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A writer. I try to write at least... Video games are REALLY distracting though...and work...and life...Eh. Well if you have time go ahead and give my stuff a chance ^~^ I'm a pretty nice person

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Twilight used to think she could handle stress pretty well. The smartypants incident however proved her wrong. So she decides that when her friends aren't there she needs somepony there to help her through the stress.

So what does our lavender librarian do?

She creates an artificial intelligence.

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Definitely unique idea... I like unique. Seems a little rushed but not everything needs to be 'War and Peace'

I'll read your second chapter now. :pinkiehappy:

Ok, a quick linking chapter... I'll follow to see what you do with this.

I like the idea, but... this needs a massive overhaul on grammar, pacing, and punctuation.

Also, can I get a dollar everytime I see the word "ponequinn"?
Last thing, is the enchanted ponequin just white? Or does it look like Twilight now?

I'll give this a favorite for now to see where this all goes. I'll hold off on a vote for now though.

1979302 i think maybe off-white (Twilight coat clour but faded)

will the ponnyquin look like dusk shine? make it look like that! pretty please! :twilightsheepish:

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As of now it still looks like a normal ponnequin. (after all the only current difference is that crystal and three hairs in it's head)

Also yeah this is after the first pre read. I'm still looking for someone to go over it once more in more depth. I know computers not grammar. lol.

Spike's cooking is amazing, if every episode but the one that shall not be mentioned is to be believed. The only thing I didn't like was the last two lines. It makes it sound like Twilight thinks Spike is a nussiance to Rarity, even though Spike is constantly helping her in any way he can.

Playing goddess and creating life, not a good plan there Twilight, take it from Bender.

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Oh I see what you mean.

No she earned the bits thanks to the fact that she had instilled the idea of "A Mare Thing" into him preventing him from asking more into the situation which due to how she was acting should be obvious she wouldn't hold out against long.

Also there was nothing to say where he was going although I think you all have an idea already.

But no she doesn't think him a nuicense to Rarity

1981903 Oh, that makes sense. It was just in that position it was... misconceiving. Does make you wonder how that came up :duck:

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It's been changed up now.

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So I'm giving you guys (and gals) a chance on naming our resident Artificial Intelligence. Give me any suggestions on a name.

Two Things.

It's a she.
Take into mind the little that i have told you about her so far.

If one of the names works well I will use it. Otherwise I have a backup if no one says anything or make troll names. (No HAL jokes please)

2033729 Hmmm.. Maybe Quill Dropper?

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Interesting. Any reason why?

2033772 Well, maybe it's because ponnequins are made out of polymer (plastic), and if "she" touches a thing it would drop... And it can be for both gender... :twilightsheepish:

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By touches, you mean, if she would somehow, get the ability to move and then grab something, it would fall?

2033920 She could drop something at first, but if you make her a unicorn, then she can't have any problem with "touchy" things..... But if she is really going to be a unicorn, at first she isn't used to magical grasp, and then Twilight gave her that name, and then she later on quickly manages to use her magic very well like Twilight. And you can make her personality clumsy. Nerds are clumsy, too you know. :twilightsmile:

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I'll take it into consideration. It just seems like a kinda demeaning name is all.

Hopefully others have ideas too.

2033729 moonlight sparkle?
and what is "HAL"?

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Alright. New bit I shoulda mentioned.

It is a separate entity from Twilight. Not to mention I doubt she would purposely put a part of her name on something let alone name something like herself.

Therefore, what i'm getting at is, avoid parts of Twi's name.

Also remember to explain why you chose the name you have.

The great knight Sir Spikeington of Canterlot laid seige to many such forts in his youth. :moustache::facehoof:

My goodness. This other conscious... It's almost like a tulpa. :twilightoops: Be careful Twi! I'm not getting good feelings from this.

Lol, so Twilight thinks Rarity has a nice... Ha! I'm over here laughing with AP now. :rainbowlaugh:

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Excellent. That is the reaction I wished for after all.

Also if you have an idea for a name for AP,

Give the name and reasons for the name.

I'm letting readers decide.

Well if this had been any other story and the type had been diffrent I would have started to worry about the AP building a personality so quickly, but then again it is based off of twilight so...it makes sense

BOOK FORTRESS!!!!!

Sorry, had to^^;

Hmm.... Somehow I think that Twilights AP and EDI from Mass Effect would be really good friends...^^ lol

This experiment may have the unnoticed side effect of preventing her from finding a stallion with those qualities since she would not be seeing or noticing anypony with these qualities..
Behind every great successful person -or pony, is a good (male/female) acting as a steadying influence and teammate.
Would the AI ever figure this out and "arrange things" like some classic AI tales? :raritywink:

Book Fortress 2.

And Quinn would be a nice name for the AP.

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Mostly, I was thinking Mannequin and Harley Quinn.

My mind can make connections from two completely unrelated things in under 3 minutes.

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Nice. Harley is one of my favorite henchmen/ Villianous sidekicks.

Also If you can think of anything you could put toward the name idea I would appreciate it. Although you have given me a good idea.

In the only library, in the town of Ponyville, there is a very curious unicorn.

There shouldn't be a ',' in between library and in.

Hide everything. Do not mention this to anyone

Anypony.

high magic and light reflective crystal, Spell quadruple checked

Spell should be miniscule.

Twilight’s nervousness seemed to returned at hearing this.

It should be ''seemed to have returned'' or just ''return''. It just sounds better. Also, maybe change 'at' to 'by'.

“Now,, dear what is this-“

Only one , between Now, and dear.

That's all I could find. Hope I helped! And here's a moustache for your great work :moustache:

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Hey thanks. This is the only chapter I didn't edit myself. My sis did a kinda crappy job for being an english major. Oh well.

2064141 No problem. :twilightsheepish: it's my gift for you for proofreading my story.

Nice update can't wait for the next part. :yay:

:moustache: Elementary, my dear Rarity.

Oh, that's just too damn funny. I think Spike would have seen exactly what was going on behind that door, sans the thought going into it. :raritywink:

I think you're ding a good job of showing Rarity and Spike's relation. Not sure if it's on the romantic side, but it could be. Kind of a neutral area at the moment.

Ah, Detective Rarity... :raritywink: lol I bet nothing good and everything hilarious will come of this.
Rarity is best interrogator in this.

riiiiiiiiiiight cause creating an artificial personality/intelligence proves your sanity. great logic there twilight great logic. and rarity as a detective funny. this sounds like it will get interesting.

So. Good news all. I, as I type this, am working on the next chapter. It actually seemed like I may have accidentally made it a lil bit long. Opps. Well I'm sure ya'll won't mind right? anyway. Point is. I have for the most part chosen a name. If you have any last minute Ideas throw me a PM and I'll look at it. Untill then. Stay shiny you sexy motherfuckers.

Is Twilight going to tell anypony about the AP she created?

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Nope. She doesn't want anyone knowing that she has something to keep her calm when her friends are around.

2271489 But knowing her the others will find out.

Little did she know however that up until before she had entered the room Spike had his head up against the wall, listening in on the room she had just left and he was currently wide awake

Uhm.... I thought she put a one-side-sound-stopping (or whatever^^) spell on the room? How could Spike still be listening in on her?

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He didn't know she put the spell up. Remember she said out loud what the spell did after she cast it.

Therefore my thoughts were that he was still straining to hear something even though there was no way for him to have heard anything after the spell. But, imma change that bit up a lil to make it make more sense later on.

first thoughts as I read the description;
"...it's not going to try and replace her, is it?"
damn, mind, you sure come up with creepy ideas.... :twilightoops:

silly brain, be quiet and read the story....

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