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The Changeling Hive located deep beneath the Equestrian Badlands a bustling haven for all Changelings of Equestria.
Life was good; the ponies had forgotten their existence and it would remain that way for another two hundred years.

However, just because they're safe from outside threats, it doesn't mean they're safe from themselves. These stories will follow three young Changelings as they seek out adventure and other ways to kills time.

Their names? Mandible, future captain of the Changeling Royal Guard. Cocoon, future Queen of the Northern Changeling Hive. Finally, we have Thorax, future..... well let's be honest, I don't see much of a future.



{Set Two Hundred Years before Equestria's Crazies}

Chapters (5)
Comments ( 105 )

This is a really good read! Almost as good as muffins!

Okay, I'm officially starting the 'Thorax-getting-mutiliated'-counter.

So far we have reached: Life:2 - Thorax:0

As funny as I came to expect from you. ^^

Okay Thorax
I'm going to read this
BUT YOU USED THE WRONG "THEY'RE/THEIR/THERE" IN THE DESCRIPTION

If you do this right this could easily become one of my favorite stories ever.
Of all time.
OF ALL TIME!!!

Story is good, one of the works that would work especialy well as comic.

So funny can't breath

nevermind I'm ok now

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Mr.Chippers is probably going to need a counter too.
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Muffin is best
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I FIXED IT, EVERYTHING CAN BE HAPPY NOW.
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I'll do my best :D
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I hope I can improve the quality of the chapters when I'm feeling better.

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I just realised that my comment was weird.
Did I say anything that made you think that you did a bad job? All I said was that this would wirk well as a comic.
Especially the one scene where Thorax fights a squirrel, states that he can take care of himself, when suddenly squirrells all over him.

it hit the feature box and poplur stories as well

“Storage” Chrysalis said with a forced smile “It leads to the water reservoir for the entire Hive.”

Something tells me that that explanation is eventually going to come back and bite Thorax in the flank.

When they first come out of the hive, it reminds me heavily of when you first leave the vault in fallout 3. I've also noticed some other comparisons to fallout 3, ie. war ravaged land, animals that attack, being blinded when you first leave the vault, etc... Since you happen to be doing a lets play of that game currently, do you think that gave you some inspiration for this chapter/story?

I also really like the fact that not only do you keep your usual level of humor in the story, but it actually has a plot, which i think will definitely grab the attention of more people. While random stories are usually pretty funny/entertaining, theres something about a plot/goal in stories that i absolutely love.

Cocoon quickly removed the orb from her Saddlebag and was surprised to see the upside down face of her Teacher. “Are you okay my Queen?” she asked trying to tilt her orb the proper way.
“I’m fine Cocoo- Oh Gods here we go again.” Cried Chrysalis as she began plummeted down the stairs. The three Changelings watched from the orbs perspective as their queen bounced down the stairs behind it. With a final thump the orb cut out, leaving the three Changelings to themselves.

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Two guards got owned by woodland animals.......And they were trained to be the Princess body guards :facehoof:

You're in the Featured Box with Mature on and off! :pinkiehappy:

Does anyone know where that cover art came from!

2185737 Actually my dear, that cover art come from the my little comic nº3, its almost at the start :pinkiesmile:

And but the way great fic :yay: moar :flutterrage: please :fluttercry:

2185925 Just head to your local comic shop and ask for IDW My Little Pony, Friendship is Magic.

Crysalis, falling down the stairs twice? Her royal guard, being beaten by squirrels and birds? Changelings that can't even last 10 minutes outside? Loving this fic so far, extremely promising and very good so far!

Lee

damn spy checkers

The hive life of Zack and Chris

Congratulations, you hit the feature box. please don't let it get to your head, again.

Am I the only one here getting reminded of LFG with anything involving Mr. Chippers?

This is a charming story. Not quite my favorite yet, but I'm really enjoying this.

2187511 LFG? One onf my favourite webcomics :pinkiehappy:

One more reason to actually read it and not oónly put it on my RL list :twilightsmile:

:pinkiehappy::rainbowlaugh: More of this story is needed.

words. they need fixing.

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I drowned in spelling errors and terrible grammar.

That was good laugh. Keep 'em coming!:rainbowlaugh:

You're sick and are aware of the errors so I'll just move on.
This was hilarious. I want more. Hope you feel better soon. Don't forget to go back to grammar check. Have a thumb. *head nod*

Very fews storys grab my attention that have a good description. This is one of them. good job!:pinkiehappy:

Ha they're drunk of their ass'

Oh, this is hilarious,.., I can't wait for more.
Thorax, you write some of the funniest stuff I have ever read,..,

-Ambassador of the Changelings,
Dopple Ganger

Dammit, am I really getting invested in another changeling fic? :rainbowlaugh: Oh well, I'll just chalk that up to good authoring. As stated before the start of the chapter proper, there is some editing work to do, but aside from that it's quite entertaining. I look forward to more :pinkiehappy: .

Okay, I seriously want to see this to its bitter end. Faved, upvoted, and on standby.

I am enjoying this a whole lot. I would maybe suggest going into a bit more detail, at it seems a bit rushed as of now. But other than that totally following - what happens next makes or breaks it. (easily be in my top 5 fav it it eventually made it to the canterlot wedding... ;)

Well, whatever I have just witnessed is the greatest thing ever...

I warned you about them stairs Chryssy

Stopping several times in order to gather the necessary items for their night for their night of “forgetting” in their line of work, forgetting was a very nice thing to do.

I think there's one too much "for the night" in that sentence.

Anyways. Good story, with a very interesting take on the changelings' personalities and a good sense of humor. :twilightsmile:

Kindly,
~Sinrar

Hah, Thorax. You and your buddy's bane shall be out boon!

:applejackconfused: Huh, didn't see that coming...

:ajsmug: Still, a win's a win.

:twilightsmile: Keep up the good work, but don't run yourself ragged over this.

Hahaha!

After a few minutes of hawkward silence

:rainbowlaugh:

The path they had scene the day before 

Yup

Soooo, the lesson here is when you have an enemy you can't defeat even though you're technically bigger and stronger than they are, send a predator to devour them! BRILLIANT!!!

*sends Godzilla to eat Kim Jung Un* :trollestia:

Mr. Chippers died like he lived, randomly and pointless.

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