Thank you! Thank you all! No need for applause.

This was both edited by Silver Cloud and written as a request from Silver Cloud. Yay Silver Cloud!

Pretend I didn't edit this chapter though, because I didn't. Not really. I just skimmed over it...

~SC

Before I read, I'd like to know...

Is this clop?

>>802347802347 since the tag isn't mature, no it isn't clop

(MY...Goodness!, A Most Dazzling Story good sir! Plz Thy out Write At least! 8 to 50 chapter's!)

(I CANT WAIT till the rest come out And plz dont rush sorry for my out burst sir! *Squee*)

Ps.at the End i thought sorry just my imagination,That she would be thinking about the beat she has heard befor! :P lol

Awesome. This is definitely a new take on OctaxScratch. Well done sir, I'm tracking this story.

I can't help but think that Octy got a job as a dancer to get through Uni.

This is going to be splendid.

>>802349802349

(*Who know's it might turn in to a clop *wink,wink,nudge,wink*) :P

>>802347802347 Teen rated clop... Methinks no.

Tracking this

Um... wow. This was surprisingly good. Tracked with fiery passion!

I see much potential here with my favorite DJ and her friend.

One tiny thing: it's 'alley mules', not 'ally mules'.

Interesting take on Octavia, I like it.

I'll admit, I didn't think you were ever actually going to write this, but I'm glad you have. I'll be watching this with great interest, and I know you'll make it awesome.

I'll do chapter reviews when things start happening, although I don't know how long you plan on making this.

Oh, and Teddy, step your game the hell up mah boi. This is an Octascratch – pretty much my all-time favourite ship. The grammar better be spot on next chapter, and no inconsistencies either pls.

Hmm, this is pretty good. a few missing words here and there, but still good.

Will be waiting to see how this goes.

Hmmm, this is good. I like the fact that you took a different approach from the standard OctaScratch stories. Watching with increasing interest.

>>802624802624

Maybe I should step up my writing...

>>802181802181

*I* edited this?

Nope, doesn't ring any bells

>>802624802624

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I will impress you one of these days!

"Meagre background existence"

Very drôle, my good man.

Hmm this story has piked my interest. Such in-depth tought. FAVE IT!

>>802407802407

That is actually an awesome idea. Hell I might even go with that in this story, although she didn't get hired for that originally.

This is... Amazing. Congratulations are in order. Good job, fine sir.

Seems like a quite interesting premise. Not sure what exactly she'd do at the club, but will likely be rather "fitting", Equestria wise :P

Hmm, I've never read an Octavia with that level of rebellious streak before, though her having overbearing parents might as well be canon at this point. Very nicely done, and I look forward to seeing how you develop her and Vinyl's characters.

I'm writing a fic about these two as well!! (It's a human story too just so you know.) I only have 2/5 chapters done, but give them a read sometime?

Now disregarding that, I wasn't expecting such a great story! I mean this is almost exactly how I depicted a romance between these two would start out! great work! you got a like from me!

Just started reading and already it has got more potential than the ass-hole of a person that just ate his own body weight in Mexican food. Will be tracking

By the way, nice take on Octavia :3

Psst! "It was well past midnight" is the correct form. "Passed" is a verb. You're looking for the adjective indicating that time has elapsed since a particular moment.

When Octavia's father said, "…don't expect to be welcomed home until you've learned some respect," All I could think of was Octavia shouting back, "I have respect. Self-respect. No self-respecting mare would allow her father to dictate the way she lives her life, and it is out of respect for myself that I am leaving." But perhaps that would be for another chapter, maybe as the armor-piercing statement that breaks her father's insistence upon controlling her life.

and then it would be all like

Octavia earned the power of self-respect!

LEVEL UP!

Guts +5

Heart +6

Smarts +7

Moxie +8

>>832359832359

I know.

If you spot a typo, it's likely there as a simple mistake and not due to ignorance.

That's a good line, I wish I had thought of it.

>>832706832706 I don't write stories myself, but every now and then something pops into my head that just seams so perfect I feel I should share it in hopes that the author might like it enough to take it and play around with it; I certainly have no use for it on my own. Thinking about it, though, it wouldn't fit in the first chapter. Such a line would be more appropriate once Octavia has gone under more extensive character development, a point where she feels she can better stand her ground against her father. He would probably make some sort of remark about her coming crawling back or something before mentioning the "terms" of his invitation to return.

