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Finals are approaching at Canterlot High and with the Dazzlings affair solved, Sunset Shimmer can finally concentrate on her studies, but for someone else it's also an occasion to get revenge on the girl that played a major role in their defeat...

Rated Teen for ecchi situations

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Pretty good. Silver and Sunset are pretty funny together.

Amazing story! I hope it gets featured!:pinkiehappy:

I liked this, maybe you can make more of this pairing?

Another story like that? What, is Sunset running naked around the school going to be a trend now?

... That wasn't sarcastic, I'd really like for that to become a trend. :rainbowwild:

5399977 let's make #StreakingShimmer a thing then!

Couldn't Sunset have just worn the coat alone? If it reached Silver's ankles, then it could've covered her feet.

I give this story 5/5 warm and sweaty stars. Want sequel.

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I think the actual problem was that she didn't have shoes. In the rain those are rather important.

I find the lack of upvotes and attention for this story disturbing, :eeyup:

Silver Bullet

The guy who has exactly what Sunset needs, right when she needs it. You, Sir Author, are a steely-eyed missile-man, :moustache:

that was fun. would have been funnier if the human5 found Sunset's clothes before seeing her with Silver Bullet.

Via

5400070 Streaking Shimmer group created. We're doin' this.

Love it. This is finally a meme I can get behind. In fact, I dare say it was worth reading that deluge of shitty "human cosplayer turns into his costume" thing if this was the light at the end of the tunnel.

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What does this have to do with the LoHAVs? I mean, sure, the guy's an OC, but at least he's not an obnoxious Gary Stu LoHAV "O"C. And the name-thing was actually, legitimately clever, which is far more than I can say for most stories.

Though you need an editor, author-sai.

5406922 What is a "LoHAV"? Is that the actual name for that cosplay thing?

Anyway, I wasn't saying anything regarding this story, or the new Sunset Streaking thing. I was just making an unrelated comment regarding that meme, which I didn't like, and this one, which I do.

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Fair enough. The acronym stands for "League of Humans Acting Villainous", who were the bastard fucks that created the cosplay-villain meme thing. May the devil rape their asses in hell.

But yes, this is a fantastic trend.

Oh man, I really like this one. I find these kinds of stories really funny because of how normal the weird situation has to seem and how hard the characters have to try to make it seem normal, and man, you really nailed it for me :rainbowlaugh:

2x

really great story.Hope there's a sequel:pinkiehappy:

Aww. Sunset might've gotten herself a new guy in her life. Good for her! :raritystarry::coolphoto::twilightsmile::yay:

Wow, I enjoyed this a lot. Pretty fun to read.
EAT THAT SIREN ASSHATS :yay:

But yowza, surprised she was able to escape so cleanly. Totally was expecting her to be caught most of the time!

I'm on the "Sequel now" train, but at the same time I understand if you didn't XP
but seriously I need a sequel or I'll die, doctor says so

I enjoyed that...MUCH more than I thought I would

Dude this is great. :rainbowkiss:

One thing I would point out is that you miss out a lot of sentence/line ending punctuation. Things like commas, full stops, stuff like that.

5402756 It was actually probably more the terrain than the shoes. I worked at a summer camp trading post at the bottom of a hill. Every time it rained, our operating procedure was to take off our shoes and roll up our pant legs, and just sweep the dirt out the next day because it was impossible to keep the water from flowing into the building and out the back door.

she found the hair dryer under the bathroom sink and plugged it in.

Why's this guy got a hair dryer? :rainbowderp:

5602053 well, he went through a long hair phase!

Hmm... Not bad, but it feels... Oddly lacking. Like the whole business about her being naked, I guess I just kind of expected more shenanigans and close calls. Maybe one of his friends stopped him to talk to him, and they have to stave off suspicion, that kind of thing. Then, the romance part of it felt a little too quick. Like, they just had what would normally be incredibly awkward experience, but then fall in love at first sight and spend the night together? Could've definitely used more detail in the romance aspect as well; that fortune cookie business told me nothing, and seemed pretty cliche, if i'm being honest.
That's probably just due to my expectations, though. It's not bad, mind, that's just how I feel.

This is a decent story, but the relationship between Sunset and Silver feels rather sudden and contrived. There wasn't any real reason for them to be together aside from the convenience that he happened to be there for her at an opportune time.

Okay. Sunset has no reason of being ashamed of being naked. She was always like this back in Equestria. It's not like she cared a lot about others' opinions either. After the first movie she just stopped being evil and maybe was a bit afraid of others' anger, she didn't suddenly become an ordinary shy schoolgirl. The whole story is just one big OOC for me.
Though if I imagine that it wasn't Sunset, the story is good I suppose...

6241408 Huh. That's actually a good point. How did I not notice that?

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That really depends on what happened in the (roughly) three years before the EQG movies.

If she made a fool of herself/got heavily mocked during her learning human norms and taboos she could very well have issues with being seen nude. (Could also partially explain her bullying - get bullied, become the bully.)

Not that I really support that series of events, but it is possible.

6389586 Maybe. I can even see how this would develop and all... and it would be rather logical even. If only it was mentioned here in the fic.

Is ther à sequel??

Good shit! Good shit! That's some good shit right there!

Well done.

I don't see why Sunset was freaking out about the large backpack thing. I'm pretty sure a Senior in High School is larger than a regular backpack. (no offense to Sunset)

A very good Sunset x OC story. :heart:

She gave a knock at the shelf, unaware of the dusty stack of theatrical props that was precariously placed on top of it. One second later, Sunset Shimmer was covered in a pile of dirty rags, sawdust and chalk powder.

Oofity. :fluttershyouch:

Sunset Shimmer turned around, immediately covering herself with her arms. Standing in front of the entrance door to the showers room, three well known figures were looking at her. One of them was holding her clothes.

Oh shit! 😰

"Are her boobs bigger than mine?" Sonata added.

Seriously Sonata, seriously. :facehoof:

"Oh, but I quite like these things" Adagio said, an evil smirk on her face while she held Sunset Shimmer's jacket in her hand "In fact, I think I'm going to keep them for me. After all, friendship is sharing, isn't it?"

Not when it's someone's clothes that is!!! :twilightangry2:

Naked and powerless, Sunset Shimmer watched the three girls go away with her clothes. She heard the locker room’s door being closed and their laughs fading as they got away. She paced in the locker room for a few moments, looking for something to cover herself with, but there was nothing. Just empty hangers. She sat on a bench, tears swelling her eyes.

Not good! 😬

“Throw them away. I have no use for that stuff”

Or just return them to her! 😡

Silver Bullet was placing the bag with the dinner on the table when Sunset Shimmer came out of the bathroom. For the first time since bumping into each other earlier that afternoon, he was finally able to look at her without problems. This allowed him to realize something incredibly relevant: Sunset Shimmer was the prettiest girl he had ever seen. They stared at each other for a good minute before bursting out in a liberating peal of laughter. Laughter that for Sunset Shimmer quickly transformed into crying. All the fear and stress that she had somehow kept under control had finally broken the banks of her emotions. She brought her hands to her eyes and started rubbing them in a vain attempt to stop her tears. When Silver Bullet took her in his arms, the dam crumbled completely and she planted her face on his chest, bawling like a child.

There there Sunset, your safe now. Everything s gonna be ok. :twilightsmile:

“Girls, looks like we have quite a story to hear...”

Yes you do... 🙄

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