♫♥I look forward to reading what happens next in your story♥♪

hilarious at how much i am like poor carmel when i try to talk up the lady styles... hopeing you continue this

♫♥I look forward to reading what happens next in your story♥♪

really looking foreward to the next installment of this under-sea epic inspired by Jack Caruak's novel "Star Wars Episode I: The Phantom Menace." The fact that you managed to keep Gandalf and Dobby in character speaks volumes about your musical skill. And that part with the lima beans and the car chase? Priceless!

go get her tiger!

♫♥I look forward to reading what happens next in your story♥♪

>>41444144

wtf

Cn you feel Da Magic in the air

ha, that was unexpected! really loving this story,i honestly thought Twilight was just being friendly!

AWWW they are so cute. Ahh young love. It's like a cupcake with Elite yellow icing .

I am very happy with this. SOO CUUTE.

well, if a glir like Twilgiht tryied to talk to me, i'd proabablly give her a generic answer, walk away and spend the next month asking me why in the hay i did that. Even caramel is better at girls than me.

I dont usually read romantic fics, but i liekd this one

This is a very good story

The writing is pretty darn good.

The characters are handled well.

The content is neatly put together; we have these moments of appropriately apportioned drama woven together with cute moments like at the end of this chapter.

I'm enjoying it quite a bit and looking forward to more.

I'm quite happy about the positive response everyone! Here's the final chapter, I hope you all enjoy!

Comments appreciated as always!

lovely story

Ahhh, shame it has to end...

great nonetheless, although i wouldnt be disapointed if you added another chapter or two!

D'aaaaaaaaaawwwwwwwwww

And that was absolutely adorable. Wonderful story.

Dawww what a cute story

Great story. I find it funny he can now not only sell apples, but might be able to start a sign business on the side.

Noooooo! N-not "complete!" There has to be more!

Adorable story, it just enforces my liking for this pairing, and i do hope someone makes a pic of the sign.

Excellent.  Just a few grammar mistakes here and there ("too" instead of "to", etc.).  

Seriously, this is how Twilight shipping should be, imo.  

>>52675267

FFUUU---

  This can't be the end, it can't be!  NOOO!

I need MOAR!

This is too good to let it end here!

Think of your fans!

...Please?

love it

I could never be that smooth with a booknerd D:

Moar.

I said it before and I'll say it again...YOUNG LOVE IS SO ADORABLE. ESPECIALLY THESE TWO .

The Fluttershy demands more though . And I want more too. PLEEEAAAASSSSEEEE

moar moar moar moar moar moar moar moar moar moar moar moar moar moar moar moar moar moar moar moar moar moar

But... but it was just getting adorable!

On a scale of one to YOU-BETTER-MAKE-IT-NOW() how likely is a sequel or continuation?

>>52825282

I'll second that D'aaww and add some more d'aaww!

>>53795379

>>53765376

>>53655365

>>53615361

>>53445344

>>53315331

>>53205320

>>52895289

>>52775277

Wow....So you guys really want a continuation huh?

Well...I could write another short series of chapter next week...where Twilight goes to dinner at Caramel's house...

That story had me "D'aww"-ing and smiling all the way through! Simply lovely!

(And I join in those who want a continuation. 83)

>>53875387 THANK YOU!!!

You rock!

"Why am I so delicious?"

Must...have...more...It was so d'aww. I need to read more fanfics like this. They just leave me so happy.  

I just made an account just so I could follow this.

this isn't the end it can't be Its like an addiction after its done you still want more!

This was a very nice story, and I enjoyed reading it very much. The ending, however, was a bit sudden. I do hope you plan to either continue it, or write a sequel (Perhaps a series? I know I'd love to read more about these two).

Anyways, great job...

Very nicely done, I really enjoyed it. You have earned a watch, and not a gold one.

but... its... COMPLETE!!! NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

>>56145614

I agree!

Oh dear Celestia this is so adorable!

Aww...I love this stroy, but the ending was far too soon. It seemed like this story was just beginning.

Omg, Caramel sounds SOOO much like my BF. I don't often read romantic stuff, but you always do good work Squeak.

So is this complete? The story says incomplete here and complete on EQD.

Either way, love this story. Caramel is soooo adorkable, and seeing his luck change at the end really made my day.

But I want more NOW....

Please let there be more! please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please!!!!!!!!!!!

Oh man, I just figured out why I like this story so much.

Caramel is so much like me. The socially awkward clumsy screw-up that still manages to find love.

wait... you changed it from complete to incomplete?

THERE IS A GOD

:DDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDD

More Caramel!

ohyou. making me love ponies. the nerve.

Grandpa will be mad that hes not at home, they didnt sleep around till being married in his youth!!!!

