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  • E The Gift That Keeps On Giving

    The Princesses' birthday celebration is here again, and Mayor Mare needs a scapegoat—er, trusted citizen—to handle Ponyville's gift. Deciding what to get for an ancient ruler who's seen everything will be a piece of cake.
    5,155 words · 2,469 views  ·  397  ·  2
  • E Teacher's Pet

    Fair or not, most classes have that one perfect student, that one little flower that the teacher can't help but adore. Cheerilee's class is no different.
    3,259 words · 3,558 views  ·  436  ·  3
  • E Canon

    Partway through her morning practice routine—and routine it is—Octavia seems to have gained an audience. Well, if that mare wants to listen, she'll get a good show.
    3,489 words · 2,318 views  ·  320  ·  2
  • E A Hiccup in Time

    Twilight Sparkle definitely learned her lesson from her last time-travel experience. This one's not her fault. Really. Sometimes nature can be... annoying.
    4,508 words · 4,552 views  ·  680  ·  9
  • E But You Surpass Them All

    Applejack enjoys her family's Mother's Day tradition
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  • T He Kindly Stopped For Me

    An accident leaves Scootaloo fighting for her life. While everypony tries to help, a few in particular discover a few new things about what exactly it means to be a sister.
    16,950 words · 3,806 views  ·  402  ·  6
  • T Ragnarok

    As many such things do, it all started with Discord trying to help. And now Fluttershy can't escape the apocalyptic proclamations. Next time, she'll try the trick of wishing for no wishes.
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  • E A Taxing Situation

    When Derpy fills out her tax return, she finds that she owes quite a bit of money. However, she seems to have an alternative way of settling the debt. She might even have fun.
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Blog Posts17

  • 2w, 3h
    Another fic reading! And it's a good 'un!

    My compadre Present Perfect has been involved in a reading of one of my favorites of my own stories and kept it secret for months. And it's a Scribbler performance, so you know it'll be good. Really, she's the top for dramatic readings, and she's doing dark fics all month, so head on over, enjoy her talents over all the recordings she's made, and give her some love in the comments!

    0 comments · 62 views
  • 3w, 1d
    Duet in the Folk Style

    I don't normally blog when I release a story, but Duet in the Folk Style had a big effect on me. It started out as a completely different type of project a long time ago, one which I had to abandon for lack of direction. Then it got a thorough overhaul of the original four chapters with an actual ending in mind. After writing the last two chapters, it made it very difficult to do my final editing sweep. It's just one of those stories that has a very different feel to it after the first read-through.

    It's also my first chaptered story I've published since my first fanfic three years ago. I haven't been in this position in so long that I don't really know what to expect anymore. I won't ramble—I'll save the reflective thoughts for the author's notes at the end of the last installment, and even then, I'll keep them relatively short. I just wanted to say here that I've developed an extreme emotional investment in this story, I loved developing and writing the characters of the three listed as main characters, and it's been a rough last couple of weeks while I put the finishing touches on it. I think it does some things not often found in the romance stories in this fandom.

    As I said in the synopsis, the story is complete. I decided long ago to finish a story before posting any of it, if I ever wrote another chaptered story, because so many things can pop up to sap my motivation to work on it. But if I complete it first, there's that drive to the finish line without anything negative holding me back. So here it is. And as a little bonus for those who read the blog, here's the full schedule:

    Sept. 28> Chapter 1: Overture

    Oct. 5> Chapter 2: Crescendo

    Oct. 12> Chapter 3: Divertimento

    Oct. 19> Chapter 4: Elegy

    Oct. 26> Chapter 5: alla Rustica

    Nov. 2> Chapter 6: Toccata

                  Epilogue: Encore

    4 comments · 78 views
  • 5w, 4d
    My Domestic Equestria

    So I posted this story earlier today, and it's an odd bird. More a peek at my home life with a budding MLP fan. As such, it's nonfiction, which surprised me a little that it passed moderation. I figured it'd be called too meta or something, and that I'd have to do it as a blog post instead. So here's a blog post to signal-boost what might have been a blog post.

    By the way, my wife just baked some cookies for real tonight. My son always helps with that, and this time he asked if Pinkie could help, too. Everypony got to share a cookie with him! I hope everyone finds this a cute window into a child's perspective on the show, along with a few of my own thoughts sprinkled throughout.

