Agent Bookfort
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hm. will read
That was cute!
So this is an inspired little story I figured I'd punch out, particularly after such a long break. I actually quite enjoyed writing a light-hearted 'bedtime tale' like this.
That was an interesting story. I'd love to see Fluttershy coloring the sky!
2013124
Me too. I should think about looking in to that.
A wonderful little bedtime tale. Thank you for sharing it with us. :)
ky00t
Their arrival would certainly add to the day, but it would detract from it
Wouldn't? This is phrased oddly, I'm not sure what the second part is supposed to mean. If they came, that's great, if they don't, it'll be okay, is that what you're aiming for?
There are some minor spelling/grammar issues (run it through a checker, if you can), some of which stand out - I suggest you load up your story, or better yet print it out, and read it out loud to yourself - stuff you gloss over when writing or just looking at it becomes apparent when you try to speak it.
I like your premise; would've liked to see Fluttershy wandering a bit more before sinking down to cry, and spend longer combating whatever-it-was
Good luck, and may the thumbs be ever in your favor
2013501
I thought so too at first as Bookfort let me read it as one of the very first Ponies...
But now as I have finished it I really think it's GREAT like it is...because...it's just a Filly Bedtime Tale isn't it?
@Bookfort
Please....keep up your good work and maybe inspire other writers, readers and Artists to just give their talents a shot ^^ Thank you.
This was beautiful. Fluttershy being awesome is always a good thing. And this story is cute. Well done.