That and Octavia discovering Jura whiskey for the first time. I don't recall anyone who has actually done anything describing how she developed a taste for it; it's always just sort of been a preference of hers. Your premise here is one of the few situations I can think of that would be more than just an arbitrary reason for her to try drinking for the first time; having her start out a few days south of proper isn't very common. Although, I suppose you would actually have to have a bit of experience with drinking if you were going to write about it.

I can only imagine what her first time getting smashed would be like…so long as it doesn't get her into too much trouble.

Sorry this took so long. I hope to update faster in the future.

Thanks to Agarwaen for inspiring the dancing idea, I hope you all like the direction this is taking.

And remember, comments fuel my progress.

My bad for how long it took. Sorry.

But hey, I'm back to editing, so there's that.

~SC

I have to say I have never seen Octavia/Scratch in this situation before.  I sense the factor will be high in this story.

oh noes please tell me that raindrop isnt going to be strong arm octy and make her give up some of her bits... probably not but more then likely she is going to be telling her in no uncertain words that she better not get any funny ideas with vinyl. oh and congrats on the feature box

>>802347802347

are you wondering what clop/shipping is?

this would be considered shipping, pairing ponies

clop is... have somepony else explain that to you I despise both

I think octy's dad will go to this bar and see that she's dancing with another mare on stage

That last sentence does not bode well with me... Something about it just doesn't seem like any good could come out of that....

I look forward to more. As it seems so far, both Octavia, and Vinyl haven't become major players in the music world. I'm hoping they will at least by the end of this fiction, which is amazing. This is a new spin on this shipping that I've never seen before, and I must say I quite enjoy it.

..

I love this Octavia! She isn't snooty like most versions of her are, she feels more relatable.

>>919564919564

Thank you, that's really what I was going for. I love Octavia and think she's absolutely adorable. I hate what our fandom does to her though. Allegrezza pulled of the snooty Octy well, but most people make her seem like a straight up bitch.

>>919496919496

Well hopefully you won't be disappointed then. I'm actually working on composing a song that I'll share with you all later, meant to be a song they make together in the fic.

Here, in the Midlands of England, it is 4am. I'm supposed to be tired as fuck right now but reading this story has now just gave me fuel to take it to 5 or 6am. Seriously though, this take on Octy and Vinal is awesome. Looking foward to the next update.

>>919607919607 Nothing I've read till the end disappointed me (Much less an ImJustAnotherBrony fic). If I am disappointed in something I make my voice known and give reasons why. You have zero idea how excited I am to hear I get a new Octavia x Vinyl song.

>>919597919597

"Two's Company, Three's a Crowd" also straddled the line between snoot and snark well, with dashes of lovey-dovey and silly. Actually, I can't really think of a "bitchy" Octavia story. maybe I just avoid them well.

>>855067855067

Comments fuel your progress?

THIS IS A COMMENT.

>>832359832359

This is SO late, but...Kingdom of Loathing reference?

@ImJustAnotherBrony: very nice start to the story so far, though I do have one question about chapter one.

Initially, she said her cello was awful, but then a bit later she lamented not having it with her.  Is this just some sort of love/hate relationship? Or an accidental contradiction.

THIS IS GOOD! I LIKE IT!

ANOTHER!

>>919710919710

It's more of a psychological thing. When Octavia seemed to resent her cello, it's because she was relating it to her current situation directly. When she missed it, it's because she felt unsure of herself, and her cello is where her confidence is. It was meant to symbolize her uncertainties towards her leaving everything she knew behind.

>>919750919750

Ah, Alright, that makes sense.  Anyway, always a fan of OctaScratch, and both mares in general.  You pull them off quite well, while adding your own personal flair in their personalities.

I have to admit, i was a little worried before reading, because I generally enjoy Octavia's usual personality (I don't usually see many fics where she's too snooty, more than anything a little uptight).  My fears were unfounded though, as I'm still really enjoying this, even if it's not how she's normally portrayed.  I haven't noticed much difference in Vinyl apart from her not already being famous on the DJ scene, but that may be just me.  Either way, keep up the great work.

That pegasus...

Loving the fresh take on Tavi and Vinyl. It's nice to see them doing something different than getting into arguments over which music is better at their first meeting. Looking forward to the next chapter

>>919791919791 No it's not Fluttershy (although Fluttershy going to clubs and hitting on fillies would be pretty awesome) it's actually Raindrops

>>855067855067 Eeyup... I know that feeling...