    2 comments · 105 views
  • 7w, 1d
    Some writing advice which may or may not actually help anyone

    Some weeks ago, Avox posed a question on my user page:

    How do you usually go about writing your stories? Do you outline them beforehand, or do you just dive in headfirst? Do you finish them in one sitting, or do you write bits and pieces of them here and there? I'd love the chance to dissect your brain learn more about how you write, since you clearly know what you're doing.

    Given that he was the one who asked, and that I didn't think a large number of people would be too interested in the answer (not that I'll get many here anyway, as my blog posts only tend to get 30-50 views), I responded via PM. Avox thought I should post the reply somewhere more people would see it, so... eh, why not?

    So here's what my response was. If you have a rat's ass to give, leave it in the donations box.

    I’m definitely not someone who follows a standard process each time. I don’t have a period set aside to write each day, I don’t go through any preparation exercises, and I don’t use the same method every time. Really, the main issue for any writer is to find what works for you. Just because a system works for one writer you may like doesn’t mean it will do the least bit of good for you.

    There are a few things that I think help, though. For instance, look at how many of my stories came from write-offs (I always note in the synopsis when that’s the case) or are lengthened versions of minifics from write-offs. For me, that’s what it takes to be motivated to write. These contests are a fun way to push yourself to get an idea written quickly and get some nice feedback (usually) as part of the deal. Then when the contest is over, you can use that feedback to revise the story at your leisure. If you can get yourself to write anyway, that’s great, but this is what it took for me to have a consistent prod to come up with ideas and make them into something.

    The minifics in particular are a great exercise. I’d encourage anyone to participate in the write-offs in general and the mini ones specifically. They have an upper word limit (usually 750, but it’s been as low as 400), which really forces you into an economy of words. You have to make every one count. And yet they’re short enough that all you need is to pick a character you’d like to write about and maybe a one-sentence concept of what happens in the story, and you’re off.

    So, how to get started? Even for longer stories, it’s sometimes as simple as the minifics: a very brief description of the scenario or a character I wanted to write about. Seeing as how many of my one-shots are extended from minifics, even that small a seed can become something substantial. I’m one who doesn’t start a story until it’s all planned out in my head. I’ll get the initial idea, then roll it around in my mind for days, weeks, even months, until I know how I want the entire story arc to go. That doesn’t include the full detail, of course, because that’d be too much to keep track of, and you have to account for the little delightful things that occur to you during the actual writing anyway. You also have to be open to changing your mind about that initial plan to accommodate new ideas, massage things to get them to fit together better, or even make drastic changes when you realize your plan isn’t working. Because I plan first, I already have an outline in my head, and at times, I’ve formalized it by writing it out in a document. My outlines tend to run nearly half as long as the finished story, because while I do just keep to bare-bones action and description in this phase, I go ahead and write out most of the dialogue. Then when I’m ready to write, I add a few blank lines to the top of the outline and start expanding on what’s there. Other times, I just work from my head.

    For me, there are two critical things to consider in a story. First is to keep asking yourself why. Why do these events happen, why do the characters act the way they do about them, why does the story matter? Even in descriptions, you can set a mood with how the room looks, but if it occurs to you to put some detail in there, like a particular knickknack on the shelf, why should it be there? Did you make some subconscious link to something about one of the characters that it’s supposed to represent? If not, can you invent a way for that object to be significant? You get some leeway for scene setting, but for the most part, if you can’t answer the why, it’s probably not worth including. I do want to call attention to one of those questions, though: why does the story matter? Too many stories skip this part, particularly comedies or random stories, but all types violate it from time to time. I call this the “before and after” test. Look at a snapshot of the world as a whole or of the specific characters at the beginning of the story and again at the end. Has anything changed because of the story’s events? It should. There should be some conflict that’s come up and gotten resolved, and at the end, we should see that life is different now, or that we’ve gained some new insight into one of the characters. To pick on comedies, too many authors are satisfied with telling the joke and leaving it at that. While it may be funny, it’s not a story.

    The second is another kind of why: characterization. After all, that’s the establishment of why the characters act the way they do. We know enough about canon characters already, so you only need to worry about any personality traits that you want to add to their canon forms. For an original character, you need to plan them out so that you know more about them than you’ll use in the story. That level of familiarity will become apparent in your writing. But how to achieve that familiarity? Again, different things work for different people. Some imagine a list of very esoteric questions and think of what the character’s answers might be—things like their favorite sandwich, if they’ve ever been ice skating, etc. If that works, fine, but to me, that’s overkill. Often, a lot of those types of things can be knocked out with more broad ideas so that you only have to think of the exceptions. If it’s a shy character, chances are he hasn’t done stand-up comedy or gone skydiving. If he has, that’s the exception to remember, but a lot of the rest happens by default. Still, these things can be overkill as well. In my mind, it’s not really necessary to plan the character beyond things that are tangentially related to the story’s events, but even tangential things can be pretty far removed. For example, his reaction to causing a fender bender could be influenced by how his grandmother treated his mother when she was young. Relevance is the key.

