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I'm older than your average brony, but then I've always enjoyed cartoons.  I'm an experienced reviewer, EqD pre-reader, and occasional author (featured on Equestria Daily 41 times).

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Pinkie Pie has always served admirably as the Element of Laughter, and it's time for the princesses to show their appreciation. In fact, they have a special assignment for her, something they've never tried. It will be the best surprise she ever had.

Third-place winner in the /fic/ write-off "The First Time."

Featured on Equestria Daily!

Thanks to Scott "Inquisitor" M for critique of my rough draft.

First Published
5th Oct 2013
Last Modified
5th Oct 2013
#1 · 91w, 1d ago · 3 · ·

This is beautifully written,

It's sad but Pinkie still manages to make me laugh,

Amazing work.:pinkiehappy:

#2 · 91w, 1d ago · 3 · ·

Damn, again with the feels. You monster! :raritycry:

#3 · 91w, 1d ago · · ·

*applauds* This was a tragically happy masterpiece. :pinkiesad2:

#4 · 91w, 1d ago · · ·

:pinkiesad2: I love a good book

#5 · 91w, 1d ago · · ·

:fluttercry:MY EMOTIONS ARE SO CONFLICTED RIGHT NOW.

Seriously, though, that was excellent.

#6 · 91w, 1d ago · · ·

Oh, well done, well done indeed!

#7 · 91w, 1d ago · · ·

wonderful story  , trying my best not to cry.

#8 · 91w, 1d ago · · ·

At the end did Pinkie come back?

Sorry for the stupid question I just broke my glasses so its kinda hard....:twilightsheepish:

someone please help me understand the end...

#9 · 91w, 1d ago · · ·

>>3302924

If you want the full explanation, PM me, since I hate to put spoilers in the comments, but I will say that it's significant that the only friends she sees at the end are Rainbow Dash and Rarity.

#10 · 91w, 23h ago · · ·

You know... I don't get feels. That's just not a thing that happens to me...

But damn it, did this story give me some intense feels. Like... Damn...

Strangely enough, I think Pumpkin's part at the end is what did it for me. Not sure why...

#11 · 91w, 23h ago · · ·

That was beautiful.... I genuinely almost cried! I read a lot of different things, but it is very rare for me to read something that moves me to the point of nearly crying, so well done!

#12 · 91w, 23h ago · 3 · ·

>>3303021

Back when this was part of an anonymous contest, one of the commenters said the same thing, that it didn't hit him until Pumpkin's part near the end. So you're not alone. He couldn't really explain it, either.

#13 · 91w, 23h ago · 2 · ·

>>3303030

Well, I'd be lying if I didn't know why, it just strikes me as odd. The part about her family jerked a few tears as well, but that's mostly because of how much my family means to me and yadda yadda yadda. The Pumpkin part got me because it was the first reaction, and intense despair is something that I can always relate to, and yet also gives me a much deeper interest in the writing. I could actually give the exact line that choked me up, and exactly why it did, but I'd rather not spoil it for anyone any more than I already may have. It's so much more pungent that way. It also helps that it was rather well written.

#14 · 91w, 23h ago · · ·

Masterfully done. Words fail to capture just how moving this piece is.

#15 · 91w, 23h ago · 2 · ·

This was breathtakingly amazing :pinkiehappy: but it made me cry....

How is this not more popular???? :duck:

#16 · 91w, 23h ago · 2 · ·

Words cannot describe the feels that I've been gut checked with by this story

#17 · 91w, 22h ago · · ·

My fells :fluttercry: they exploded :derpyderp1: but the story was awesome. pinkie i hope you have good life in pony heaven :pinkiehappy::pinkiesad2::pinkiesmile:

#18 · 91w, 22h ago · · ·

Wow, just....

All I can say is wow, and the feels. just well done.

#19 · 91w, 20h ago · · ·

This is a beautiful piece of writing.  Bravo.

#20 · 91w, 20h ago · 1 · ·

Oh my god, I cried so hard reading this!  Seriously, I'm still sobbing!  Words cannot express how wonderfully this was written!  Bravo! :fluttercry: :raritycry:

#21 · 91w, 19h ago · · ·

Oh god, no, those aren't tears... n-not at all...

:raritycry:

#22 · 91w, 18h ago · · ·

Its like my eyes are melting. Only they regenerate 2 arcseconds later. :raritycry:

Best story ever.

#23 · 91w, 17h ago · · ·

I loved it.

#24 · 91w, 17h ago · · ·

I can actually imagine Celestia and Luna doing this for the elements.

