After crashing into the Wonderbolt's Home Station, Rainbow Dash gets what she's always wanted- a spot in the Wonderbolts
But there's a rule that happens to be a problem- don't fall in love with another Wonderbolt.
She and Soarin just can't stay away from each other. What can they do?
If you just kiss, that's not exactly falling in love, right?
.........right?
I suggest you put in paragraph breaks, it makes the whole thing look better. I also suggest removing helping words such as "is, am, are, was, were, been". These words are empty and don't add anything to your story. Removing them will raise the general quality of the story.
Wow! I really liked your beginning. Very engaging! That whole thing with pinkie being crazy was a unique twist. I look forward to the next chapter
Damn it's cold in my house *shivers* I hate snow!
Anyway this is great gonna see where this goes.
So anywatpy what's your horoscope? I'm apparently gonna go for an unnepected trip out my window and have to work on improving my low self esteem which is actually pretty true (except from the low eps elf esteem part joking the window didn't happen )
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Oh. Well, I'm a Leo so let's leave it there.....
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I have a whole story about it, called Psychotic.
Which I really should be updating..... oops.
Ooh poor guy
Continue! :D
Pinkie..... Wow
Anyway Great story! pls continue
OMG!OMG!OMG! Poor Soarin and RD not allowed to fall in love with another WB but Rd all of a sudden a Wb awesome and so sad and plz update soon
Do you know when you're going to update again? I love the story! Great job! Poor Soarin and Rainbow not allowed to fall in love.
Can u make more pleeeeeeaaaaassssssseeeeeee
Soo now that you're back...
UPDATE NOWWWW!
(I mean, please... and... If that's okay with you...)
Wtf...it's been more than 62 weeks
Why u didn't update for 62 WEEKS!!!!!!!
This is too awesome to....ARG!
UPDAATE PLZ its very interesting there not allowed 2 fall in love with each other... ANYWHO PLZ UPDATE
oh god pinkie..... anyways, i like the concept u put down here. dash flying from ponyville to cloudsdale and she had no idea. two wonderbolts getting kicked out cuz they can't be in love. now dashie is a wonderbolt but i think soarin likes her.. HAHAHA
keep up the good work!
PLZ UPDATE NOWWW
Wow I am loving this story book here already my friend. It looks like those two Wonderbolts are out and the new Wonderbolts are in the team now (best birthday ever for Rainbow dash) and why does Soarin look sad all of a sudden? What will Rainbow tell her friends about it? And what will go for Rainbow Dash dream of flying alongside the Bolts? And what if a little romance happens between Soarinand Rainbow Dash? That's all the questions there.
Also I love your story book my friend, like love it. And to hope see more chapters coming in soon to. Good luck on the next chapters, and I followed you to.
Continuuuueeeeeeđđ Pleeeaaaasseeee!