Dash Johnson used to have it all; he had a girlfriend, the best grades, and he was QB for the varsity football team. He was living the American teenage boy dream. That is, until people find out he's a brony. Then he loses everything he had, but he found something new: five friends who could share his interests. He also gains a stalker by the name of Reingo, but he is more then he seems. Through Reingo, Dash begins a great and scary adventure in Equestria as Dash's adventures lead him to a place he knows now as...The Rainbow Factory.
Chapters (6)
This would be good, but you just managed to break through 2 extremely hated cliches at once: the Brony in Equestria cliche, and the story-related-to Rainbow Factory cliche. The grammar and all is pretty good, and it would be a LOT better if it weren't cliche as hell.
The rainbow factory. Is this going to end up with him being ground up into rainbows. Yeh
Well i meant this story to be my contribution to the community and im sure this
will explain it all, but if people dont like it, at least i know that i like it. and no Mc Fagotron, i dont think i'll put him in the grinder.
Ok, "average brony". I noticed your short description on the home page. And then I read this:
Also this isn't necessarily a crossover, seeing as "The Rainbow Factory" was entirely made up by the author of the original fic, and it's not something unrelated to MLP being, well, crossed-over.
Mr. Pones,
My username and character from the story are two totally different things. My username was made by the guy who orginally made this account. Sadly he died after making it, but before he left, he told me he wanted me to write this and other stories so as to fulfill his dream of having his work becoming big in the community and maybe even being seen by Mrs. Strong herself. Now i know there are almost no possibilities of that happening, but i still do it in memoriam of him, so he made the account under Dash Johnson, which i think he actually planned for me to have since that is my name, and i gladly continue my friends legacy. So i hope this calms any thought you might have.
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Well everything else there aside, I was just pointing out how odd I found it that the two descriptions allude to "the average brony" being a quarterback, having a girlfriend, and also the best grades.
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Well he is a closet brony, or was before his peers found out, so i always thought that a closet brony would want to participate in things that what some people would describe as "average" bronies, which are actually the diehards, wouldnt be known for doing.
Yeh
Love it so far. Heck better than mine I just got bored
In the war. You should use 7.56mm AK-47. Oh yeah and Russians. Or a 5.56mm AR-15 even though it doesn't have a lot of power it's very accurate. Maybe the prototype HK. XM-25 air burst grenade launcher. Then we have a party
then why did I type this
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Very interseting thought. But ive already thought of what im gonna do, and i know your gonna love it. Im halfway done with done with chapter six and i should get it up sometime either during the week or weekend. Sometime before next tuesday.
Dash Johnson yeh dass your name. Is this a true story? It's sound real to me
except theres no Russians 
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Naw man. If this was true, then we would be in Equestria and i wouldnt need to write it down, or even have time to, because i would be hanging with my Dashie.
but anyway, Iwish it was, or at least the good parts
Mlp was released in Japan. Let the comics comense
As well as the freak hentai
Chapter 6 was okay, I think there should have been a little more detail oh yeah and Vodka
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Well now im working on The Pegasearch, so that'll be my new project.
I know you already disproved it, but I have to say the immortal words of Thrackerzod, "That pony (human) is going to be sacrificed! Oh, I'm going to utter a prayer SO hard!"
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May i say sir that you truly are one cool dude, and that i believe that i should be finished with at least the first chapter of the Pegasearch by next week. Putting alot of thought into what im gonna do with it. Plus school work. hope you guys understand.
So much better than my storys. Each chapter is really short in mine.
Basically that was the previous chapter and Scootaloos flight test.
AWWWWWW YEAH..... that was Dash, Scootaloo, and Rainbow Dash's head when they burst out of the factory.
Do you think you could make a new series that takes place after the end of this where Dash and Rainbow Dash are looking for Scootaloo? You don't have to do it if you don't want to it was just a request.
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actually i am thinking of co-writing things with people that want to. I think it would be cool to start some really cool story ideas that weren't just mine, though i am kinda conservative with what i like to write about, but a lot of the things bronies like to write about i'm cool with. The only stories i don't write are clopfics. I have no problem with people that write them, but that doesn't mean i write them personally, but anyway. What did you have in mind for the new series?
2448735 ok thanks anyways i can provide ideas if you want and you write like half your ideas and half my ideas or something
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so what were you thinking of doing with The Factory's ending?
well since im working on awoken...well, kinda working...i wont be able to do to much, but after i finish i have had a few ideas of what to write about.
2448788 I was thinking of where Rainbow Dash and Dash go back to equestria and look for Scootaloo (of course) and look everywhere but don't find her then think that shes in the RF (Rainbow Factory)
2448788 Do you also (when you get the chance from doing your stories) you could look at one of my stories to see how I did with first chapter?
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then my good sir, may i direct you to my other stories...namely The Pegasearch. You should find your inquiries there.
It's not well written and there are cringy plot holes. I can't take this story seriously at all. But I'm still curious to see where this is going.