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One night in Canterlot, a filly Twilight Sparkle gets kidnapped and her family needs to save her.

Or do they?

Special Thanks to asylum1388 and GeodesicDragon for proof reading.

Based on a certain Pixar Movie Scene.

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Comments ( 140 )

Loved it. I am pleased to have been a part of this.

Also, that cover image... HHHHHHHHNNNNNNNNNNGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGHHHHHHH!

Reminds me of the end of The Incredibles.

LOVELY STORY!

And I like the cute cover image :twilightsheepish:

Wat the fak.
Good story, but wat. :pinkiecrazy:

2111929 Exactly!

So...much...CUTE!!!!!!

BEHOLD, DESTROYER OF WORLDS!

...

Dawwwwwww, it's she precious?

2111929 Glad to see I'm not the only one who thought of that. :rainbowlaugh:

D'aaaaaaw. :twilightsmile: :heart:

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I was thinking that. :trollestia:

I love this story! If you'll excuse me, I must tape the HOME key and read it all over again!

It seems I've been beaten to it, but that was incredible.

Hmmm, maybe I’ll use this little Rugrat as a ramson.

I'm not sure what use he would have for a ram's son, especially when he kidnapped a filly...:trollestia:

Twilight didn’t answer. Instead her horn began to glow more intensely and suddenly the Pegasus found his forelegs spread apart in front of him, both of them stuck in purple magical auras. As he fought to regain control of them, his right hoof was pulled away from him. Twilight continued to control it by turning the hoof so it was pointing straight at his face. He stared at it.

“What the…”

‘SMACK’

The Pegasus cried in pain as he was punched in the face by his own hoof. It then recoiled, backing away from his face before striking him again. The Pegasus desperately tried to regain control of it, but to no avail.

Twilight just stared at him, her forelegs crossed and a small wicked smile spread across her face as she continued to beat up her captor with his own hoof.

“NO!” -Smack- “Ack! What’s happe…?” -Smack- “How is thi...” -Smack- “GAH!”

Why are you hitting yourself? Why are you hitting yourself?

Excellent stuff. Baby Twilight is epic.

Ah, the Ransom of Red Chief, done in purple :)

Too frikkin adorable!
I wonder if Celestia heard about this when Twilight was enrolled in her school?

Good lord, a funny mental image:

The pegasus thief can no longer operate in Canterlot, so he flees to Ponyville. As he begins to settle in, but before he begins theiving, he decides to get a book to pass the time.
At the Library...
:twilightsmile:Hi, I'm Twilight Sparkle. Can I help you?
The pegasus: *recognizes Twilight* AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHH!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Away demon child! Away! *flees as fast as he can*
:twilightoops: ...what was that all about?

That was hilarious and extremely entertaining. Props to you, good sir/madam. :eeyup:

Such a amazing story, I wish you luck when ,or if you make another. :twilightsmile:

P.S. Be afraid.....very afraid of Foal Twilight. :twilightoops:

“Hmmm, maybe I’ll use this little Rugrat as a ramson.

Ransom?

Okay, that was worth a read. Quite a few grammar, capitalization, and tense errors but overall pretty well done. Going into this I was expecting more of a Denis the Menace scenario than an Incredibles, but I like how it turned out.

Little did the Pegasus know that Twilight was just getting warmed up.

:facehoof:
Anyway, as others stated, this reminds me very much of The Incredibles. I can't believe the film was from 9 years ago. Gosh, I feel old:applecry:.

2112674 unless.......your colt dusk shine[youtube=m.youtube.com/watch?v=a1y735PHKxw]

Congrats on getting on the front page!:pinkiehappy:

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As corny as that was, I just had to do it. :twilightsmile:

2112756 That mightive been good if your Linked worked for me. :pinkiesad2: Sorry.

It was fun, but felt kinda hollow. Why did the Pegasus want to foalnap Twilight?

Why did this remind me of the end of the Incredibles?

The little filly to viciously punched

Doesn't sound quite right. Other than that, an excellent story! :twilightsmile:

2112829its okay I know it doesn't work I wrote the link out on paper and tried but I'm on a tablet so no copy and paste oh BTW it was dramatic squirell

I swear some of this was inspired by the Incredibles..



but this is amazing. :twilightsmile:

I know everyone has already mentioned The Incredibles, but yeah, that was my impression, too. Even the set-up, with the parents worried that their baby should have been showing some 'powers' already, was pretty much a direct lift. Also it could use some editing. Maybe change it up a little more?

