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Concerned about the confidence of some of her students, Cheerilee enlists Rainbow Dash to take six children: Sweetie Belle, Silver Spoon, Snails, Dinky Doo, Pipsqueak and Archer on a week-long camping trip to Whitetail Woods. Rainbow enlists the aid of Big Macintosh as her co-chaperone as she tries to teach the young fillies and colts about camping, teamwork, confidence and how to get along and fend for themselves.

They are so doomed.

Future chapters will feature some action as well as appearances by other characters. Some shipping may be involved.

Please read and review!

First Published
22nd Jan 2012
Last Modified
26th Oct 2012
#1 · 152w, 16h ago · 2 · · Prologue ·

"Concerned about the confidence of some of her students, Cheerilee enlists Rainbow Dash to take six children..."

"They are so doomed."

YES!  

(Frankly I've been waiting for someone to go the 'Dash takes care of children, hilarity ensues' route, and I'm glad that this has finally happened.  :rainbowkiss:  )

#2 · 152w, 15h ago · · · Prologue ·

Tracking with the force of a thousand suns.

#3 · 152w, 15h ago · · · Prologue ·

I am so gonna track this, and not just because of potential MacDash.

That's my own hopes. Don't let me get in the way of your schemes.:pinkiecrazy:

#4 · 152w, 11h ago · · · Prologue ·

this looks like it'll be a fun story!:pinkiehappy:

and like BlackM stated, MacinDash Potential! :rainbowhuh::eeyup:

#5 · 152w, 25m ago · · · Prologue ·

This promises to be fun, but please tell me you're not just going to have Big Macintosh go through the whole thing without ever saying anything but "Eeyup." Yes, he says it a lot, but it's not the only thing he ever says. Just remember the episode Applebuck Season; he was speaking in complete sentences in the scenes where he appeared.

#6 · 152w, 21m ago · · · Prologue ·

>>150459

Heh, no problem he WILL talk. I just wanted to play with the whole 'eeyup' thing at least once before I choke some complete sentences out of him.

#7 · 151w, 6d ago · · · Prologue ·

Rainbow Dash teaching the little fillies and colts how to be confident and be able to camp... Epona and Gaea help them all.

One little thing: re-read the sentence with Ditzy's spinning eyes. You might notice an error. :raritywink:

Great chapter though. Just try not to paint Mac as 'submissive' all the way through; I know you're trying to make Rainbow the loud one, but he's sort of coming off as a bit of a beta faggot at the moment. Food for thought and all that.

Keep up the good work.

Hmm... ok with Big Mac balancing out Rainbow's.... Awesomeness maybe they won't have as many problems as I first thought.... that is assuming of course the foals don't kill or seriously maim each other first.

So there might be the possibility of MacDash, always nice, and Pip, Archer and Dinky becoming best of buds.

>>152332 Forgive him if he seems somewhat docile, yeah? If I were him, I'd still be thinking on the potential foreshadowing in Applejack's last comment in the first chapter. :rainbowlaugh: Dash is gonna do her absolute best to rip those foals a new one (a new sense of self-confidence, you understand), and Mac's no dumb mule--he was probably struck with premonitions of doom not five minutes after agreeing to this little adventure.

So Dinky is the chief of the group, always thought Snails talent was french cuisine, most people just go for the slow thing. Anyway looking forward to this, and more of Dashie trying to take charge over Big Mac, that looks like it'll be entertaining.

>>152332

Don't worry. Big Mac will have his moment and have his say. I just imagine him as a more strong but silent, go with the flow kinda pony....up to a point, anyway.

MUST HAVE MOAR!! :flutterrage:

I AGREE WITH DARKLORD! Please sir, may I have some moar? *shows really bad puppy face* :twilightoops:

>>155521 PLEASE IS FOR THE WEAK YOU MUST DEMAND MOAR!! :pinkiecrazy::flutterrage::twilightangry2:

*in a Kosh voice* And so it begins

So Silvy does has some sense, and Archer is becoming her new bud. RD is awesome but easily distracted, Big Mac can sing... good chapter

This is only going to get better.

I like how you aren't neglecting a single character either. It's a lot to work with, but it ensures that there's never a dull moment or a slow chapter either. The best part is, we've got a whole slew of chapters to look forward to full of character interaction.

Don't stop.:rainbowdetermined2:

I'm rather enjoying the depth we are seeing of each character as the story goes on. Well done!

Looks like rainbow dash gave that little shit what she deserved

#20 · 151w, 4d ago · · · Prologue ·

I like this idea.:pinkiehappy:

They are so doomed.

How will the other campers do with those two being sprayed by a skunk?  I hope to see the next chapter.

>>152903

It would be a pleasant surprise if Snails talent was french cuisine :rainbowlaugh:

Darn it. A few days? How am I gonna survive without this fic?! :raritycry:

Characters are excellent as always. The description is easy to flow with and not too overly complicated, but still well done.

