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JohnPerry

Joined October 2011
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For lack of a creative handle.

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If necessity is the mother of all invention, then assumption is the mother of all screw-ups. And there's no worse time to be making assumptions than when you're traveling - especially when what should have been a simple overnight ride turns into a three day trip from hell.

First Published
26th Jan 2012
Last Modified
14th Mar 2012

Comments ( 253 )

#1 · Chapter 1 · 131w, 2d ago · · ·

Amazing! I'll be looking forward for updates. Tracking.

#2 · Chapter 1 · 131w, 2d ago · · ·

Great start! I wish the others were along for the ride, but I'm anxious to see where this goes!

#3 · Chapter 1 · 131w, 2d ago · · ·

an absolute follow, cannot wait for more!

#4 · Chapter 1 · 131w, 2d ago · · ·

Heh. I always get a chuckle out of all the different ponified names that others come up with when dealing with famous real-world landmarks. Crazy how different authors can think up such different and unique titles.

The Dodgers played in Bronclyn?:rainbowhuh:

Sorry. Couldn't resist.:facehoof:

Anyway, this looks like it's going to be a wild ride and I'm looking forward to seeing how it goes from here. I just knew that they'd regret getting into that train car.

Till then!

#5 · Chapter 1 · 131w, 2d ago · · ·

Is Coltbert pronounced Coltber, or Colber?

Also, great writing! Keeping an eye on this one.

#6 · Chapter 1 · 131w, 1d ago · · ·

I can't wait to see where you go with this!:pinkiehappy:

#7 · Chapter 1 · 131w, 8h ago · · ·

Gonna end up in Dodge Junction or Appleoosa if they're lucky. :facehoof:

Somehow, I doubt they're gonna be lucky :twilightoops:

#8 · Chapter 1 · 131w, 8h ago · · ·

I'd definitely track this.

And, oh wow, all these ponified names, these buildings, the pony culture is amazing. Can't wait to read more!:twilightsmile:

#9 · Chapter 1 · 131w, 7h ago · · ·

Is this story in style of the movie "Planes, Trains and Automobiles" that John Candy and Steve Martin starred in? The description sounds like it. I haven't read it yet.

#10 · Chapter 1 · 131w, 7h ago · · ·

Hopefully it'll be as heartwarming as the movie

#11 · Chapter 1 · 131w, 7h ago · · ·

Alright, Just finished the chapter, Sounds like good start. I'm tracking it.

#12 · Chapter 1 · 131w, 6h ago · · ·

Great setup. Can't wait for the fallout.

Found only 1 error: ""Her eyes shown brightly"" --- "shown" should be "shone"

#13 · Chapter 1 · 131w, 6h ago · · ·

Thank you all for the fantastic response!

>>165393 This story is indeed inspired by Planes, Trains and Automobiles - granted, the plot is only loosely based on the movie, but there will be references to it in the chapters to come...

>>165512 Bah! Knew I'd screw up somewhere...Thanks for catching my mistake!

#14 · Chapter 1 · 131w, 6h ago · · ·

>>165530

Glad to help.:twilightsheepish:

#15 · Chapter 1 · 131w, 6h ago · · ·

Spike is in for so much trouble when they get back...  :moustache:

#16 · Chapter 1 · 131w, 4h ago · · ·

I thought I was the first person to come up with the idea for a story revolving on Equestrian infrastructure.

This is still a good story, and I can't wait for more!

#17 · Chapter 1 · 130w, 6d ago · · ·

I really enjoyed the first chapter. Keep it up. The characterization is great and the situation is fun.

#18 · Chapter 1 · 130w, 6d ago · · ·

... That conductor should be fired for incompetence. Find myself hoping it doesn't cause too many problems.

Five stars and tracking, not much else to say.

