He was a king. The mightiest unicorn to walk the earth since Starswirl the Bearded. The unicorn who defied the alicorn sisters five times and lived. He terrified an entire race into servitude, and cast fear and darkness over all of Equestria.
He is a shadow. And soon, perhaps, he's not even that.
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The title seems a bit long. But I enjoyed fic. The story itself seems short and leaves me wanting more, that's good!
2091271 The story is a bit short. Gotta pad that wordcount somehow, don'tcha know!
The length does have a purpose. A lot of people (myself included) go on about how Sombra's horn survived. One of the goals of this story is to show how that actually might not make much of a difference.
Oh, and in regards to your edit, thanks! It's nice to just write a short story like this every once and a while. Just a bunch of internal monologuing and reminiscing. It's got the comforting feel of purple prose without actually reading like a Van Gogh painting.
Poor Sombra all he ever wanted was one little empire. It's not his fault he picked the one that was the center piece of Equestria. He is to date the only villan who never threatened all of Equestria and he was the smartest one of all.
There there Sombra, it'll be o.k.
2091408 Poor Sombra. So sweet and innocent.
The horn's made out of ivory, considering it's size, thermal velocity alone shouldn't be enough to shatter it unless it landed on a slab of hard granite, steel or marble... and even there.
Just sayin'.
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Your argument is invalid.
So, just FYI to anybody who cares, the above two posts are the condensed version of a big argument I got in with Martin over physics. The trouble is, the whole thing hinged on headcanons of what horns are, how strong the blast was...
Ultimately, the point I can't dispute is that the Crystal Heart's blast does not, in this story, follow physics. I am not going to hide the whole debate, because to hide a critique is, in my opinion, bad form. I'm just gonna keep his initial critique and a joke I made. Cheers!
Haha! I was kinda hoping it would hit some unsuspecting pony.. impale them.. and then they would turn around with purple hazed glowing green eyes!
2598419 There's a great idea for a sequel!
Twilight is worried about Pinkie Pie. The earth pony's been acting odd of late--ranting about crystals and slaves, eyes glowing purple, putting poison in the baked goods. Could it have something to do with the horn impaled in her forehead, or is it just Pinkie Pie being Pinkie Pie?
>> Goblin Scribe OMG that would make a great commedy
2602000 I will have to consider writing it, I think.
I actually kinda feel bad for Sombrero now...damn
Nice story, well written, long enough to leave an unfinished taste,short enough not to enforce that feeling, definitely a good work
This was an interesting read. It jumped out to me when I saw the Seattle's Angels post, because it sounded conceptually similar to a story that I wrote called Decomposition (I had a bit of an "oh shit, don't tell me it's already been done" moment), but your story is really a different entity altogether.
They were right about it fitting a lot into a low word count, but I disagree with the notion that more is needed. It doesn't really need to fill in more of Sombra's backstory, because what you've got here really does seem to cover everything.
It makes enough allusions and references to his past that we really do get it, and understand basically what happened, even if we don't know all the juicy details of it. It says exactly what it needs to. Nothing more, nothing less. And that's a rare thing to hear from me, because I usually hate not knowing all the details.
Of course, I wouldn't be opposed to a continuation of some kind. SHStB (fuck that's a horrible acronym) works fine as a oneshot, but there is definitely a lot of potential for more stories about this version of Sombra. Considering how much you managed in only a thousand words, I'd like to see how you'd handle a lengthier story about your take on this character.
But what we've got already is still good, and I think you did a good job with it, and it was a very enjoyable read. Kudos.
Anyone who can write a convincing Sombra X Luna story will receive all of my internets.
Damn.
That was nice, terribly thought provoking. Wonderful world building on a un-often used piece of pony.
3222111 also tripple trips
3222111 3222111 3212726 Thanks, everyone!
3214275 I've been there. I was writing this big Grogar story (didn't turn out as good as I thought it'd be, but it happens) and then suddenly everyone else is writing stories about Grogar and Tartarus. Really threw me for a loop.
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I just had to look up Grogar. Reading this wiki page on him, I think I've just found the character that inspired Sombra.
3237193 I think Sombra's likely just meant as a Sauron imitation. There are some definite similarities between him and the two main G1 villains, though.
Ash brî durbatulûk, ash brî gimbatul,
ash brî thrakatulûk agh burzum-ishi krimpatul.
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3876630 "Well, this sucks."
3214485
Challenge accepted.
Except that, you know, I probably won't get around to that until season six.
3214485 does a Trilogy count. Rex Trilogy (this will link to a blog that has links all three stories)
Warning though most of the chapters are rough drafts, my editor will fix them eventually.
Warning they rated M, but don't worry they don't get dirty, however there is some adult only comments in the story and there is a lot gore.
This was so good I love how you gave Sombra a good hearted nature sorta and I am always up for a LunaXSombra story great job.
3876630 BLACK SPEECH! Heresy, Not really XD. Glad im not the only Lord of the Rings fan on here at times.