Keep on keeping on man.

Great story, I really enjoyed it! Can't wait for more.

It always feels weird to review anything I've edited, since I usually review it with anyway as part of the editing process, but meh. Have another.

First off, I love the fact that Vinyl isn't a big name DJ already at the beginning of this. So many stories (including the one I was writing) start with the pair of them being at the top of their game and massively popular. It's nice to see you going down a different route, and I think Vinyl would make an awesome waitress.

I think Vinyl's "uncertain" scene could have been played out a bit more, since it didn't really seem to come into play again after the initial bit. Then again, I would assume that you'll bring it up again in a later chapter somehow.

The Raindrops intrigue looks promising – dat cliffhanger ending. I'd be surprised if you portrayed her in a negative light though, so we'll have to see where this goes. I don't expect her to be the villain of the piece, but you never know. I kind of have a feeling about what might happen with her, but there's zero evidence for it at the moment, so I'll keep it to myself for now.

The dancing was a nice addition, and really I can't imagine where you planned to take it before that. While not as sensual as PLaP, it was still good, and left plenty of room for development later.

I will say though, that I felt the actual music was a little underplayed (no pun intended) when they were out on the dancefloor. Occasionally it was almost as if it were completely silent and it was just the two of them out there, and not in the "spotlight on them" kind of way. I'm not sure why exactly I felt that, it just seemed a bit... empty of the club atmosphere at times.

I'm also really liking Octavia's characterisation. I wouldn't say she's normally snooty, but to see her as a much more childish, and perhaps innocent, mare is fun. She's relatable, which is always a plus. She could do all sorts of things that her "standard" portrayal couldn't. Also, not being a virtuoso, world-famous cellist is nice for a change. Most stories usually involve her going off for rehearsals with her ensemble, so for being different.

Aw man, this story has so much potential – I can see so many different possible routes you might take it down, and I'm really looking forward to seeing what you actually do with it. I'm sure you'll defy everything I've imagined though, so I'll just keep remembering the first rule of flying.

Oh, and as slow/unprofessional/whatever else I am, it's nice to be back editing for you. It's not a particularly exciting process, but I enjoy the overall experience of working with you and your stories. Plus, this is the one I requested, so all the better.

I still feel like fainting after she let a custom made cello drop nonchalantly on the floor. Those things are REALLY expensive.

Image: http://i.imgur.com/4cKuU.jpg

That is all

>>919710919710 What, the "Power of Self-Respect" bit? Scott Pilgrim.

Image: http://25.media.tumblr.com/tumblr_m74nkvAt7C1r4mi49o1_500.png

Saw that ^ and was reminded of this for some reason...

Well, if Tavi is the one wanting to... Then Vinyl... I'm guessing is going to be more 'common', but wants to be more sophisticated. Dis... Gun b gewd.

... Yes, Yes as a matter of fact, I DO mind! You're just jelly of Tavi and Scratch, so shut your trap and dance harder!

This is very good. I'll be sure to keep track of this story.  keep it up!

>>923253923253

Raindrops is best background pegasus.

"Hey there newbie. Doing well? I just wanted to talk to you about a few things, if you don't mind."

My spider sense is tingling...

I like this, it is an interesting take on these characters, and I am looking forwards to seeing where it goes in the future.

>>855067855067 *Epic Fist Pump*

I think you've definitely taken the idea in a great direction. You've also done well with the dynamic between Vinyl and Tavi that I've come to expect in this pairing. Though it does seem to me that Vinyl is really quick to go from relentless to resentful about her troll-y nature. The moment when Vinyl told Breezy that Ocavongo wanted to be a dancer gave me so many feels. Feels of fear, feels of anger, feels of comic relief. So many FEELS!

I'm in agreeance with the others here that say that they like the setting being before either Vinyl or Octy have had their "big break." I also like Tavia's penchant to revert to arrogance when confronted but to generally be a normal pony otherwise. I really hope that Raindrops isn't too hurt when the shipping begins, and I also really hope that their first kiss is on stage. That'd be one hell of a shock to Raindrops, create some nice tension, and earn them TONNES of bits.