Also: :raritycry:

#25 · 91w, 16h ago · · ·

Find a amazing story challenge complet.:ajsmug:

Lol i think sometimes im like pinkie:pinkiehappy: its hard to keep my suprise b-day party from me unless you dont see me untill the party. :raritystarry: and i can be random. :pinkiegasp:

But at scool im like sunset shimmer mixed wih twilight:twilightsmile:

Me and my best frends have elemints mine is magic.:twilightsmile:

#26 · 91w, 16h ago · 1 · ·

Damn.  That was beautiful.

...  Third place?  Well deserved.

~Skeeter The Lurker

#27 · 91w, 15h ago · 6 · ·

This was a pleasing read. It was a refreshing in a way to see a "passing away" fic that confirms only two other Element Bearers rather than all six. Most FiM (or MLP, as the case may be) writers would feel the tug to make the pony of their story's focus the last one to go, just for a sense of completion. But one of the themes here is that some things never end, that there are certain aspects of life that are omnipresent, and are therefore perpetual.

I also really liked this paragraph:

“I had work, party planning, babysitting, work planning, party sitting, plan babying, sit working…” She blushed and hid her muzzle behind a hoof before adding, “And eventually, baby planning.

Nicely worded.

#28 · 91w, 15h ago · · ·

>>3303999

I second that sentiment, this was indeed beautiful.

#29 · 91w, 14h ago · · ·

While no tear left my eyes, they certainly tried. My eyes were watering the whole time. Fantastic!

#30 · 91w, 14h ago · · ·

I'm actually shedding some tears as I type that.

Thank you.

#31 · 91w, 14h ago · · ·

I don't get the ending... :applejackconfused:

#32 · 91w, 14h ago · 7 · 4 ·

You know, often times this site can really get me down. People are so cruel to the characters I love. To each other. It's easier on the internet, I suppose. People use stories as a way to bash this story or this pairing or what have you. It gets to the point that shipfics are the only ones I can safely guarantee won't find some way to bash me with some idea or other that rubs me the wrong way. Worse still, about twenty percent of the ones that fit into this category are written poorly in some way or other. Self inserts. Painful grammar. Flat characters.  I rarely get the opportunity to call a story masterful, and it's even rarer that I can do that while saying I also loved it.

Therefore, I think this story is deserving of the first 10/10 I've ever given on this site, for restoring my oft-wavering faith in it. Thank you for writing this.

#33 · 91w, 14h ago · · ·

If this got third, then I'm afraid to read the second and first place entries.  I don't think I have enough feels! :raritydespair:

#34 · 91w, 12h ago · · ·

Uh, spoiler warning?

>>3304171 I think it's showing Pinkie finally passed away, and she's getting to tell her two already dead friends about that thing.

#35 · 91w, 12h ago · · ·

I agree with BlueNinja. But still, I loved this story. The heart and happiness, all of it was just so well done. I had tears in my eyes through most of it. Your work is brilliant, my good Pascoite. Keep it up!

#36 · 91w, 12h ago · · ·

Two stories by you in the feature box.

Jesus, man.

#37 · 91w, 11h ago · · ·

Not just beautiful, but also extremely creative as well.

#38 · 91w, 11h ago · · ·

>>3304430 I understood THAT part, but not the part on Rainbow and Rarity and the window...

#39 · 91w, 11h ago · · ·

This story reminds me of Mitch Albom's Five People You Meet in Heaven. I cried reading that story and I did it again while reading your story. I think you did a wonderfully beautiful job with the last few moments of her life and I think it is safe to say I wouldn't have Pinkie Pie go out any other way. Thank you.

#40 · 91w, 11h ago · · ·

I have no room for all these feels. :raritycry:

This story was beautiful and so touching. Well done. :pinkiehappy:

#41 · 91w, 11h ago · · ·

I guess afterlife stories are not for me.

#42 · 91w, 8h ago · · ·

Dang that was beautiful and depressing. Never really gotten feels for these but dang... well done. :raritycry:

#44 · 91w, 7h ago · · ·

So beautful so sad and so pinkie.:fluttercry:

#45 · 91w, 7h ago · · ·

>>3303667  You just got a raincloud stuck in each eye, right?  :raritywink:

#46 · 91w, 7h ago · 1 · ·

>>3305461

No, eff that, I got an ocean.

#47 · 91w, 7h ago · · ·

Well that teared me up! ;_; :raritydespair::fluttercry:

#48 · 91w, 6h ago · · ·

I'm torn between "OH MY GOD SAD" and "OH MY GOD HAPPY".

#49 · 91w, 6h ago · 1 · ·

FEELS

#50 · 91w, 5h ago · · ·

:fluttercry: I LOVE YOU :applecry:

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