Ah, family. It can be said--and I believe it has--that they are in a certain sense the first friends you ever make. But what makes a family? Is it blood relation like the Apple Family over in Ponyville? What of the Princess Sisters that rule over the land and raise the heavenly bodies? Could a little baby dragon be family to a unicorn? How and why? Well, that's exactly what we're going to look into.
A collection of short stories from all across Equestria.
(cover needed, character list to expand as it goes.)
Chapters (4)
Just because you're a thousand years old, doesn't mean you can't be childish. The Doctor agrees with me.
Aww...how sweet.
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Indeed. The Fourth Doctor said so himself.
I anticipate much adorable from this story.
Aww. That was very sweet. Foal Twilight is adorable!
A positive thumb and another spot on my favorites list are yours, good sir.
D'awwww! All my feels!
Aww. This was sweet.
Love OctiScratch, even when it is platonic.
Love OctiScratch, especially when it is platonic.
Love platonic shipping, even when it's OctiScratch
Love my readers, even when they're being silly
These have been great, keep it up.
One free review as promised.
Grammar mistakes detected.
Smaller mistakes: 4
Sentences with major flaws: 0
Overall: Very good grammar with mistakes that were only found because I was looking for them.
Vocabulary.
Nice vivid words but just try and keep the unusual words to a minimum. I humbly think I am decent at vocabulary but there were a couple of words that I had to look up which took away from the story.
Plot and pacing.
Good idea and well and well paced. I don't think you rushed any chapters, nor were they too slow.
Overall score: 8.8 out of 10
I liked it. Have a like.
You mean "allowed", not "aloud".
This is another great short story concept. I love fanfic that elaborates on things that must have happened in canon but weren't made explicit. And you've kept Big Mac nice and laconic overall while still letting him get his points across and use the occasional longer sentence like in the beginning of Applebuck Season or the middle of Ponyville Confidential. That's a tricky tightrope to walk; great job!
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Fixed.
Thanks for the well-thought compliment. They always mean a lot to me (as do the well thought criticisms. The fact that you're unafraid and able to give me both is one of the things I've always appreciated about your comments.)
Pleasant and interesting and sweet. I liked every chapter, and nothing negative jumped out at me in any of them. No earth-shattering revelations, true, but these were wonderful and enjoyable, a nice easy read to calm the nerves and soothe the soul. Definitely enjoyed, thank you for writing them.
Please keep writing, I'll keep reading, even if it takes me a while.
This is sweet, but Octavia's last name is Melody.
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This was written before that was established, and I just haven't bothered to go in and change that. :)