I'm gonna make a prediction here and say that they're going to encounter a bear, and Macintosh will have to fight it. :eeyup: And it will be awesome. :moustache:

See ya in a few days.

Good fic, I can't wait until you get back for more. Good characterization, yada, yada, yada... Some nice jokes between the campers, yada, yada, yada. Here, have a snail.

Great chapter, ok so it seems that the youngins aren't going to maim each other and Silvy is a good pony. And the MacDash... :twilightsmile: good job.

And then Luna comes in to DOUBLE TEH FUN!

Once again well done! :moustache:

>>159969 I can thank King Cheetah for that idea

http://www.furaffinity.net/view/6618097/

also thank him for the Snappil Bloom pairing

http://www.furaffinity.net/view/6602938/

#30 · 151w, 2d ago · · · Chapter 5 ·

Oh my a belching contest... yeah that is something I could see Rainbow doing, amazing the Silvy won.

#31 · 151w, 2d ago · · · Chapter 5 ·

>>162712

It's always the quiet ones that surprise you.

#32 · 151w, 2d ago · · · Chapter 5 ·

Awww yeah. I was a little surprised to see this updated before your trip, but I was satisfied all the same. :pinkiehappy:

Still no complaints about the story. Everything is top notch. The spacing is a little hard to ignore, but I can live with it.

Totally gonna track this to the end of times.

Psst. I know who she was dreaming about. :eeyup:

#33 · 151w, 2d ago · · · Prologue ·

It would be funnier if he said "My dear sister, I'm quite appalled that you would have such vulgar thoughts."

Great start, though!

#34 · 151w, 2d ago · · · Chapter 5 ·

this is going to be awesome:pinkiehappy:

hope you have fun on your trip

Keep up the good work.

#36 · 151w, 22h ago · · · Chapter 5 ·

Interesting.  Keep up the good work.

#37 · 151w, 15h ago · · · Chapter 5 ·

oh man cant wait the next update lol really good story i'm tracking since i read the first chapter, i like all the characters and how you make silver spoon be nice but still need some work with snails i see, and want to see what its going to happen with Big mac and Rainbow :eeyup::rainbowkiss:.

Well as i said before cant wait for the next update

Pipsqueak is a pimp  ..........

Pimpsqueak!

I am so happy to see that this has updated. :pinkiehappy:

So far so good. I can only say that I want to see what happens next.

All my yay. :yay:


“Two words my little ones: Prank. War.”

OH MY GOD cant wait for see more of this :pinkiehappy:

>>193144

He be getting all the fillies.

I'm glad I decided to give this a try! It made for some very well-written late night reading. I can't wait to actually read in the day! Please do keep this supply of epic story writing coming! I can't wait for the next chapter. I also like the idea of Silver Spoon being rehabilitated, in a way. Good show!

Great stuff so far, keep up the good work. :pinkiehappy:

ah young love/angst/drama/comedy.

also, i keep seeing pip as a ponyfied Negi Springfield. and i don't  know why.

Gee I wonder where that song came from... Still a good choice.

Damn, that is on hay of a chapter. Believable in almost every way, and prank... I'm pretty sure their flanks are going to be toast for that. The fighting, a bit sudden but under the circumstances it is understandable... plus I look at the napping thing as part of the Pegasi physiology.

Great chapter, and hope that this get resolved quickly.

In the Name of Her Serene Majesty,

Celestia's Paladin: For Honor and Duty, For the Sun and Moon

ooo. Wonderful, amazing conflict.

I was all aboard when this looked to be a nice, feel good story.

I am three times more interested now.

Shoot, their tempers exploded then exploded again! I can't wait to see how this plays out.

Keep up the excellent work, it's appreciated.  

everything was fine and suddenly :twilightangry2:

NOOOO :applecry:PLEASE i dont want to see them fight any more :eeyup: :rainbowdetermined2: *cryes

lol cant wait to see how this will solve keep up the good work :twilightsmile:

That tip about moss--- it will get your butt LOST.

It doesn't grow on the north side of the tree, it grows on the SHADED side of the tree.... which in the Northern hemisphere is the North side, and in the Southern hemisphere the South side, but circumstances (such as a densely wooded forest!) will result on it growing on ALL sides.

Big Macintosh tossed Rainbow a grin. “Sounds like yer gonna have to give them something to convince them.”

Rainbow gave her junior co-counselor an even look. “Really. Like what?”

“Maaaaybe you should offer them something. Something…cool.”

In my head: "How about survival?" Rainbow Dash growled, staring hard at the group of foals. "Survival's pretty cool." :twilightangry2:

Dunno why, but the RD in my head went full-on demonic at that point. Distorted voice, flaming eyes and everything.

:rainbowderp: Considering seeking psychological help to deal with this problem.

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