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After complaining about how bored she was, Luna is forced to go learn how to make some friends by Twilight Sparkle. But is Luna going to get more then she bargained for?
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ooooh, oooooh i get first comment! .....and so the die is cast
well, Pipsqueak is an orphan, Luna is likely going to be his mother, and he have a crush on Dinky.
Love thise fanfic
Luna, you better start to control your temper
also the part os Spitfire and Soarin was gold
2226263 Do you know how hard it would be to make Luna Pip's mother
Good try but you will have to wait and see what i have planned
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technicaly is easy she only have to adopt him, but hard part would be to calm Blueblood ans other as**ole nobels
But i hate blue blood and i don't want to have him in my storys.
no in the end Pip will have a family
but that's all i will spoil, but whenever you have an orphan as a main character in a story you kind of expect them to get a home in the end so i am not spoiling too much
you hav eall jy tears and DAWWWWWWWWS
2241391 cool
I'm....somewhat unsure of how i feel towards luna in this, admittedly, its nice to see an actual example of her social setbacks in ways you can sympathize with the characters getting upset at, she's not just "kind of weird" she's actually somewhat rude in most peoples viewpoints.
it also helps that pip and rainbow dash actually do something that could set someone off (I can sympathize......children make me angry too
). reguardless it was alittle jarring to see luna have a shitfit at pipsqueak out of no-where and calling rainbow by a nickname that, reguardless of not being said with the same malace as it was by the dumbell and his friends, is still probably not a flattering nickname (although being the millionth time she's probably smashed into someones rib cage, spine, clavin, you'd think she'd be used to stuff like that by now 
Eitherway, finding this series a good bit of fun, good job
This story has been reviewed by: The Equestrian Critics Society
Story title: An Early Night
Author: epreeses1
Review by: BronyWriter
A rather stereotypical story that is taken pretty much from the show itself. Luna is sent to Ponyville to learn about friendship, just like Twilight was. It takes place sometime after the events of Luna Eclipsed, and features a weak, jumpy storyline, messy dialogue, and no characters to speak of.
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Final Score: 2/10