    If you know your character that well, it will be easier to figure out how he behaves in any given scenario, and you really do have to consider that. Take on that character’s persona and adjust for differences in personality. Or perhaps consider an acquaintance who reminds you of the character. Then really ask yourself what you or that acquaintance would do or say in the situation. When you constantly make yourself tie that character’s behavior to what a real person would do, he comes across as so much more authentic in your writing. And character is the strongest thing in a story. That’s why the reader is there. Events are far more interesting because of who is there experiencing them. Great characters can survive with little plot, but the opposite is rarely true. I have a test for this as well: the “but” test (go ahead and snicker). If you want to describe your character in a short paragraph, how many times do you have to use the word “but”? This is why Rarity is my favorite character: she’s full of internal contradictions. She demands the finest in fashion, but she doesn’t ridicule her friends when they come up lacking. She has expensive tastes, but she doesn’t mind sharing those things. She’s obsessed with social status, but she takes great pleasure in being with friends who would certainly not fit in those circles. Real people are like this, full of unexpected quirks and competing interests, so it’s no wonder that written characters become more interesting when they show such traits.

    Stories that rely on situational emotions need to develop that situation with as much care as a character. If a reader is to feel invested in a romance or a sad situation, he has to feel like he knows that situation as well as he’d know a character. So it’s not enough just to say that two characters are in love, or that one is sad that another has died. You have to give the reader enough context to know exactly what’s at stake. For a sad story, you need the context to establish why it’s sad. Don’t just show me John Doe on his deathbed. Show me what led up to it so that I know everything he means to Jane. Then I miss him too, and I feel bad for Jane. Otherwise, it’s no more sad than reading a stranger’s obituary. For a romance, prove that the couple works well together, that they have chemistry. This can happen either by showing the gradual start of the romance, so I see the little dance of getting to know each other and melding of two individuals into a unit. Or well after they’re a couple, show me the little banter and interactions that couples have. In some way, give that relationship the same depth you’d give a character. Starting with “John and Jane are in love” is no better than starting with “John is a financial analyst who drinks a lot and suffers from depression, so go ahead and care about him already.” It all comes down to demonstrating those things to the reader and convincing him. If you leave it to him to invent the reasons he should care, many will decline to do so and just wade through the story with a minimal attachment, if they don’t give up altogether and move on to another story.

    For a write-off entry, this all necessarily takes whatever the allotted time period is, three days for most of the one-shots, and one day for the minifics. But when I revise them later on or write a story not connected to a writing event, I work on it in bits and pieces. I only get a few hours a day to split between reviewing stories and writing, so it’s just whatever time I can scrape together. Sometimes it takes a day or two, but it may well stretch more than a week.

    There, all that long-winded stuff is the writing part. It’s not really worth getting into the physical part. Whether you work well in front of the TV or need a quiet place is fine. There’s really no good advice there. I just wanted to describe the types of pitfalls that I’m conscious to avoid as I type.

    Afterward, then. I put the story down for at least a week. Go find other things to do, don’t go back and look at it, try not to think about it. You want it out of your head as much as possible. It’s surprising what you’ll see when it’s not fresh in your mind. I’ll find phrasings that are unclear, and I can’t remember what I meant them to say. I’ll find a word I used in three consecutive sentences. I’ll find something a character said that I’d intended to be a recurring thing but forgot to include in the rest of the story. And lastly, get an outside opinion, someone who you trust to be honest. Even if it’s someone who can’t help you with the grammar, he can still tell you that he didn’t understand what a sentence is trying to say, or that he doesn’t believe a character would reasonably act in a particular way. A lot of these kinds of problems are things readers can sense intuitively, regardless of whether they’re good writers.

    I hope this answers what you wanted to know, Any more questions, please ask.

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  • 10w, 6d
    Yet another reading!

    DRWolf has done a reading of "If Memory Serves," and he sure has the voice for it! Send him some views and love on his YouTube channel!

    1 comments · 185 views
  • ...