As always with IJAB and SC paired, If there are any grammatical errors after the editing, then I'm too engrossed in the story to see them anyway. Well done, you two.

just read it and like it very much!

>>926042926042  Haha, oh you. I love your comments. What's important here is that I'm glad to see you're enjoying my fic. I'm glad to be working with SC again as well, things seem to go so much smoother than when I write on my own. Slower, but definitely smoother.

Next chapter is finally done. Lot's of stuff happening all at once. Be sure to comment and let me know what you think. Also, here's Vinyl's song created by Silver Cloud. Enjoy! Vinyl's Paradise

Hullo. Drama lol.

~SC

Awesomerz

....well fuck.

vinyl is gone get smashed, beaten, and probably raped.....god damnit!

>>10288101028810

lol

>>10288231028823.....I wasnt trying to be funny......pft....heheh okay I was...I cant keep a straight face at all

Bwahahaha! Oh Tavi's naivety in this is seriously entertaining, I like really like this angle (it's different from the somewhat overplayed worldly & confident snob version of her)

Also drama with Raindrops and that landlord is creating great tension in the story! (argh that cliffhanger!)

So basically just keep doing what you're doing

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>>10288411028841

Haha, well thanks, and I'm glad to hear you're enjoying the story so far.

Noise complaints! Noise complaints everywhere!

This was freaking awesome. This is so original I'ma have to go hipster when others start doing stuff like this.

Also, send SilverCloud my regards. That song is baws.

:D awsome so far better because u sayed a blue haired pony >:)

faved, tracked, i HAVE to see how this turns out :D

This is definatly different... AND I LIKE IT! octavia hates the cello, likes dubstep, revolts against authority, i love this so much, octavia was always my favorite pony, and this just made her better!

o no wat happens now i hope i know soon

GET YOUR ASS IN GEAR! I DEMAND 3 CHAPTERS PER DAY! GO!

Wow. I really want to read more of this.

took a while, but glad for an update. im unsure of the fic as i think it has potential and with the club and all it definitely is a different take on their love and everything. interesting to say the least. cant wait for more!

A decent re-imagining of the couple. Feels less like Allegrezza and more like Uni Days.

I smell an eviction notice in somepony's immediate future

Meh.

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Awesome story, keep up the great work! I really like your version of VS and Tavi. Very original.

Nothing profound or inspiring this time, just here to say that I loved it, and I'm glad that Smokey didn't send the boys after Scratch turned him down. Being evicted is one thing, being murdered and buried in the mountains outside of canterlot is another.

>>10314981031498

And I always appreciate it.

>>10314981031498

There's still time

>>10334021033402

Hey, I never said I was perfect, it's all you who do that. I make mistakes occasionally.

And you realise you don't have to try imagine what it sounds like, right? Read the top comment...

>>10340621034062

You can just say you don't like it you know...

I honestly don't mind – I wouldn't expect that many to actually like it

I'm guessing if Vinyl gets evicted her and Octy will be living together

Great chapter.  Can't wait for the next installment.

>>10279511027951

ROFL You erased my comments and yours I still read yours in my email though

>>10341071034107

No, I really do love it! I just don't know the fancy musical terms (especially for techno) to describe what I like about it

It's just one of those "I like it because I like it" sort of things

>>10390951039095

Lol, copy paste your comment from before.

Breezy Blue trotted across club floor...

...stood up and and noticed...

Silver didn't...

...did he?

The mood has been set too tense for the goons to just leave the two alone... I can jus' feel it...

I loved the technical, musical jargon you used I was trying to imagine what it would sound like in my mind, but just shrugged my shoulders after I realized that I didn't know what half of those things were.

I can honestly say that I did NOT see that conversation going that way with Raindrop, also That was a pleasant surprise. I can't wait to see what deeper issues lurk in Vinyl's sub-conscious as to way she reacted that way about Raindrop's love for her... Things are going to get interesting...

inb4 Vinyl x Octavia x Raindrop Ménage à Trois, and they all live happily ever after.

>>10322821032282

No spoilers, you~

>>10391051039105

I still think they're gonna Ménage à Trois If not, this story is getting unfaved/thumb-downed.

>>10391131039113

I'll kill you... I'll kill you dead.  

>>10391321039132

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"That's it little lady. You done crossed the line this time."

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great vinyl shows her friend her music and and she gets evicted because of the noise wtf

damn shit hittin the fan now