Pretty poor story at this time. Giving it the revision it desperately needs.
Luna's homecoming was not all she had hoped.
Though none challenged the goddess' right to rule, the princess has found herself in an era she does not understand with scarcely a loyal ward or devoted courtier to which she may turn. With affairs of state alien, her prestige and image tarnished by years of absence and her prior turn to tyranny, the deity of the night finds herself alone, wearing her cobwebbed and mothballed crown.
An immortal force of nature she may be, but her heart of hearts still bleeds with the pain of desolation. And the heart only suffers so long before it demands desperate action...
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Too early to render judgement. More requested.
Will favourite and follow so long as this doesn't become a Humans Are all Bastards and Main human is the only good one
MOAR! please
I would very much enjoy more
More!
Okay everyone!
Thanks for all the positive feedback! This chapter is getting a revamp to give more info, and the next chapter is coming ASAP!
2088378 That won't happen, I promise.
Continue
2103433
Well, I'm going to start on the next chapter. Right now.
2104146 most people said more so i decided to ruin it
cant wait
2104225
What exactly was ruined? The "moar" stream, via your use of the synonym? 
2108137 no, the use of the word moar except the use of the author so i decided to ruin it with the synonym
2108283 Alrighty then
Um, hey guys! Chapter 2 is out! It's better than the last IMO-- that may just be because there was more than just an intro going on in it. I worked quite hard on it, and revised before posting. Enjoy!
another cliffhanger,
,well im excited for the next one, keep working
Sorry 'bout that, but I want to hold you guys and gals' interest. I'm already about 1/3 of the way into the next chapter!
You know the strangest thing? Texas has MULTIPLE accents. West, North, South, East....yea.
Nice! Courious about his magic!
well that escalated quickly
His a well spoken young chap isn't he
jealous right now
2141086 Probably what he'd be thinking if he wasn't so freaked out right now.
'MERICA! F-K YEAA
-- That's the impression I got when I read this chapter.
Try to guess why.
2141733 XD same here
I dont remember... aree they humanoid or just giant ponies?
2142293 The royal sisters are just really big ponies.
2141851 Well, if that was supposed to be funny, good job!
If it was serious... I'm about to go on a rant about our dear Princess Woona. So just don't read any further if you were making a funny
1. She wasn't gonna "destroy the world," she was gonna make it eternally night time.
2. They are in the same universe, but maybe not the same galaxy
3. Luna didn't read how the spell worked; she just thought "TL;DR" to herself and "used" it
4. The spell doesn't *force* anyone to do anything
5. The spell cannot enslave him
6. He wanted to go
/end_rant
GODANGIT. i hate cliff hangers
2145326 I'm sorry. But the nest part will be good! And hopefully up by around this time tomorrow night!
WITH ART!
It took me like 2 hours to sketch it, and though it's not perfect by any means, I'm a ridiculous perfectionist.
He fell asleep
2145616 Well, not really. Good cynical response tho.
2145618 HORY SHEET! YOUR AWAKE? I THOIGHT I WAS THE ONLY ONE AWAKE AT THIS UNGODLY HOUR TO OTHERS!
i know is it like the regeneration breath energy thingy
... proceed
Blaze likes, you... MORE WINE! *smashes his fist on his keyboard* if that's ok with you, please..
2145770 No... but that is a good guess!
Okay... sometimes i get the feeling some things come directly from my life... if i told you the ' feelings' (if you can call them that) that i have you would laugh at me probably and what happened not long go freaked me out and you would probably laugh... again... also habentt you ever got the feeling you were bieng watched when no one is near? I have that feeling now...
A little too accepting on the whole " transformed into a friggin' pony," thing.
Also Luna seems to be a big old emotional roller coaster. One chapter she's crying about no one liking her, so she summons a friend, then gets all happy when she finds a friend, and now. . . INTERROGATION MODE ACTIVATED!
I'd be a little bit steamed with the princess at that point. I mean, seriously, YOU SUMMONED ME!
Chill the hell out!
But maybe, I'm just nitpicking. . .
o this gonna be good
2150899 1. Yeah, I understand that. But it's the fact that he's a Pegasus, and I don't know about you, but my emotions seem to go out to lunch when something extreme happens
2. Yeah, Luna does seem a bit bipolar here. But she took that approach with the baited question in case the main character was a spy; she's fiercely protective of her people, and very smart.
Sorry, I don't like Humans turning into Ponys so you lost me.
I don't know if this will work, but I drew a sketch of the main character looking at himself in the mirror.
dropbox.com/s/1emkx0d1y2jzef6/IMG_1272.JPG
That's the embed, and if that doesn't work, here's the linky:
linky
i hate how doctor whos seasons are so small. i waited a year for the last one to come out, but only a few episodes were made, well thats how british TV works, cant wait for the next season
2153307 It's funny how I'm an American that likes British TV. Top Gear UK and Doctor Who for the win!
longer ones, there more exciting for me with a bit more interaction, like ponies meeting ponies, finding out who is who, stuff like that
2155596 I feel the same, but I wanted to get everyone's opinion first. Last comment for the night. *yawn*
i have to admit i like it
I had to resist on daaaaaaaawwwwwwinnnnnggggg for an hour just when luna hugged him
why did you turn main character into a pony?
would not his human form benefit in action-packed situations? anthro form for him maybe? wink wink nudge nudge (just asking)