Refrence to The Incredibles? :rainbowhuh:

I find it hard to believe this fic could have been inspired by anything other than The Incredibles, but

2112732

It was nine years ago? Holy...life moves fast.

Great story, I give this :moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache:

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looking right into those of his brother.

I think you mean her brother

However did not anticipate the speed of the Pegasus

should be However, he did not anticipate the speed of the pegasus

Besides that, this was a freakin ADORABLE! Reading the premise did remind me of The Incredibles. But hey, there's nothing new under the sun, and if a story is gonna remind of you something else, at least that something else is an awesome movie. Baby Twilight is super cute! :twilightsmile: MUSTACHES! :moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache:

2113105 I was surprised too when I saw it was made in 2004. I honestly thought it was 2009 at first.

:rainbowlaugh: I KNEW it reminded me of some movie/ pixar short
(didn't read ALL of description :derpytongue2: )
Gahh, JackJack was such a funny baby :twilightsmile:
kicks butt too :rainbowhuh: :pinkiehappy:

YOU GO TWILIGHT!!

Baby twilight is the best filly.:twilightsmile::twilightsmile::twilightsmile:

oh twilight just wait till you ascend into god hood

thats right baby Twilight:pinkiecrazy:, teach that sack of unprocessed dog food what happens when you mess the best:pinkiecrazy::pinkiecrazy::pinkiecrazy::pinkiecrazy::pinkiecrazy::pinkiecrazy:

Time for my chapterly grammar report:

“Shining no!”

403: Comma not found.

this little Rugrat as a ramson.

You got the "N" and "M" backwards. It's "ransom."

“Ack! What’s happe…?” -Smack- “How is thi...”

Instead of an ellipsis (...) I'd put a hyphen (-) instead.

"There... I got you, Little sis,"

Does "little" really need to be capitalized? I don't think so, but hey, it's your story.

and of 'course' Twilight’s crib

Why the quotes on "course?" I don't understand it.

This was a good read. That took up a good 10-20 minutes. Wonderfully written. You have earned yourself a favorite.

That thieving pony is the kind of pony you want to hurt in the worst way. Rip off his wings and then toss him off the highest point you can find. Or just clip his wings and toss him into the deepest dungeon you can find, either is fine.

Did..... Did you just reference the Incredibles? Really?

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Thanks for the feedback! I appreciate criticism! :pinkiehappy:

Twilight stopped crying and looked up at the Pegasus, her purple eyes looking into those of her chapter.

Dang, baby twilight must have learned some tricks from pinkie pie if she can break the fourth wall like that (should be captor).

She then repositioned the way it had been when she had been feeding just a few seconds earlier and proceeded to feed herself, her eyes closing as the taste of warm milk once again reached her lips.

This just seems really awkward to me, mostly because you use "had been" and "feed/feeding" too much.

Otherwise, decently written one shot, but the fight scene at the end with twilight could have been shorter and still gotten the point across.

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Thanks for the criticism! Actually I don't know if I would call Pinkie Pie the queen of 4th wall breaking anymore considering that Twilight has done it as well.
:twilightblush:

P.S- That is the funniest username and profile picture I've seen on Fimfiction! :rainbowlaugh:

A white Pegasus with a sleek black mane was standing before him.

Ugh, I'm getting really sick of all these imposters running around Canterlot at night... *gets address book* Okay, Sparkle, Sparkle... Ah, here it is. Okay *pulls knife* Let's show this guy what happens when you impersonate a serial killer :pinkiecrazy:

"“WAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!”

Suddenly, Twilight’s horn lit up and the purple filly bursted into a raging ball of flames. Her body glowed a bright white and her eyes become red and demonic. The sudden change caught the Pegasus completely by surprise.

“AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!”"

Skipped every single comment, so I'm sure someone brought up The Incredibles, right?

"Little did the Pegasus know that Twilight was just getting warmed up." I SEE WAT U DID THAR!

"away from the it, a blue" from the it? more like "from it"

*reaches end*
Le summary: Too much epic in one area. I've contacted the FBI, and they're coming over to arrest you for having dangerously high amounts of concentrated awesomeness in one place without a license.

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