#19 · Chapter 1 · 130w, 6d ago · · ·

Oh boy, I had a bad feeling when the last car was totally unoccupied . . . I am completely thrilled to see my fears justified.  What wild hijinks will ensue??  As always, you are a master of comedy!  :ajbemused:  :rainbowderp:  :facehoof:

Also many wonderful Manehattan pony puns!  Yeeeees.  :rainbowkiss:

#20 · Chapter 1 · 130w, 6d ago · · ·

As soon as I saw the title, I had to read it. Planes, Trains & Automobiles was a fantastic movie...this looks like a fantastic pony-fied version.:pinkiehappy:

#21 · Chapter 2 · 130w, 1d ago · · ·

For the carriages part, they need to be in a ponified version of Buffalo NY's highway section. That is where they shot it in real life and I would love to have my home ponified

#22 · Chapter 2 · 130w, 1d ago · · ·

>>181207 *coughs* Funny that you mention Buffalo... but it'll have to wait for the next chapter. :trollestia:

#23 · Chapter 2 · 130w, 1d ago · · ·

>>181270 The ones we know or a different tribe? Personally hope we get to see lil' Strongheart again.

But it matters not. I feel sorry for these three and am curious to see what ya do with it from here. Good work mate.

#24 · Chapter 2 · 130w, 1d ago · · ·

Poor Twilight, her spells always seem to buck up in these fanfictions.

#25 · Chapter 2 · 130w, 1d ago · · ·

Poor Twilight. She can recreate an entire dam during the middle of a flood but can't seem to harness the power of wood. Good for nothin' magic! Always failing when it really matters! Or when it's the funniest...

Still a funny read. I'm seeing a breakdown of our titular trio well before the end. Can't wait to see it!

#26 · Chapter 2 · 130w, 22h ago · · ·

>Applecon

>No Steve Jobs jokes

:ajbemused:

#27 · Chapter 2 · 130w, 18h ago · · ·

Superb! MOAR!!!

#28 · Chapter 2 · 130w, 16h ago · · ·

Ah, another one who also likes "It's Always Sunny in Fillydelphia". Did you also read the sequel, "Semper Fidelis", it´s amazing.

#29 · Chapter 2 · 130w, 14h ago · · ·

>>182691 I think the Sonic Screwdriver principle of ineffectual on wood could be in play here... :rainbowlaugh:

>>183437 In retrospect, it does seem like a missed opportunity. :twilightblush: But Apple jokes are a dime a dozen, and seeing as I stole Applecon from another fic in the first place...

>>183735 I did read the sequel, though frankly I wasn't that crazy about it. Not that there was anything wrong with it, it was just such a huge chance of pace and feel from the original that it caught me off guard. But that's just me.

#30 · Chapter 2 · 130w, 13h ago · · ·

hehe, "well fit" is British slang for "very attractive," and I'm not sure it was ever western dialogue for "athletic" or "fit" as we Americans might say. Might want to reconsider that one! Otherwise, fantastic work, JP! :twilightsmile:

#31 · Chapter 2 · 130w, 13h ago · · ·

>>183897 Fair enough. Though now it's tempting to keep it for the double meaning. :rainbowlaugh: Nah, I'll change it. Thanks for catching that!

#32 · Chapter 2 · 130w, 10h ago · · ·

Good chapter. Things are just goin' downhill from here. :facehoof:

#33 · Chapter 2 · 130w, 5h ago · · ·

Whenever I read/watch these stories, I really just want them to make it to Fillydelphia in one day, take a train to Manehatten, and have time to spare.

That, however, will never happen. :fluttershyouch:

UNLESS! You make an alternate ending where they just make it to Fillydelphia fine, for readers like me. :pinkiesmile:

#34 · Chapter 2 · 129w, 6d ago · · ·

Twilight, Twilight , Twilight... you silly filly.  You should know better than to try using magic in a fanfic!  It ALWAYS ends badly!  :twilightsheepish:

#35 · Chapter 1 · 129w, 5d ago · · ·

lol, one of my teachers at uni had a similar set up. Although when his train car was unlatched no other train attached. He ended up walking back along the tracks in Hungry for a few hours to get back to the station. Can't wait to see where you're taking us on this...naaaaaah too easy!

#36 · Chapter 2 · 129w, 5d ago · · ·

I can just see Twilight twitching slightly at all that effort going to waste. Ah the joy of shoddy workman ship, and not another caravan in sight!