Yes! well done, this is definitely up there as one of my favorite romance fics or all time, next to "Get along home" with big mac and Ditzy, but that's besides the point, you have successfully crafted an excellent, but still innocent story and i absolutely love it.

I have mixed feelings about this fic. They are HNNNGGGGG and D'AWW.

you are continuing this!! toffee is so win, its almost not funny... but it is hilarious! caramel is like me but doubly awkward. this story has made me wish twilight was my girlfriend. that is hard to do. here is a and a to express my love for this story!

Oh thank you so much for extending the story! This is too good for just 4 chapters

GodDamnit. Stop being so adorkable you two. I have enough OTP's as it is.

These two are almost as cute a Fluttershy...almost

d'aw, this is adorable :)

And here I am thinking you were done with this story. Glad to see it's back.

IT CONTINUES!!!!

"He briefly wondered if he’d see her again. Or if he wanted too. Why ruin a perfectly good memory? She’d probably want nothing to do with him if they ever got to know each other."

Holy crap, this sounds exactly like something out of my stream of consciousness.

I mean yeah, I know everyone goes through their awkward phase, which makes Caramel so easy to identify with, but that doesn't make the writing any less brilliant.

I'm not really sure how to say this, so here's a squee *squeeeeeeeeeeeee*

Yay, very glad to see a continuation to this. Twilight's best straight pairing, in my opinion.

D'aaaaaaaawwwwwwwww....

But seriously, this is just absolutely adorable. Here's looking forward to more!

D'aaaaaaaawwwwwwwww....

But seriously, this is just absolutely adorable. Here's looking forward to more!

>>Sees this story updated

AWWW YEAH  

Can't wait for more! This is an adorable story!

fantastic

>>1150011500

Best. MLP fanfiction review. Ever.

This story is great! I am eating granny smith apples and dipping them in caramel dip while reading this!

Yay! More Caramel/Twilight awkwardness! Can't wait for more. Some of the grammar was a bit off. Might want to make sure your editor has had his coffee. :P

This is quite enjoyable, I can't wait to see how the dinner turns out. I smell shenanigans.

But I still don't understand, what DOES grandpa do with his corn?

Hmmmm... Shipping is a touchy subject, and the fact that my favorite of the mane six is being shipped makes this doubly dangerous... And yet, I'm sitting here grinning ear to ear! I demand more! ...And to a lesser extent, I demand to know what grandpa does with his corn.

Awwww Caramel's adorable. So sweet reading about him made my day.

This is great so far! And, Gramps reading EQUESTRIA DAILY like the website where most everything pony related is posted? Nice one, I give this chapter two gushy thumbs up!

So so so very adorable!

how adorkable!

Please continue this! Trevor finds this story to be most entertaining!

~ Magical Trevor, Minstrel of Equestria

another adorkable chapter!

MOAR!

>>1150011500 When does this HNNNNNNNNNG come into play? When they're stuttering like a coupla nerotic parrots? 'cause that's me. Arounf Grrlz I don't know.

Oh noes I CAN RELATE and I don't know if it's a good or a bad thing.

One thing's for sure, it means you can write, now i'm off to read and hopefully compliment the rest of the chapters :)

YESYESYESYES! It's so cuuuuute!

I feel like a young colt again when I read this.

One small quirk I have is that the sentences are really short and kind of forced together. You would get a better flow to storytelling if the sentences were weaved together like a fine fabric, don't be afraid to use a comma and some adjectives!

Good stuff anyways, onward for great justice.

"He considered faking his own death, but he couldn’t do that to Twilight, he’d only just met her. Caramel had very little relationship experience, but he figured that death was usually considered a deal breaker. "

I think I broke a rib laughing. It hurts

so...wehn si the enxt part?

TheCityMaster approves of this fic moustache:

Very good series so far keep up the good work

>>39313931

Do you just post that everywhere?

>>39313931

Do you just post that everywhere?

>>1154011540

OMG Marksman's here too?! Coooooool!

Now you got me curious, what does his grandpa do with his corn when he eats it that makes it so bad.

>Story is updated.

*Puts on shades*

AWWW YEAAAHH!

Unhelpfulness aside, I just love the characterizations; I think you're keeping Twilight true to the show and you've got a great personality for Caramel going.  Keep up the good work!

Fantastic.

Yes, the corn is evil!

That was probably the best chapter I've read of this story yet. It might just be personal taste talking, but I loved the sharing they had over the pancakes. Just talking about who they are, and what they thought, and their connection. Very, very sweet.

All the other stuff was great, too, as usual. Caramel and Twi are adorable, and there were a couple moments that made me laugh. Yay, Squeaks! Love your work

This story's great! Keep it up man! Also when will gun with occasional pony be updated?

<-- My reaction when I saw this updated.

<-- My reaction upon reading it.

Keep this up, it's awesome!