to wonder if there's a sampling error, when the proportions are this heavily weighted. :pinkiehappy:

#22 · 60w, 1d ago · · ·

Oh, it’s nothing. This repair will fill out my rewards card anyway, so my next repair is free.

lol i love the running gag

#23 · 59w, 4d ago · · ·

And that was a masterwork of a kerflufel! Bravo! Discord gives it two thumbs intersecting on the V-axis plane!

#24 · 58w, 17h ago · · ·

So does this story take place at the same time as "of hearts and Hooves", because that doesn't make much sense . . . wouldn't Lyra and Trixie be doing the dinner at bon-bon's like she was in "of hearts and Hooves". I really enjoyed it, but am just confused on how it fits into the cannon :pinkiehappy:

>>2121252

It is like Cardcaptor sakura!!! :pinkiegasp:

Also, does anyone know when "Secret of Andalantis" will be finished???

#25 · 58w, 17h ago · · ·

>>2736310

Well, "Of Hearts and Hooves" just takes place on Hearts & Hooves day, while this takes place over the course of a few days, I think. So I think the two can overlap safely.

#26 · 58w, 8h ago · · ·

>>2736463

Rarity herself was hard at work on the other side of the room, her mouth full of pins as she laboured over an elaborate dress that somepony needed for Hearts and Hooves Day, which was tomorrow.

The next morning, Ditzy Doo was grazing on a bowl of cereal as she scanned the Ponyville Express, in preparation for another day delivering mail

This only spans two days the eve of hearts and hooves, and the day itself. I think that it very clearly shows that the scene with Lyra and Trixie is during hearts and hooves day when you factor in these two quotes . . .

#27 · 58w, 2h ago · · ·

>>2738833 The first scene you quoted is the night before Hearts and Hooves Day, when Sweetie Belle is working on her card and Rarity is making a dress. The next two scenes, the school day when Cheerilee gets the cards, and the evening of Rarity and Cheerilee's dinner and Sweetie Belle telling Dinky and Scootaloo about her problem, take place on Hearts and Hooves Day itself. When Dinky asks Ditzy for help, it's the morning after that, and the rest of the action takes place on that day.

Having said that, it wouldn't surprise me if there are any continuity problems, since the two stories were written simultaneously and independently, so thank you for paying attention!

#28 · 57w, 6d ago · · ·

>>2739929 Thanks, that actually makes a lot of sense!!! It would be cool if InsertAuthorHere added a line about Trixie's "crush" on Luna . . . Is Trixie just misinterpreting her understanding of wanting a parental kind of love for a romantic kind of love??? The things she wants just sound like recognition and filling the void of not actually having parents, even though she had her aunt and uncle it probably felt like Luna was a sort of mother to her. Or am I missing the point and Trixie does have feelings for Luna???

#29 · 57w, 5d ago · · ·

>>2741576 It is mostly Trixie misinterpreting her feelings for Luna, just as Sweetie Belle's crush on Cheerilee isn't really a romantic thing, it's her misinterpreting her admiration and respect for her teacher and saviour. As I discussed in >>2125110 this comment, Trixie may be an adult, but she's not very emotionally mature (rather like the mane cast in canon), and in particular is very awkward when it comes to thinking about romance. She has a very deep respect and reverence for Luna, and wants to make her proud of her. There is a certain kind of parental relationship going on there, although, as you say, Trixie still has plenty of actual family. Basically, Trixie is young and easily confused with her emotions, but ultimately, their relationship is that of student and mentor.

#30 · 57w, 4h ago · · ·

Aaaand you killed me. With laughter!:rainbowlaugh: Sweet :trollestia: that last part really hurt!

#31 · 56w, 5d ago · · ·

I had a lot of fun with this story. It's various elements of misunderstanding came together really well, and it gave me a good laugh. Nice, funny little short story.

#32 · 55w, 16h ago · · ·

>>2750054 just from the cover I know I'm gonna laugh my ass off!

#33 · 49w, 1d ago · · ·

Those last paraghaps .............. i almost choked myself to death by laughing XD

Just one thing and i hope someone can clar this to me

Did trixxio go to luna´s school in the lunaverse?, because there are some histies that say she was home (castle?) schooled by luna

#34 · 49w, 1d ago · · ·

>>3070260 I think Trixie was Luna's apprentice, but didn't actually go to her school. Trixie isn't very good at the academic side of magic, which is what sets her apart from ponies like Lyra and Twilight, who both attended the school.

#35 · 48w, 1d ago · · ·

>>3070260

No, Trixie didn't actually attend the academy; she was instead apprenticed to Luna.

TDR
#36 · 45w, 5d ago · · ·

Oh this is horrible and by that I mean horribly funny. But I think its cause I like seeing trixie freak out.

#37 · 44w, 3d ago · 1 · ·

Oh god, the crack, the romance, the misunderstandings!

Makes me wish for more shippy fics featuring awkward situations. Much like RDD's In the Heat of the Moment fic. God I loved that fic so hard. Because I'm a sucker for sappy romances and honest feelings.

#38 · 28w, 4d ago · · ·

Looking at the stuff before I read it I was reminded of The Belle Tolls for Love. This turned out to be a more legal, family friendly fic. Very cute and I liked it.

#39 · 25w, 3d ago · · ·

LOL! I loved this, I'm not usually one for Valentine's Day fics, but this was pretty funny, I love how Ditzy misinterpreted the "I have a friend" thing for it being someone else when it really is someoneelse for once!

#40 · 10w, 4d ago · · ·

>>3762607

I thought of the same fic, although this one is infinitely better.  FimFiction authors should have their serious foalcon ship privileges revoked. :facehoof:

I enjoyed this one, though. Both cute and funny. +1 thumb

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