#37 · Chapter 2 · 129w, 4d ago · · ·

>>182691

Well it's a well-known fact* that wood is usually resistant to magic in stories like this. Twilight really should have known better.

*This is not actually a fact.

#38 · Chapter 3 · 129w, 1d ago · · ·

GRAY HOUND LINES - Copy right! Copy right!

Not a whole lot going wrong here this time (though I'm sure Twilight would object) but things are moving along.

Speaking of Twilight, I think she should take a breather on using anymore magic. But then again, what would the fun in that be if things don't go wrong?

Keep at it!

#39 · Chapter 3 · 129w, 1d ago · · ·

Nice chapter. I love these tiny descriptions, like this reptile from the beginning :)

Keep it up!:applejackunsure:  

#40 · Chapter 3 · 129w, 1d ago · · ·

Please tell me Candy Ring sells shower rings filled with heluim :pinkiehappy:

Another great chapter, too. Two thumbs up and a cookie.

#41 · Chapter 3 · 129w, 1d ago · · ·

Every bad bus ride ever. Right here. By the time these three make it to the WonderCon they are going to need some serious help!

#42 · Chapter 3 · 129w, 1d ago · · ·

>>203118

I would hope he sells candy rings filled with helium so you get a squeaky voice after a snack.

I wonder how much of the trip he'll be along for.

#43 · Chapter 3 · 129w, 1d ago · · ·

Thanks for the comments, everyone! :pinkiehappy:

>>203221 Just this part, I'm afraid. As tempting as it was to keep him along for more of the journey, I felt like this was the only part where his presence really added anything to the story.

#44 · Chapter 3 · 129w, 1d ago · · ·

>>203254

Alright then. Was a good cameo.

#45 · Chapter 3 · 129w, 1d ago · · ·

Twilight::twilightangry2:

#46 · Chapter 3 · 129w, 1d ago · 1 · ·

When you said Rainbow rested her head on AJ's shoulder, I was like D'awwww :ajsmug:

Then she drooled :rainbowderp:

And I was like :ajbemused:

#47 · Chapter 3 · 129w, 1d ago · 1 · ·

>>203344

*pulls out clipboard*

'AppleDash tease'...check. :trollestia:

#48 · Chapter 3 · 129w, 1d ago · · ·

Just a tease?? :fluttercry:

Well, I suppose that's better than nothing! :pinkiehappy:

Erm, anyway, concerning the story:

I freaking LOVE this!! It's fantastically well written, descriptive, hilarious, and manages to keep the characters in, well, character! Something many stories lately have had trouble with. As with Bellum, I did indeed "D'aw", but  not once, several times, most of which include the journey inside the bus. Though those were also accompanied by "Ew's". Candy Ring represents that "neigh" (LOOOLOLGEDDIT)bor we all know and love. Well, more accurately DESPISE WITH THE UTMOST HATRED FROM THE BOTTOMLESS PIT OF OUR HEARTS. :pinkiecrazy:

...*Ahem*...

Sorry. :twilightblush: Oh, and sorry for this ridiculously long comment. :twilightblush: And for not writing more about your story. :twilightblush: And for using so many emoticons. :twilightblush: DARNNIT. SORRY FOR WRITING SO MUCH. :twilightblush: AHHHHHHHHHH.

DANG. MUST STAY FOCUSED.

Okaaaayyyyyy....anyways, point is, I adore this story with all my heart. It's unique! And brilliant as a Sonic Rainboom. Well, I suppose a Rainboom is more colorful than brilliant, literally anyways...Oops! Off topic once again!:twilightblush:

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I need to stop typing now.

#49 · Chapter 3 · 129w, 1d ago · · ·

I'm getting stressed out by the story. That must mean that it is a good one. :twilightsmile: Continue good sir!

#50 · Chapter 1 · 129w, 1d ago · · ·

DAWN OF THE FIRST DAY

-- 72 Hours Remain --

:pinkiehappy:

But seriously, this is cool so far.

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