Pinkie Pie has always served admirably as the Element of Laughter, and it's time for the princesses to show their appreciation. In fact, they have a special assignment for her, something they've never tried. It will be the best surprise she ever had.

Third-place winner in the /fic/ write-off "The First Time."

Featured on Equestria Daily!

Thanks to Scott "Inquisitor" M for critique of my rough draft.

First Published
5th Oct 2013
Last Modified
5th Oct 2013
#1 · 54w, 3d ago · 2 · ·

This is beautifully written,

It's sad but Pinkie still manages to make me laugh,

Amazing work.:pinkiehappy:

#2 · 54w, 3d ago · 3 · ·

Damn, again with the feels. You monster! :raritycry:

#3 · 54w, 3d ago · · ·

*applauds* This was a tragically happy masterpiece. :pinkiesad2:

#4 · 54w, 3d ago · · ·

:pinkiesad2: I love a good book

#5 · 54w, 3d ago · · ·


Seriously, though, that was excellent.

#6 · 54w, 3d ago · · ·

Oh, well done, well done indeed!

#7 · 54w, 3d ago · · ·

wonderful story  , trying my best not to cry.

#8 · 54w, 3d ago · · ·

At the end did Pinkie come back?

Sorry for the stupid question I just broke my glasses so its kinda hard....:twilightsheepish:

someone please help me understand the end...

#9 · 54w, 3d ago · · ·


If you want the full explanation, PM me, since I hate to put spoilers in the comments, but I will say that it's significant that the only friends she sees at the end are Rainbow Dash and Rarity.

#10 · 54w, 3d ago · · ·

You know... I don't get feels. That's just not a thing that happens to me...

But damn it, did this story give me some intense feels. Like... Damn...

Strangely enough, I think Pumpkin's part at the end is what did it for me. Not sure why...

#11 · 54w, 3d ago · · ·

That was beautiful.... I genuinely almost cried! I read a lot of different things, but it is very rare for me to read something that moves me to the point of nearly crying, so well done!

#12 · 54w, 3d ago · 2 · ·


Back when this was part of an anonymous contest, one of the commenters said the same thing, that it didn't hit him until Pumpkin's part near the end. So you're not alone. He couldn't really explain it, either.

#13 · 54w, 3d ago · 1 · ·


Well, I'd be lying if I didn't know why, it just strikes me as odd. The part about her family jerked a few tears as well, but that's mostly because of how much my family means to me and yadda yadda yadda. The Pumpkin part got me because it was the first reaction, and intense despair is something that I can always relate to, and yet also gives me a much deeper interest in the writing. I could actually give the exact line that choked me up, and exactly why it did, but I'd rather not spoil it for anyone any more than I already may have. It's so much more pungent that way. It also helps that it was rather well written.

#14 · 54w, 3d ago · · ·

Masterfully done. Words fail to capture just how moving this piece is.

#15 · 54w, 3d ago · 1 · ·

This was breathtakingly amazing :pinkiehappy: but it made me cry....

How is this not more popular???? :duck:

#16 · 54w, 3d ago · 1 · ·

Words cannot describe the feels that I've been gut checked with by this story

#17 · 54w, 3d ago · · ·

My fells :fluttercry: they exploded :derpyderp1: but the story was awesome. pinkie i hope you have good life in pony heaven :pinkiehappy::pinkiesad2::pinkiesmile:

#18 · 54w, 3d ago · · ·

Wow, just....

All I can say is wow, and the feels. just well done.

#19 · 54w, 3d ago · · ·

This is a beautiful piece of writing.  Bravo.

#20 · 54w, 3d ago · · ·

Oh my god, I cried so hard reading this!  Seriously, I'm still sobbing!  Words cannot express how wonderfully this was written!  Bravo! :fluttercry: :raritycry:

#21 · 54w, 3d ago · · ·

Oh god, no, those aren't tears... n-not at all...


#22 · 54w, 2d ago · · ·

Its like my eyes are melting. Only they regenerate 2 arcseconds later. :raritycry:

Best story ever.

#23 · 54w, 2d ago · · ·

I loved it.

#24 · 54w, 2d ago · · ·

I can actually imagine Celestia and Luna doing this for the elements.

Also: :raritycry:

#25 · 54w, 2d ago · · ·

Find a amazing story challenge complet.:ajsmug:

Lol i think sometimes im like pinkie:pinkiehappy: its hard to keep my suprise b-day party from me unless you dont see me untill the party. :raritystarry: and i can be random. :pinkiegasp:

But at scool im like sunset shimmer mixed wih twilight:twilightsmile:

Me and my best frends have elemints mine is magic.:twilightsmile:

#26 · 54w, 2d ago · · ·

Damn.  That was beautiful.

...  Third place?  Well deserved.

~Skeeter The Lurker

#27 · 54w, 2d ago · 5 · ·

This was a pleasing read. It was a refreshing in a way to see a "passing away" fic that confirms only two other Element Bearers rather than all six. Most FiM (or MLP, as the case may be) writers would feel the tug to make the pony of their story's focus the last one to go, just for a sense of completion. But one of the themes here is that some things never end, that there are certain aspects of life that are omnipresent, and are therefore perpetual.

I also really liked this paragraph:

“I had work, party planning, babysitting, work planning, party sitting, plan babying, sit working…” She blushed and hid her muzzle behind a hoof before adding, “And eventually, baby planning.

Nicely worded.

#28 · 54w, 2d ago · · ·


I second that sentiment, this was indeed beautiful.

#29 · 54w, 2d ago · · ·

While no tear left my eyes, they certainly tried. My eyes were watering the whole time. Fantastic!

#30 · 54w, 2d ago · · ·

I'm actually shedding some tears as I type that.

Thank you.

#31 · 54w, 2d ago · · ·

I don't get the ending... :applejackconfused:

#32 · 54w, 2d ago · 6 · 4 ·

You know, often times this site can really get me down. People are so cruel to the characters I love. To each other. It's easier on the internet, I suppose. People use stories as a way to bash this story or this pairing or what have you. It gets to the point that shipfics are the only ones I can safely guarantee won't find some way to bash me with some idea or other that rubs me the wrong way. Worse still, about twenty percent of the ones that fit into this category are written poorly in some way or other. Self inserts. Painful grammar. Flat characters.  I rarely get the opportunity to call a story masterful, and it's even rarer that I can do that while saying I also loved it.

Therefore, I think this story is deserving of the first 10/10 I've ever given on this site, for restoring my oft-wavering faith in it. Thank you for writing this.

#33 · 54w, 2d ago · · ·

If this got third, then I'm afraid to read the second and first place entries.  I don't think I have enough feels! :raritydespair:

#34 · 54w, 2d ago · · ·

Uh, spoiler warning?

>>3304171 I think it's showing Pinkie finally passed away, and she's getting to tell her two already dead friends about that thing.

#35 · 54w, 2d ago · · ·

I agree with BlueNinja. But still, I loved this story. The heart and happiness, all of it was just so well done. I had tears in my eyes through most of it. Your work is brilliant, my good Pascoite. Keep it up!

#36 · 54w, 2d ago · · ·

Two stories by you in the feature box.

Jesus, man.

#37 · 54w, 2d ago · · ·

Not just beautiful, but also extremely creative as well.

#38 · 54w, 2d ago · · ·

>>3304430 I understood THAT part, but not the part on Rainbow and Rarity and the window...

#39 · 54w, 2d ago · · ·

This story reminds me of Mitch Albom's Five People You Meet in Heaven. I cried reading that story and I did it again while reading your story. I think you did a wonderfully beautiful job with the last few moments of her life and I think it is safe to say I wouldn't have Pinkie Pie go out any other way. Thank you.

#40 · 54w, 2d ago · · ·

I have no room for all these feels. :raritycry:

This story was beautiful and so touching. Well done. :pinkiehappy:

#41 · 54w, 2d ago · · ·

I guess afterlife stories are not for me.

#42 · 54w, 2d ago · · ·

Dang that was beautiful and depressing. Never really gotten feels for these but dang... well done. :raritycry:

#44 · 54w, 2d ago · · ·

So beautful so sad and so pinkie.:fluttercry:

#45 · 54w, 2d ago · · ·

>>3303667  You just got a raincloud stuck in each eye, right?  :raritywink:

#46 · 54w, 2d ago · · ·


No, eff that, I got an ocean.

#47 · 54w, 2d ago · · ·

Well that teared me up! ;_; :raritydespair::fluttercry:

#48 · 54w, 2d ago · · ·

I'm torn between "OH MY GOD SAD" and "OH MY GOD HAPPY".

#49 · 54w, 2d ago · 1 · ·


#50 · 54w, 2d ago · · ·

:fluttercry: I LOVE YOU :applecry:

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